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Burden

Plunged deep into chaos Man adios Love in hand and daily in trance Steering rulers losing Man anew with Burden a poet's flame to diagnose each pain seeking what of words can Man heal pen at rest the load lingers unreleased. (Inverted Rictameter) September 2nd, 2018

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/13/2019 7:58:00 AM

Awe inspiring Besma - great poem and something I have never tried. You are a poetic master who we should all look up to, a mentor of note. With each poem you post, I get to know you a little better and I absolutely love what I see, read and understand So long souls sister - speak to you soon. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 1/14/2019 4:00:00 PM

Dearest Jennifer, your very kind and sincere words touch the depths of my heart.. you are so generous with your encouraging words.. It is here on PS that I've learnt to write this form.. it is thanks to Paul's "Mollie"! I'm sure that your poetic talent empowers you to master different forms.. just give it a try and unfold your poetic heart and quill.. grateful to you dear soul sister. Love and hugs.

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/21/2018 7:40:00 PM

Always your poetry awes me my dear friend. Superbly crafted poetry!

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/23/2018 3:51:00 PM

A genuine and generous heart of a poet can feel the beats of beauty in every soul! So kind of you Robert to spill such beautiful praise! Honoured and deeply humbled. My deepest regards. Be blessed.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/20/2018 6:14:00 PM

An excellent piece of work. You depict that chaos well and speak the truth.

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/21/2018 12:48:00 PM

Always a pleasure to read your generous feedbacks M.L. Kiser. Thank you so much for your praising comment. Best regards.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/11/2018 10:33:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your work. There is chaos and uncertainty for sure on this earth. Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate the time spent at my page. Sara

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/11/2018 10:58:00 AM

I'm glad you enjoyed reading my humble write Sara.. thank you so much for your visit and generous comment. My pleasure. Best regards. Be blessed always.

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/5/2018 8:35:00 PM

Your poetry flows with such golden ease of deep emotion and exquisite expression, dearest Besma. Your avid reader loves to linger with your verses pondering your profound insights from an enlightened mind, a shining heart and a loving soul. Yes, leaders are too often oblivious to people's pain and suffering and this realization can overwhelm and paralyze the poetic mind and pen. A deep, meaningful poem and a true pleasure to linger over, my lovely friend. A FAV! Warmest wishes and love always.. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/6/2018 11:42:00 AM

The immense pleasure is mine dear Susan, reading such a flowing generosity, such impressive humility.. my words stumble on my page in front of such poetic fluidity! Your fine and praising words have elevated my humble poetry to a level I always aspire to!

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/6/2018 11:42:00 AM

Once again, dear friend I'm so much honoured to be your friend sharing a noble passion, I'm deeply touched, humbled and immensely delighted by your gracious visit and overflowing comment of love, light and beauty. My warmest regards love and hugs. Stay safe and blessed always.

Paul Callus

Date: 9/4/2018 3:31:00 PM

Hi Besma...stopping by for a second read....and a thumbs up :) Warm regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/5/2018 5:15:00 AM

It is my honour and delight to see you on my page Paul. Thank you so much once again for your constructive critique and encouraging feedbacks. My deepest regards. Be blessed always.

Kishan Sharma

Date: 9/3/2018 10:18:00 PM

Nice one

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/4/2018 3:23:00 AM

Thank you so much for your visit and feedback. My pleasure. Be blessed.

Paul Callus

Date: 9/3/2018 4:20:00 PM

Releasing the weight of burden can often be attained by putting pen to paper, something which you have undoubtedly experienced, Besma! There is much meaning in your words, and it is apparent that you enjoy making use of this form. I'm glad that "Mollie" served as a spark:) Regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/4/2018 3:22:00 AM

Pouring out our hearts and minds into words is definitely satisfying and healing but still when questions remain unanswered, when mysteries linger unveiled, when rulers give no heed to people's sufferings and you feel disabled... Too much for a pen to handle the pain.. Thank you so much Paul for your gracious visit and insightful feedback. Be blessed always.

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/3/2018 10:24:00 AM

Beautifully crafted dear Besma...love & light...^WW^

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/4/2018 2:39:00 AM

Your visits and cheering feedbacks I do always appreciate. Thank you so much Winged Warrior for genuinely praising my write. Best regards. Be blessed always.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/3/2018 6:53:00 AM

- An excellent writing, with deep feelings Besma :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/4/2018 2:37:00 AM

Thank you so much dear Anne- Lise for your generous appreciation to my humble work.. a great joy to see you on my page! My honour and delight. Be blessed always.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/2/2018 10:46:00 PM

Superb piece of work; especially that last line, " pen at rest the load lingers unreleased." Well depicted.

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/3/2018 4:33:00 AM

Thank you so much M.L. Kiser for your kind appreciative words so much pleased and humbled. Be blessed always.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/2/2018 7:05:00 AM

Such elegant writing from your talented pen, Besma! Well done, my friend

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/2/2018 8:09:00 AM

Gracious is your visit.. delightful is your feedback.. my great pleasure to read your encouraging words dear Vijay.. I'm deeply grateful to you. My honour and pleasure. Be blessed always.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/2/2018 3:22:00 AM

Profound inspiring writing that requires a lot of thought to reach the depth of its message dear, Besma. Not to forget that your poetic dexterity in writing Rictameter is remarkable! God bless you!

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/2/2018 6:58:00 AM

Oh thank you so much dear Demetrios the philosopher! So humble of you, a poet of your adeptness spilling such a praising and a rewarding feedback! I'm very delighted, humbled and blessed.. My deepest regards and gratitude. Stay blessed always.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/2/2018 3:14:00 AM

Written well Besma in a form that is new to me. Tom

Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 9/2/2018 6:53:00 AM

It was to me too! But thanks to Paul Callus "Mollie"! I feel the words in new forms.. thank you so much Tom for your appreciation. Deeply humbled. Be blessed.