Notes About The Poem

For Joseph May's Eight word poetry contest.  A poem using the highlighted eight words.

synthetic, emanate, swirling, rustic, 

timeless, illusion, blossom, silence

 

Bronze Blossom

Once a bronze blossom shone so sophisticatedly.
Flourishing in an oasis of tropical butterflies.
Its aura would emanate from enigmatic auroras.
Its roots nourished from the scents of petrichor.

Admirers would gather to gaze at such grandeur,
oblivious of poppies among common roses,
so the jealous sun in its narcissistic loneliness,
blazed with hell like rays, creating a drought.

In the inhuman illusion of synthetic flowers,
its petals withered like rustic wicker wreaths.
I stood helpless, as the wind left it exposed,
as lifeless buds began swirling in the air.

Only evergreen textures remain timeless.
An empty garden has no worth to birds or bees.
In the silence between seasons, so much is lost,
yet unique anomalies always leave memories behind.
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Elliott Avatar
August 8, 2024 at 1:59 AM
Such beauty in your poetry, Silent One, you are unique. Have an inspiring Thursday with your wondrous poetic mind. All the best. ~
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 6:54 AM
People sometimes want to see just the glory, the surface beauty and that's why they judge the book by it's cover and Mostimes make the best and worst mistakes ever. You have used the prompt words so well. Yeah! Same style won't always catch an eye, I like anomalies and differences. Strange and unique." Only evergreen textures remain timeless. An empty garden has no worth to birds or bees. In the silence between seasons, so much is lost." I love this quote so much as I already used it as my-
George Avatar
July 29, 2024 at 6:56 AM
Daily dose of great words. And it is so symbolic. Not just gardens. People! No one finds solace in chaos. Unless for mentally unstable folks. No one needs anyone who doesn't bring value to them. They become a liability. Great piece Silent. Many Congratulations to you on this beautiful Win.
mysore Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 8:09 PM
congratulations dear poet. happy writing.
Goldsmith Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 8:58 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful 8 word "Bronze Blossom" write.  Have a blessed weekend with your win.......................
May Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 5:13 AM
Very nicely done Silent, Congrats on your win
Rodrigues Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 3:12 PM
An empty garden has no worth to birds or bees. In the silence between seasons, so much is lost, yet unique anomalies always leave memories behind…such a prolific writer!
Rodgers Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 7:16 AM
Dear Silent One, A wonderful read!! I could not agree with you any more that true beauty and uniqueness are often overlooked or destroyed by jealousy and artificial imitations, but their memory and impact endure. I liked how you showed the blossom's destruction by jealous forces (the sun) and the drought represents how unique beauty can be lost or overshadowed in a world that often favors the artificial or common. And my favorite line is "In the silence between seasons, so much is lost, yet unique anomalies always leave memories behind." Good Luck in the Contest! – Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
Lawless Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 6:34 AM
a wondrous weaving of the words through the seasons of the garden and the frailty of nature
Gentile Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 5:02 AM
Sometimes, beautiful memories are enough Silent One, at least, for me! Your wonderfully creative ability never ceases to amaze me! Even when tasked with words not of your choosing, your style, feeling and innovation are very apparent! You are you - a glorious poet at that!!! Happy Friday!!!
Daniel Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 3:15 AM
These eight words have been used in so many different themes, yours is beautiful, SO:)
Empress Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 1:08 AM
“ so the jealous sun in its narcissistic loneliness, blazed with hell like rays, creating a drought.” literally the sun is a narcissist most of the days and likes to watch them sophisticated bronze blossoms wilt and wither, it gives him some sort of pleasure. But thats what narcissists do isnt it: in silence when a garden is empty is it really empty? Theres so much left behind, roots of patience and kindness that so many wont see unless they dig deeper! Your use of prompts and also how you’ve used metaphors and imagery along with slight alliterations.. is so very impressive and impeccable! Silent one! You are such an inspiration! I felt this poem on a very deeper level! And your wordplay is beyond artistic! Like An aesthetic garden woven with ink! Pleasure reading your work always! Sending you light! All your poems are my faves! Cus im your number one fan :D
Empress Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 1:07 AM
Best of luck in the contest ;)
Anaya Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 4:03 PM
Love Love Love this and am faving it because its what poetry is supposed to do, show us your sorrows, your angst, your ambitions, inhibitions, passion. Silence is golden, then put into words with such brilliance. How it excites the mind. Who needs blunt rhymes that bore "an empty garden has no worth" wow Silent One!--I'm learning to dig deeper--like Empress notes above!
Dietrich Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 3:15 PM
Love this. One of my favorites in this category that I have seen
Hind Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 10:18 AM
A fav- I really enjoyed reading this poetry, it's sensitive
Narain Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 10:14 AM
Nice poem.
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