Brokenhearted Orbits

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The crescent moon has hid from me its glow
 And stars have lost their twinkle in the sky
 My broken heart floats in this celestial throe
  As the goddess Venus flickers with a sigh

 The heavens tell me love is lost
 As I orbit a galaxy of broken hearts
 The price of love comes with a heavy cost
  For when it's lost I fall apart
 
 A distant galaxy where love can find a chance
 Beckons to me in this ethereal night
 It pulls me in with a gravity of romance
 And leads me closer to love's light

  But as the crescent moon comes into view
 It reminds me how much I miss you
                          -~-
  11-11-17

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 12/4/2017 7:40:00 PM
Joseph, such a great sonnet with enchanting and beautifully sad thoughts and imagery. Congratulations on your excellent win with this amazing poem.
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Date: 12/4/2017 4:24:00 PM
Congratulations, Joseph, a great write. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 12/4/2017 2:15:00 PM
Love seeing this one again, Joseph. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 12/4/2017 6:34:00 AM
beautiful sonnet dear Joseph...thank you and congrats :)
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Date: 12/4/2017 7:38:00 AM
Thank you for my placement Laura
Date: 11/25/2017 6:18:00 PM
A great poem with wonderfully sad imagery. The universe of the heart is full of pain. I always enjoy a space themed poem hidden as a romantic sonnet. I really like this one!
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Date: 11/20/2017 10:31:00 PM
A poignant poem so beautifully written and the image goes just fine with it. Excellent work, Joseph.
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Date: 11/18/2017 12:42:00 PM
Such a lovely sonnet; a journey from the universe to the universe of the heart--sad and beautiful. Congratulations on your placement.
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Date: 11/18/2017 3:30:00 AM
Congratulations on the win, ... keep up the great work! I love this, and all things celestial - beautiful! :-)
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Date: 11/17/2017 3:26:00 PM
A beautiful poem this is Joseph :)
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Date: 11/15/2017 3:16:00 PM
This is very imaginative, Joseph. Romantic and beautiful!
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Date: 11/12/2017 6:01:00 AM
Excellent. Lovely romantic and touching write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 11/11/2017 9:07:00 PM
A lovely sad sonnet Joseph. Full of emotion and wonderful imagery. Enjoyed!
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Date: 11/11/2017 4:27:00 PM
Wonderful, Joseph, enjoyed reading.. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 11/11/2017 2:59:00 PM
Like Jo said below, I was touched by each line. The emotion is practically tangible. All the best ... CayCay
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Date: 11/11/2017 9:25:00 AM
Touching sonnet, Joseph, you've connected the heavenly and your heart very well:)
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Date: 11/11/2017 8:39:00 AM
A sad sonnet Joseph... The moon reminds so many of so many different things... I like the rhymes and flow of your sonnet..
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Date: 11/11/2017 7:13:00 AM
Lovely romantic orbits--well written poem of love and romance!
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