Viv Wigley Poet Rhyme

Brevity- the Wake

The last of the cortege had shuffled quietly away
leaving him alone to face the first of countless days
bending, threw one more handful of soil into the pit
a final act of closure after that it would be it
at the kitchen table head on hands with empty stare
half eaten cheese sandwiches not going anywhere
a life so rich in memories once so clear now just a blur
phone rang as he gazed down and saw the number
it was her




submitted to –'Brevity – The Short Of It ' contest
sponsor – Casarah Nance
Viv Wigley 8th July 2015

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Lindsay Laurie July 16, 2015 at 10:48 PM Hello Viv... these times can play with the mind and boy o'boy you put in a chill at the end - Lindsay Viv Wigley July 17, 2015 at 12:42 AM Cheers, Lindsay, nothing like a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Poet Destroyer A July 15, 2015 at 1:43 AM Viv, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Viv Wigley July 17, 2015 at 12:40 AM Thanks, Linda, Viv x

Skat A July 14, 2015 at 12:09 AM Viv, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT Viv Wigley July 14, 2015 at 12:35 AM Thanks, Skat, Viv x

Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 12:36 PM Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 1:25 PM Thanks Viv I am so happy Cas liked the twist:-) hugs Jan xx Viv Wigley July 13, 2015 at 1:09 PM Thanks, Jan, I knew yours would soar, easy peasey. Viv x

Casarah Nance July 13, 2015 at 8:48 AM What a great story. I enjoyed it and the twist, thank you for entering, and very well done! Viv Wigley July 13, 2015 at 1:08 PM Thanks, Casarah, a good contest topic, reaping a good harvest. Viv x

Anne-Lise Andresen July 11, 2015 at 4:05 PM - A unique poem, Viv - Geez ending ! - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a peaceful and blessed weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Viv Wigley July 11, 2015 at 11:22 PM Takk, Anne Lise, you have a great one, too. Viv x

Tim Ryerson July 11, 2015 at 2:57 PM Mind blower! What a twist at the end Viv...Me thinks you got a winner here... Viv Wigley July 11, 2015 at 11:17 PM Thanks, Tim. Can't beat a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Kim Van Breda July 9, 2015 at 3:28 AM Cool...nice twist at the end. Lots of metaphoric implications going on behind the lines too xx~xx Viv Wigley July 9, 2015 at 6:41 AM Thanks, Kim, it appears to have been well recieved thus far. Viv x

Robert Lindley July 8, 2015 at 9:53 PM Great write and superb ending my friend. A7 Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 10:01 PM Thanks Robert, hoping you're all hale and hearty. Regards, Viv

Kp Nunez July 8, 2015 at 2:44 PM Oh...goosebumps! Reads like a prologue to a Stephen King novel, eh? This is good, Viv! Gl with the contest...oh, my smartphone is ringinggggggg Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 8:43 PM Thanks, Kim. Chill. wooooooo............ Viv x

Constance La France July 8, 2015 at 8:13 AM Viv this is outstanding, 7 so haunting and what a twist at the end , a sure winner in the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, drunken Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 12:19 PM Thanks, BW, thought I'd have a double-edged sword for my title, wake being what many call the reception after a funeral, and wake as in to rouse from sleep. Viv x

Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 2:06 AM the spooky ending sure packs a punch - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 2:34 AM Thanks, Jan. Hang on, I'd better get that phone.......AAAARRRGGGHHH!

Connie Marcum Wong July 8, 2015 at 2:02 AM Wow! This is really impressive Viv. It was so moving it gave me chills. 7 I hope to see it at the top. Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 2:32 AM Thanks, Connie. I wasn't overly familiar with the Brevity style, but it has much potential. Viv x

Julia Ward July 8, 2015 at 1:35 AM I didn't expect THAT! Oh, shiver bumps at your poem's end! All the best for the contest... Julia, xx Viv Wigley July 8, 2015 at 2:31 AM Thanks, Julia (cue theme tune from the 'Twilight zone') doo doo doo doo..... Viv x