Bundled Thoughts

‘Twas the most divine afternoon
The birds had gathered at high noon
All chirping beautifully in tune
Calling out to all, even that lone raccoon

’Twas the middle of the month of June
Never tiring of listening to the loon croon
she came to visit on a bench by the lagoon
With her thoughts bundled in a cocoon

‘Twas the twilight of their honeymoon
She sat there and considered her silver spoon
Where they were heading seemed now out of tune
Life never ceases to throw curves so inopportune

The evening witnessed the rise of a harvest moon
Could have lingered till she’d be about to swoon
While hoping to see galaxies beyond Neptune
Simply sent her wish adrift strung to a blue balloon



AP: Honorable Mention 2020

Submitted on September 14, 2018 for CONTEST NO.495 sponsored by BRIAN STRAND  -  RANKED 1ST

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 9/18/2018 7:54:00 PM
Such a lovely, melancholy, Monorhyme poem, Line. I am feeling a deep emotional metaphor here... :( But, congratulations on your First Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 8:01:00 PM
Thank you for your most appreciated visit and comment, Sandra.
Date: 9/18/2018 2:59:00 PM
Fabulous, just fabulous, Line. Congratulations on this win :) xxx
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Date: 9/18/2018 3:36:00 PM
Thank you so much, Francesca. Most appreciated.
Date: 9/18/2018 2:20:00 PM
Congratulations! I LOVE this one. In particular "loon croon" ! Absolutely fab!
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Date: 9/18/2018 2:40:00 PM
Thank you so much, Timothy. Most appreciated.
Date: 9/18/2018 2:08:00 PM
Excellent poem Line, congrats :)
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Date: 9/18/2018 2:40:00 PM
Thanks, Gary. Most appreciated.
Date: 9/18/2018 1:30:00 PM
A tour d'force of rhyme, Line! Congrats on yr 1st place
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Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 1:31:00 PM
Thank you, LJ, for your most appreciated visit and compliment.
Date: 5/27/2018 10:51:00 PM
I was sad that it was done too soon :) Nice, peppy tempo. I like it, Line.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 10:45:00 AM
Thank you so much, Mark. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/26/2018 7:20:00 PM
Interesting monorhyme... enjoyed.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 9:32:00 PM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Susan.
Date: 5/26/2018 1:54:00 PM
a magnificent set of monorhymed lines, excellent theme, relatable to many on their honeymoon of life. An awesome read on this Saturday PM in Indiana.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 6:50:00 PM
Thank you so much, Reason. Most appreciated.
Date: 5/26/2018 1:51:00 PM
Nicely written Line . I like the ending with the balloon :)
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 6:51:00 PM
Thanks, Heidi, for your much appreciated visit and comment.
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