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Broken- Ninette

BROKEN


Damn
that day
eye contact
love at first sight
failing visions lie
whispered good-byes
body found
beneath
dam



10/11/2015

submitted to Ninette – Poetry contest
sponsor – Silent One

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/15/2015 4:08:00 PM Glad to see this one won. It was one of my favorites. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/15/2015 6:09:00 AM Creative one..I hope that body was not a loved one..Thanks for reading and considering my work for your contest..Sara Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 10/14/2015 10:21:00 PM John, Congratulations on your "Ninette Win." Love SKAT Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 10/14/2015 12:50:00 AM Wonderful take John n a superb win! Big congrats! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/13/2015 9:56:00 PM oooh, a dark one too!! I really like this. Don't know your placement but I see it got a win. Congrats to you. clever how you used homophones on each side of it instead of antonyms or synonyms. Login to Reply

Michael Tor Date: 10/13/2015 4:11:00 PM John you said so much in this Ninette. Cleverly written with a surprising twist in the end. Congratulations on your win! I liked this write very much. Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 10/13/2015 10:39:00 AM Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 10/13/2015 8:48:00 AM Such a dark visual with a powerful impact, John. Congrats on your win. Sandra Login to Reply

Dan Cwiak Date: 10/13/2015 7:31:00 AM Well written for the win. Congrats, John. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 10/12/2015 9:26:00 AM John, oh so deeply dark, I love it 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, wild heart ... Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 10/13/2015 7:06:00 AM Thanks for the high mark BW. One doesn't pass through life without a bit of darkness creeping in.

CayCay Jennings Date: 10/12/2015 7:35:00 AM Wow - what impact! Very good, John ... CayCay Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 10/13/2015 7:04:00 AM Hey, CayCay, appreciate your comment. Thanks for stopping by

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 10/11/2015 6:13:00 PM liking the word play in this, very good ninette, i don't see too many written with the first and last words correct - good luck in the contest! Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 10/13/2015 7:03:00 AM Charlotte, I have always loved "playing" with words and their multiple spellings and meanings. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2015 2:10:00 PM oh this is so sad John good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 10/13/2015 7:01:00 AM Thanks for stopping by Jan, I'm a bit behind in my responses. It made the list...