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Burning Man

Further down a slow, sad spiral I sought my youth in Truth's denial- contrary to fact, the hardest impact, the trek would take me ten-million miles! My strength depleted, my quest completed, I rest at last for a little while... Just give me grief beyond belief of which I may find no relief for soon I will tire with the wish to expire- Let the fire burn bright, yet brief!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/9/2014 10:29:00 AM
Enjoyed the write on Many Miles Away theme, congrats on a fine win,chan
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Date: 4/8/2014 7:55:00 AM
Great poem and win, congrats!
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Date: 4/7/2014 6:03:00 PM
HI CHAN, Congratulations, a wonderful win. Thank you for sharing how far your distance goes. ~SKAT~
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Date: 4/7/2014 10:12:00 AM
Congrats on your win and thank you for entering my contest.....Roger
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Date: 11/3/2013 7:32:00 AM
I added back the stanza you liked. It just vexed me at the time. I also re-titled the poem to "Wonder and Dismay," which works better for me than Patterns and Prose. Thanks for your encouragement and suggestions.
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Date: 11/3/2013 10:02:00 AM
Glad to hear you went back to your original stanza, Mark. I understand completely that feeling of being vexed and stuck. You can definitely count me a fan of your work and I look forward to reading more :)
Date: 10/30/2013 5:18:00 PM
Chan The Man This is a very emotional piece. I can feel the sorrow and pain, making me sad you "meanie" LOL Thanks for the great comment on my Friends poem. Love and Hugs Sweet Pea
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Date: 10/31/2013 8:55:00 AM
Thanks for all the reviews, Sweet Pea! :) <3
Date: 10/30/2013 11:56:00 AM
Archaic. I hear echoes of rhyme within the poem- it taste to me like a scrambled egg; whipped and mixed to create an omelette. Great one again from Rhyme Master. Friend, JM
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Date: 10/31/2013 8:55:00 AM
lol Thanks, JM! ;)