Burning Man

Further down a slow, sad spiral I sought my youth in Truth's denial- contrary to fact, the hardest impact, the trek would take me ten-million miles! My strength depleted, my quest completed, I rest at last for a little while... Just give me grief beyond belief of which I may find no relief for soon I will tire with the wish to expire- Let the fire burn bright, yet brief!

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/9/2014 10:29:00 AM

Enjoyed the write on Many Miles Away theme, congrats on a fine win,chan

Skat A

Date: 4/7/2014 6:03:00 PM

HI CHAN, Congratulations, a wonderful win. Thank you for sharing how far your distance goes. ~SKAT~

Roger Horsch

Date: 4/7/2014 10:12:00 AM

Congrats on your win and thank you for entering my contest.....Roger

Mark Peterson

Date: 11/3/2013 7:32:00 AM

I added back the stanza you liked. It just vexed me at the time. I also re-titled the poem to "Wonder and Dismay," which works better for me than Patterns and Prose. Thanks for your encouragement and suggestions.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 11/3/2013 10:02:00 AM

Glad to hear you went back to your original stanza, Mark. I understand completely that feeling of being vexed and stuck. You can definitely count me a fan of your work and I look forward to reading more :)

Robin Davis

Date: 10/30/2013 5:18:00 PM

Chan The Man This is a very emotional piece. I can feel the sorrow and pain, making me sad you "meanie" LOL Thanks for the great comment on my Friends poem. Love and Hugs Sweet Pea

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/31/2013 8:55:00 AM

Thanks for all the reviews, Sweet Pea! :) <3

Joseph Matose

Date: 10/30/2013 11:56:00 AM

Archaic. I hear echoes of rhyme within the poem- it taste to me like a scrambled egg; whipped and mixed to create an omelette. Great one again from Rhyme Master. Friend, JM

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/31/2013 8:55:00 AM

lol Thanks, JM! ;)