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Broken Wings

remnants of a life built with purpose and pride, small synapses of yesterday I recall clouded in a narrowing vision, I slide, lost in abysmal darkness, struggle and fall, once a soaring eagle, now prey in despair, days play out, muddled in confusion and fear, doomed in the silence I bear only in prayer, to savor moments that slip into nowhere. March 18, 2024 Old Form Poetry Contest/Rispetto Form Sponsored by: Emile Pinet rhyme scheme ABABCCDD syllable count checked on howmany syllables.com rhyme checked on rhymezone.com This poem is a tribute to my brother Dennis.

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The Situation

Date: 4/26/2024 10:48:00 AM

A sad life it must be but this discribes it to a tee. The form has me curious but you put it together well.

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 4/27/2024 9:22:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by to comment. Yes, this was a new form for me; it was a requirement of a contest that I thought was quite interesting. I had never written in Rispetto before so the challenge was a lot of fun and I was able to express the difficult end to my brothers life. Again, Thanks, Paulette

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/17/2024 1:33:00 PM

I think we all share these pendulum moments with those we love through good times and bad, sorrow and strength knowing God's Grace is with us, nice tribute Paulette! Mom's hanging in there holy cow!

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 4/18/2024 2:00:00 PM

Hi Jim, thanks for stopping by with your thoughtful comments. Miss seeing you at our Cafe Night.....but glad Mom is "hanging in"....God Bless Her! Take Care my friend! Paulette

The Situation

Date: 3/26/2024 6:05:00 PM

Very Very artful. I caught my poetic eye and did not disapoint. Can't say much about brother though.

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/26/2024 6:09:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by to comment. I appreciate your comments. Paulette

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/22/2024 12:00:00 PM

Awesome, heartfelt tribute to your brother, Paulette. Your words tug the heart.

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/26/2024 6:08:00 PM

Dear Vijay, thanks for stopping by, I appreciate your comment. Paulette

Christina Bowring

Date: 3/22/2024 10:31:00 AM

Dear Paula, such a touching, poignant poem. You have captured the dark despair, anguish and loss so deeply here. It’s so raw, so heartfelt and so many will resonate with your poetic words. The last two lines are particularly profound. I’m so sorry for your loss. Sending hugs and blessings to you xx

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/22/2024 11:07:00 AM

Dear Christina, thank you for stopping by with such thoughtful comments on "Broken Wings". The things we experience in life speak volumes in our memories. Blessings, Paulette

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 3/22/2024 7:47:00 AM

Death is so final but our memories remain. Great use of rhyme. May he rest in peace.

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/22/2024 7:50:00 AM

Victor, thank you for stopping by to comment on "Broken Wings"....yes death is so final but the memories are to have and to hold. Blessings, Paulette

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/19/2024 11:57:00 AM

A moving tribute to your brother Paulette, I'm so sorry for your loss. Tom

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/20/2024 10:09:00 AM

Tom, thank you for your comment and condolences. He was a special brother, and special man to everyone who knew him. Paulette

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/19/2024 5:57:00 AM

Dear Paulette, I really loved how you captured the ache of lost dreams and the struggle against encroaching darkness. Each line evokes emotion, echoing the journey from pride to despair, from clarity to confusion. I admire your words of resilience amidst adversity, clinging to hope even in the depths of despair. You poetically show it's the fragility of life and the strength found in vulnerability. Paulette this is a very raw and reflective piece. - Blessings, Daniel

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/20/2024 10:13:00 AM

Daniel, thank you so much for your profound comments.....I am happy to know you experienced everything I was trying to convey....getting to the heart of the frailty of life. Blessings, Paulette

Michael Tor

Date: 3/18/2024 6:50:00 PM

Paulette such a heartfelt piece you have written about your brother. I can not imagine what it was like for him and for you to go through what he went through with your family as well. I hope there was some type of resolve and mending in the end. I always wish for the best and the best outcome. This one as I read was a tough one. Hope you are well blessings to you and your brother...

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/20/2024 10:15:00 AM

Michael, thank you for stopping by to comment. I tried to express the frailty of our lives, no matter how strong our character, we are not always in control. The outcome is my brother is resting in eternal peace. Thanks for your compassion. Paulette

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/18/2024 4:46:00 PM

Your Rispetto spoke to me. I especially liked "small synapses of yesterday I recall." After reading your poem I felt twinges of sadness as well as some hope or perhaps resolve with a situation. Have a great evening, Sara

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/19/2024 2:27:00 PM

Hi Sara, Thank you for your lovely comments about my poem. I am happy that I was able to convey my feelings to deliver the impact of the nightmare my brother endured, he was a titan. Paulette

Deb M

Date: 3/18/2024 2:54:00 PM

So very moving and lovely Paula! Im sorry for your sadness in losing your brother Dennis! Debx

Paulette Calasibetta
Date: 3/18/2024 4:40:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by to comment. Dennis was a fighter til the end. It is very cathartic to be able to put into words his struggles. Paulette