Caged Darkness

Wow never saw this before. Really impressive. A fave

I can feel myself in your poem

A breathtaking piece, so many glorious images, yet still brought down to our level...

A beautiful contest contender, with stunning images. I adored the cinquain. Best wishes for the contest. :)

A very poetic write IE, i particularly like stars scatter secrets - for me stars house planets and life is on the planets so life is the scattered secrets, really enjoyed that

'Aching wind, somber silence, diamond dreams'.... ! Your epithets are unique and piercing. In your monoku, I hear your 'heartbeats drifting through caged darkness.' Your monoku unwinds the subtle nuances of sorrow that lurk in the unlit corners of your mind in a poignantly succinct way. All the Best dear Empress.

wonderful piece, there is always some hope, merry christmas poet

Time does unravel truth. Well said. Hold onto that hope. :)

So well done. A beautiful succinct piece.

Beautiful imagery nicely woven in emotions, Ink. Expert rendering of 3 forms seamlessly blended in lovely tone and flow.

Oh i wonder what it is like to be laced in sherbet flakes.. sound sweet.. All three of your forms are full of metaphors, the first is the cinquains which highlights the angst you are trying to display and the tanka expresses your feelings in greater deal hidden behind metaphors and great use of alliteration and you monoku concludes it perfeclty.. i hope someone can listen to your heartbeat and understand them.. Best of luck in the contest dear..

Dear Ink Empress, the trio of forms blend seamlessly together to produce stunning cohesive flow and imagery. The Monoku is an ingenious finale to an exquisite emotive piece. Fantastic, my friend! I feel this will score high in the contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Those night silent screams can also be heard sometimes. I really loved the last line "time unravels truth" it's like a rubber band, it comes back firing hard. And one day the sky is going to be too full with secrets, it would pour out like rainfall. Lovely written Ink.

Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this one with us. I do wonder what secrets those stars hold. Thanks for stopping by my page. Sara K

Dear Ink, the arrangement of these three forms (Cinquain, Tanka, Monoku) is very wonderful. It implies perfectionism, gracefully gliding in complete balance. The deft use of diction, accentuated by the alluring use of alliteration, is extremely captivating. The intense cravings of the heart, as you have eloquently expressed, try to escape from a life of secret, anxiously looking for the mystic portions of the universe to expose its hidden enigmas.

What a creative/wonderful write. Not easy to write. Good Luck... Looks like we both did this one. Merry Christmas..................

Oh my, this is a gorgeous take for the contest, dear Ink! Your pattern of placing these forms really feels so impeccable as it flows in a mellifluous way.The wordplay along with alliterative elegance is so stunning, as you've described how the heartbeat wishes to emerge with truths from the caged darkness and seeks the elements of cosmos to reveal those secrets..Ahh, this truly mesmerized my heart! "I'm laced in sherbet flakes","stars scatter secrets in silver across moonlit"Wow, magical this is

Wow …. I’ve never read three in one together . You did it so flawlessly.