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Buried Hearts

O travel bound Tread gently A million hearts in ground Winner of No. 1 place in Haiku 101 Contest of Charles Henderson. Judged on 11/23/2012

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/3/2012 6:05:00 AM

Congratulations on your super win in Charles' "Haiku" contest Mohammad. I am sorry this is a very late comment. Love, Carol

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 12/3/2012 5:34:00 PM

Thanks for your message of congratulations, Carol. I am indebted to you for your kindness. Have a nice day.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/25/2012 12:47:00 AM

nicely done, mohammad and congrats on this one. I remember how much I liked it from before.

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 4:26:00 PM

Thanks Andrea for your very kind congratulatory message and for your admiration. God bless you

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/24/2012 6:16:00 PM

I truly like the meaning of this winning one..Congrats on your win..Sara

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 4:17:00 PM

Thanks for admiring the meaning of my Haiku. I am glad I have been able to convey my thoughts in a seventeen syllable poem. Have a nice day.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/24/2012 6:10:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 4:01:00 PM

Thanks Debbie for inviting me to contribute. I owe the win to you.

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 11/24/2012 7:54:00 AM

A big congrats on your well written Haiku!

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 3:59:00 PM

Thanks Vicky. You are very kind

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 11/24/2012 6:20:00 AM

Hey Mohammad, congrats on your first win! :D - Hug, Yanny

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 3:58:00 PM

Thanks Yanny. Have a nice day.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 11/24/2012 5:35:00 AM

Big congratulations on your win Mohammad, hugs xx

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 1:48:00 PM

Thank you for your congratulations

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/23/2012 6:11:00 PM

Mohammad, congratulations with your haiku win,,, take care..pd

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/25/2012 1:38:00 PM

Thanks for congratulating me on my Haiku's win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/5/2012 11:26:00 PM

wow, this is DEEP and really good. So many hearts buried in the ground. Well, I just realized I have not only lost all my soupmail but I have no member area and I cannot post poetry anymore or reply to blogs. I sure hope they fix this mess. I hate not having a member area to go to!!!

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 11/6/2012 12:53:00 PM

I am glad you like this Haiku. Thanks. I am sure soup team will salvage your member area and your mail. Just be patient. Love.

M. Hussain Effendi

Date: 10/30/2011 7:11:00 AM

Taha mentioned of this one to me. But the effect it leaves on the reader is far greater than when read out to you. I really loved it uncle. Thank you for commenting on Black Widow, your comments are always encouraging, dear uncle

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 10/30/2011 7:44:00 PM

Thanks, Husain. You are always very kind. --Mohammad

Date: 10/29/2011 9:11:00 PM

Thought-provoking piece. The middle line links the other two and is probably the central message if I'm interpreting this correctly. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 10/30/2011 7:50:00 PM

Thanks for your comments, Karen. You can't be more right about the central line. An enlightened comments such as yours gives great pleasure. I am grateful. -Mohammad

Dinda Minardi

Date: 10/27/2011 9:42:00 AM

The buried hearts will leave mark... the risk for tasting love.. heavy meaning inside a haiku. Greatly written, Mohammad.

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 10/27/2011 10:07:00 AM

Thanks, Dinda for your heart warming comments. Have a nice day. -Mohammad

Katherine Stella

Date: 10/24/2011 5:46:00 PM

this is more of senryu due to fact human like unless using ground then maybe haiku I just wrote a combination of Haiku/senryu book it's called time for haiku can be found at barnes and noble amazon and lulu if intrested thanks for sharing and for your kind comment on my verse poem keep up the great writing

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 10/25/2011 9:36:00 AM

Thanks for your enlightening comment. I'll certainly look for your book at Amazon. -Mohammad

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 8/11/2011 10:51:00 AM

I like how this poem can be interpreted in different ways. hearts of the dead? broken hearts? both powerful messages. p.s. thanks for your comments :)

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 8/11/2011 11:56:00 AM

Thanks for your encouraging comments Susan. I am so glad you have reached the poem's soul. What else to expect from a talented poet like you? God bless you! -Mohammad

Tahera Mannan

Date: 2/24/2011 8:24:00 PM

This is awesome Mohammad. a million hearts in the ground. Wow.

James Fraser

Date: 2/13/2011 7:12:00 AM

That there is Mohammad. As long as we remember them. Heartfelt Haiku....:)

Date: 11/12/2010 2:06:00 PM

Powerful message carried in this concise poem. Well done! It was good to see your name in my inbox. Thank you for your kind comment. Hope things are going well for you. Best wishes. Karen

Matthew Anish

Date: 2/23/2010 12:59:00 PM

Who are the million hearts in the ground? Are they the departed? Fine haiku! Where can I get a copy of the rubai that you translated? Peace and Blessings Matthew Anish

Mohammad Yamin
Date: 8/11/2011 12:10:00 PM

I must have responded to your comments earlier but perhaps not the question you have posed about who the million hearts are. Matthew, it is the heart of the lovers that perished. Now reread the poem and see what does it stir in your poetic sensibility. -Mohammad

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/9/2010 2:39:00 PM

My sentiments too! Great job! Peace, Audrey

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 10/6/2009 3:54:00 AM

Nice!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/19/2009 12:35:00 AM

I like the wording of your Haiku. We don't think about these like this very often espcially when we are young. We are taught to respect the graves that are marked but there are many from generations past that are not marked. Keep writing. Sara

Date: 8/9/2009 1:02:00 PM

Much to think about in your words. The title compliments the piece. Keep on writing. Karen

Matthew Anish

Date: 6/23/2009 12:19:00 PM

Seems like an Omar Khaym style of poem. It was quite well written and succinct. Yours Matthew Anish

Habib Effendi

Date: 5/29/2009 1:59:00 PM

Splendid indeed.... Too great a meaning in too little words. Excellent work... Also, thanks for the encouraging me into poetrysoup... I certainly have a lot to learn from you dear Yamin uncle... Great work once again. Love, HABIB

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/29/2009 12:17:00 PM

EXCELLENT! AMAZING! NO WORDS CAN EXPRESS... I SIMPLE LOVED THIS!!!