Buried Hearts

O travel bound
Tread gently
A million hearts in ground


Winner of No. 1 place in Haiku 101 Contest of Charles Henderson. Judged on 11/23/2012
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Brown Avatar
December 3, 2012 at 6:05 AM
Congratulations on your super win in Charles' "Haiku" contest Mohammad. I am sorry this is a very late comment. Love, Carol
Yamin Avatar
December 3, 2012 at 5:34 PM
Thanks for your message of congratulations, Carol. I am indebted to you for your kindness. Have a nice day.
Dietrich Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 12:47 AM
nicely done, mohammad and congrats on this one. I remember how much I liked it from before.
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 4:26 PM
Thanks Andrea for your very kind congratulatory message and for your admiration. God bless you
Kendrick Avatar
November 24, 2012 at 6:16 PM
I truly like the meaning of this winning one..Congrats on your win..Sara
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 4:17 PM
Thanks for admiring the meaning of my Haiku. I am glad I have been able to convey my thoughts in a seventeen syllable poem. Have a nice day.
Guzzi Avatar
November 24, 2012 at 6:10 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 4:01 PM
Thanks Debbie for inviting me to contribute. I owe the win to you.
Tsiluma Avatar
November 24, 2012 at 7:54 AM
A big congrats on your well written Haiku!
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 3:59 PM
Thanks Vicky. You are very kind
Widjanarko Avatar
November 24, 2012 at 6:20 AM
Hey Mohammad, congrats on your first win! :D - Hug, Yanny
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 3:58 PM
Thanks Yanny. Have a nice day.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
November 24, 2012 at 5:35 AM
Big congratulations on your win Mohammad, hugs xx
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 1:48 PM
Thank you for your congratulations
A   Avatar
November 23, 2012 at 6:11 PM
Mohammad, congratulations with your haiku win,,, take care..pd
Yamin Avatar
November 25, 2012 at 1:38 PM
Thanks for congratulating me on my Haiku's win.
Dietrich Avatar
November 5, 2012 at 11:26 PM
wow, this is DEEP and really good. So many hearts buried in the ground. Well, I just realized I have not only lost all my soupmail but I have no member area and I cannot post poetry anymore or reply to blogs. I sure hope they fix this mess. I hate not having a member area to go to!!!
Yamin Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 12:53 PM
I am glad you like this Haiku. Thanks. I am sure soup team will salvage your member area and your mail. Just be patient. Love.
Effendi Avatar
October 30, 2011 at 7:11 AM
Taha mentioned of this one to me. But the effect it leaves on the reader is far greater than when read out to you. I really loved it uncle. Thank you for commenting on Black Widow, your comments are always encouraging, dear uncle
Yamin Avatar
October 30, 2011 at 7:44 PM
Thanks, Husain. You are always very kind. --Mohammad
 Avatar
October 29, 2011 at 9:11 PM
Thought-provoking piece. The middle line links the other two and is probably the central message if I'm interpreting this correctly. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen
Yamin Avatar
October 30, 2011 at 7:50 PM
Thanks for your comments, Karen. You can't be more right about the central line. An enlightened comments such as yours gives great pleasure. I am grateful. -Mohammad
Minardi Avatar
October 27, 2011 at 9:42 AM
The buried hearts will leave mark... the risk for tasting love.. heavy meaning inside a haiku. Greatly written, Mohammad.
Yamin Avatar
October 27, 2011 at 10:07 AM
Thanks, Dinda for your heart warming comments. Have a nice day. -Mohammad
Stella Avatar
October 24, 2011 at 5:46 PM
this is more of senryu due to fact human like unless using ground then maybe haiku I just wrote a combination of Haiku/senryu book it's called time for haiku can be found at barnes and noble amazon and lulu if intrested thanks for sharing and for your kind comment on my verse poem keep up the great writing
Yamin Avatar
October 25, 2011 at 9:36 AM
Thanks for your enlightening comment. I'll certainly look for your book at Amazon. -Mohammad
Susan Avatar
August 11, 2011 at 10:51 AM
I like how this poem can be interpreted in different ways. hearts of the dead? broken hearts? both powerful messages. p.s. thanks for your comments :)
Yamin Avatar
August 11, 2011 at 11:56 AM
Thanks for your encouraging comments Susan. I am so glad you have reached the poem's soul. What else to expect from a talented poet like you? God bless you! -Mohammad
Mannan Avatar
February 24, 2011 at 8:24 PM
This is awesome Mohammad. a million hearts in the ground. Wow.
Fraser Avatar
February 13, 2011 at 7:12 AM
That there is Mohammad. As long as we remember them. Heartfelt Haiku....:)
 Avatar
November 12, 2010 at 2:06 PM
Powerful message carried in this concise poem. Well done! It was good to see your name in my inbox. Thank you for your kind comment. Hope things are going well for you. Best wishes. Karen
Anish Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 12:59 PM
Who are the million hearts in the ground? Are they the departed? Fine haiku! Where can I get a copy of the rubai that you translated? Peace and Blessings Matthew Anish
Yamin Avatar
August 11, 2011 at 12:10 PM
I must have responded to your comments earlier but perhaps not the question you have posed about who the million hearts are. Matthew, it is the heart of the lovers that perished. Now reread the poem and see what does it stir in your poetic sensibility. -Mohammad
Haick Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 2:39 PM
My sentiments too! Great job! Peace, Audrey
Ahmad Avatar
October 6, 2009 at 3:54 AM
Nice!
Kendrick Avatar
August 19, 2009 at 12:35 AM
I like the wording of your Haiku. We don't think about these like this very often espcially when we are young. We are taught to respect the graves that are marked but there are many from generations past that are not marked. Keep writing. Sara
 Avatar
August 9, 2009 at 1:02 PM
Much to think about in your words. The title compliments the piece. Keep on writing. Karen
Anish Avatar
June 23, 2009 at 12:19 PM
Seems like an Omar Khaym style of poem. It was quite well written and succinct. Yours Matthew Anish
Effendi Avatar
May 29, 2009 at 1:59 PM
Splendid indeed.... Too great a meaning in too little words. Excellent work... Also, thanks for the encouraging me into poetrysoup... I certainly have a lot to learn from you dear Yamin uncle... Great work once again. Love, HABIB
Ahmad Avatar
May 29, 2009 at 12:17 PM
EXCELLENT! AMAZING! NO WORDS CAN EXPRESS... I SIMPLE LOVED THIS!!!
12
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace