Daniel Turner Poet Sonnet

California Dreaming

On the coast of Northern California
The salty air will tear the naked eye
Hiding tears that fall for my senora
From lovers holding hands a passing by
Spanish tunes are playing on the wi-fi
Recalling now a time when we were here
Friendship shared will have to last a lifetime
With passing days those times are treasured near
Remarkable how days can seem like years
When friends are parted by their hopes and dreams
This sand we walked together caught our tears
Now swimming in the oceans flowing stream
I hope they join together into one
And swim forever underneath the sun.



 An original poem by Daniel Turner

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Charmaine Chircop March 16, 2016 at 3:13 PM This sand we walked together caught our tears -Exceptional line, a beautiful sonnet! Daniel Turner March 16, 2016 at 3:16 PM Thank you, Charmaine. I am still practicing on the sonnets and the IP and as you can see from the comments below I am getting the help I have asked for. I am glad you like it. Who knows I might write one for YOU. Peace sweet lady:)

Andrea Dietrich March 15, 2016 at 3:34 PM this is a great take on "California dreaming' a nice and nostalgic poem. Daniel Turner March 15, 2016 at 3:37 PM Looks OK? Thank you, I personally thought it turned out well. I appreciate your flowers as they are lovely:):)

Nette Onclaud March 15, 2016 at 9:06 AM ohh, how sentimental and flowing, daniel... keep it up!..huggs Daniel Turner March 15, 2016 at 10:00 AM Thank you, nette. Still hard at work. You always make the day a little brighter. Have a blessed day. Peace:)

Walter T. Ashe March 15, 2016 at 12:02 AM I'm learning something new constantly and I really enjoyed this Daniel! "how days can seem like years"....true truth! :-) Daniel Turner March 15, 2016 at 6:29 AM Thank you, Walter. For me learning anything is a blast. I love to learn new things. I always enjoy your visits. Peace my friend:)

Tom Quigley March 14, 2016 at 10:58 PM Great poem. The emotion is deep and bittersweet. Only a couple of teensy thoughts, if I may: Maybe "I hope THAT they change INTO tears of joy" flows better? Maybe not. Also, "employed" not explained. What does it mean? Maybe other word? JM$0.02 Daniel Turner March 14, 2016 at 11:03 PM OK. Thanks I'll fix it. I really appreciate your help. Peace my friend:):)