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Bundled Thoughts

‘Twas the most divine afternoon The birds had gathered at high noon All chirping beautifully in tune Calling out to all, even that lone raccoon ’Twas the middle of the month of June Never tiring of listening to the loon croon she came to visit on a bench by the lagoon With her thoughts bundled in a cocoon ‘Twas the twilight of their honeymoon She sat there and considered her silver spoon Where they were heading seemed now out of tune Life never ceases to throw curves so inopportune The evening witnessed the rise of a harvest moon Could have lingered till she’d be about to swoon While hoping to see galaxies beyond Neptune Simply sent her wish adrift strung to a blue balloon AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on September 14, 2018 for CONTEST NO.495 sponsored by BRIAN STRAND - RANKED 1ST Originally posted on May 26, 2018

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Sandra Haight

Date: 9/18/2018 7:54:00 PM

Such a lovely, melancholy, Monorhyme poem, Line. I am feeling a deep emotional metaphor here... :( But, congratulations on your First Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 8:01:00 PM

Thank you for your most appreciated visit and comment, Sandra.

Francesca Pappadogiannis

Date: 9/18/2018 2:59:00 PM

Fabulous, just fabulous, Line. Congratulations on this win :) xxx

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 3:36:00 PM

Thank you so much, Francesca. Most appreciated.

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 9/18/2018 2:20:00 PM

Congratulations! I LOVE this one. In particular "loon croon" ! Absolutely fab!

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 2:40:00 PM

Thank you so much, Timothy. Most appreciated.

Gary Smith

Date: 9/18/2018 2:08:00 PM

Excellent poem Line, congrats :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 2:40:00 PM

Thanks, Gary. Most appreciated.

L. J. Carber

Date: 9/18/2018 1:30:00 PM

A tour d'force of rhyme, Line! Congrats on yr 1st place

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 1:31:00 PM

Thank you, LJ, for your most appreciated visit and compliment.

Mark Toney

Date: 5/27/2018 10:51:00 PM

I was sad that it was done too soon :) Nice, peppy tempo. I like it, Line.

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/18/2018 10:45:00 AM

Thank you so much, Mark. Much appreciated.

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/26/2018 7:20:00 PM

Interesting monorhyme... enjoyed.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 9:32:00 PM

Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Susan.

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 5/26/2018 1:54:00 PM

a magnificent set of monorhymed lines, excellent theme, relatable to many on their honeymoon of life. An awesome read on this Saturday PM in Indiana.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 6:50:00 PM

Thank you so much, Reason. Most appreciated.

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/26/2018 1:51:00 PM

Nicely written Line . I like the ending with the balloon :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/26/2018 6:51:00 PM

Thanks, Heidi, for your much appreciated visit and comment.