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Broken or Beautiful words Contest. Sponsored by Contance La France 08/24/23

his baby daughter tossed aside like a rag doll dad wanted a son my mother told him that I was ‘the next best thing’ at least she loved me! always second best but useful with garden chores I can milk a goat! unwanted... unloved no father daughter closeness I do not miss him since he passed away I have flourished with my words but I’ll never grieve

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Mona Ebel

Date: 9/25/2023 6:30:00 PM

I really like your poem. Thank you. Wow. Well done.

Mv Venkataraman

Date: 9/20/2023 6:33:00 AM

A touching poem indeed/ It describes the wrong sentiment had/ A beautiful relationship didn't flower/ It is a loss to both of them/ Thank God, daughter shows maturity/ A poem that describes the common mentality/ A nice, but tragic song in my view!

Constance La France

Date: 9/11/2023 12:01:00 AM

Jan, excellent poem and congratulations on your win in my contest, and your POTD honor, Constance

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/6/2023 6:52:00 PM

The juxtaposition of tragedy and charm . . . One wouldn't grieve for a passing cloud but your value is unimpeachable. Goat-cheese pizza's the best!

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 9/1/2023 7:33:00 AM

Hi Jan, I guess my computer was in the shop when you wrote this emotional piece. Belated congratulations on such a heart wrenching poem if it is an actual account of your personal relationship with your dad. I hope other male figures took his place for you. God bless, Nancy

Lisa Ricci

Date: 8/30/2023 2:54:00 AM

Oh Jan. Good Morning. I am so very sorry Jan if this is true to life. Truly. Your suite was executed wonderfully and the emotive factor is ever present through your words. Thank you for sharing your poetic talent and story. Blessings now and always. Have a wonderful morning and day. Yes, congratulations on POTD (smile)

Michael Tor

Date: 8/30/2023 1:15:00 AM

Jan so sad this made me feel. Words escape me now but there is heartfelt pain in reading this. I am so sorry your dad was such a shallow individual, I am so glad your mom was there because I am sure she made up for him. With me it is the opposite I love my daughter and have done everything in the world to win her love and it is so heartbreaking sometimes to deal with her rejection. In a way I can really relate to the pain you felt. God loves you he was your other dad and your Mom she was a Saint

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/28/2023 8:47:00 PM

A great write, though sad! Like others said, his loss! Congratulations on POTD!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/29/2023 1:37:00 AM

thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/27/2023 8:53:00 AM

Back with congratulations on another win. I enjoyed reading it again. Have a great day/week with your wonderful win............

Jan Allison
Date: 8/29/2023 1:37:00 AM

thanks Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

Aurore Severo

Date: 8/26/2023 10:59:00 PM

I found this poem to be very touching and I hope you do not mind it inspired me to write a similar one. xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/29/2023 1:38:00 AM

Your poem was very moving, thanks for sharing your words Aurore:-) hugs Jan xx

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/26/2023 9:32:00 PM

"I have flourished with my words but I’ll never grieve" - Late have I noticed this POTD poem. Congratulations!

Deb M

Date: 8/26/2023 5:27:00 AM

You put your heart in your poem and were so deservedly rewarded with POTD Jan…..kindness and cuddles sent to you my friend! Debx

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/25/2023 6:24:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your heartfelt POTD. You’re a beautiful soul, living your own life. Hugs ~

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/25/2023 4:37:00 PM

A truly great poem to be chosen as POTD my good friend. So very powerful in words and feelings. A fav my friend, God bless you.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 8/25/2023 4:36:00 PM

Dear Jan, Congratulations on your POTD. You have created a powerful piece of writing - feel sad, but probably there are men who deprive their children of the wonderful love a father could give! Hugs ~ Mala

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/25/2023 4:33:00 PM

Wow. This is so sad and so painful to even read - especially for me. I wasn't close to my dad either... this poem hits home. Praying for you. Congrats on POTD ... God bless you always, Love, Gina

Susan Lawrence

Date: 8/25/2023 1:49:00 PM

Potent, raw, powerful, heartbreaking. You are amazing Jan and your words are so powerful! My heart feels your life story! Big congratulations on POTD ! Hugs always, Susan :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/25/2023 1:41:00 PM

Well written. Powerful and so sad. Congratulations for POTD :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/25/2023 12:48:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD win. A wonderful/powerful yet sad write. Many years ago, I had a boss who wanted a son. He painted the room blue, put in blue carpet, got dark wood furniture, and bought ever piece of sport equipment he could find. An all boys room. They had a girl. He would Not go to the hospital and a friend had to bring the wife/baby home. He would not even talk to his wife for months. So Sad. Hugs... Have a blessed day with your wonderful win..................

Arlo Parker

Date: 8/25/2023 11:46:00 AM

POTD because the heart can’t imagine parents choosing between children. Each so unique and endearing. Glad you rose to be “Jan”! :-)

Jim Slaughter

Date: 8/25/2023 10:43:00 AM

Family ties don't always bind us in a good way. An excellent piece, Jan...poignantly heartwrenching...but excellent, nonetheless. The last stanza shows a lot of strength and strength of character. Congrats on POTD, as well.

Mark Toney

Date: 8/25/2023 10:39:00 AM

Powerful, heartrending Senryu, Jan, with an extremely poignant title that many of us can relate to on some level. Congratulations on Poem of the Day!

Jay Narain

Date: 8/25/2023 10:17:00 AM

I thought this happened in India years ago. I know how you feel. Good for recognition as POTD.

Eve Roper

Date: 8/25/2023 10:13:00 AM

Such a heartfelt poem, but things like this do happen. Congratulations on POTD. Hugs

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 8/25/2023 9:29:00 AM

It's so sad to think that one child would be loved more than another. I am the 14th child of 15 children yet each one of us was loved equally. Hugs to you my friend.