Broken Love

plethoric is his mind
shifting thoughts
like shadows cast
in and out of clouded skies

he falls
with the shame shadiness
into the concealment of pain
arising momentarily 
whenever someone nears

he only hears
words echoing
down lonely corridors 
as they bounce back
from the thoughts of mind
yet he speaks back
in half witted thoughts
that make you look past
the emptiness in his eyes

he weeps
alone at night
his tears
refreshing the scent
of her perfume
on the pillow
he harbors

he feels 
the pierce
of daggers
with each beat
of his heart
as he struggles
to breathe
beneath the weight
of the heavy burden
he carries

…"this romeo is bleeding,
but you don't see his blood"

February 18, 2020

Famous Poetic Lines 3 Contest
Sponsored by Silent One

This Romeo is bleeding, but you don't see his blood - Bon Jovi - Always
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Pandit Avatar
February 24, 2020 at 8:54 AM
Back with congrats my friend on your splendid first place win.
Adams Avatar
February 24, 2020 at 11:08 AM
Thank you Vijay... hugs
Green Avatar
February 24, 2020 at 8:24 AM
There was no doubt in my mind this would end up on top in this contest. Your wonderful talent shines so brightly Sandy
Adams Avatar
February 24, 2020 at 11:08 AM
Thank you so much Chris :) hugs
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 11:40 PM
This wonderful poem is so deserving of First Place Sandra. Congratulations! xxoo
Adams Avatar
February 24, 2020 at 11:08 AM
Thank you so very much Connie... hugs
Andresen Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 8:02 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Sandra :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 8:03 PM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise… hugs
One Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 5:16 AM
You captured a bleeding romeo very well... the emotions of a broken heart are expressed perfectly... great poetry.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest...
Adams Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 8:02 PM
wow… thank you so much Silent One...I am honored... hugs
Proxenos Avatar
February 20, 2020 at 8:38 AM
An amazing write Sandy - this is a definite win - you write astounding poetry - the pain your Romeo feels is felt - powerful poem. Blessings, Jennifer.
Adams Avatar
February 23, 2020 at 8:02 PM
wow… thank you so much for such a kind comment, sorry it took me a little to respond...been battling a cold gone on 4 weeks now...I lack energy and have fallen way behind... hugs
Pandit Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 7:20 AM
Tremors of broken love resonate throughout this write--you certainly evoked the piercing daggers--excellent, as always, Sandy. You never need luck--a winning poem you wrote.
Adams Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 9:47 AM
Thank you so much Vijay...I am glad to know this one could be felt...it came out of nowhere last night and I didn't feel up to writing I am glad now that I did... hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 7:12 AM
You make us feel his pain, the poetic perfume’s strong!
Adams Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 9:44 AM
wow Thank you Kim, happy to hear that :) hugs
Green Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 6:58 AM
Such a sad and forlorn piece that I could feel as I read this morning. Your talent always shines my friend no matter the theme you choose. Best wishes in the contest
Adams Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 9:44 AM
wow... thank you for your kind words Chris... hugs
Karmakar Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 5:31 AM
Wonderful write. Wishing the best dear poet.
Adams Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 9:42 AM
Thank you so much Sanjay
Watt Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 12:26 AM
Sandra, another gorgeous write of loneliness. I like the lines "refreshing the scent / of her perfume / on the pillow / he harbors" a lot. I wish you well in SO's contest, this one should do very well ~ John
Adams Avatar
February 19, 2020 at 4:59 AM
Thanks so much John. I was groggy from cough medicine but wanted to write for at least one contest. Have a good day :) hugs
Turner Avatar
February 18, 2020 at 8:09 PM
Nicely penned Sandra. However, don't you know," tears ARE the blood of love", at least in this poets mind.
Adams Avatar
February 18, 2020 at 8:13 PM
yes, that's why he is bleeding but alone through tears so no one sees his blood.... Thank you Daniel... hugs
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