Breathe In Me Life, For Death Enshrouds

“Seducer, healer, deity or thief,
I will see you soon enough—
in the shadow of the rainfall,
in the brief violet darkening a sunset—
but until then I pray watch over him
as a mountain guards its covert ore
and the harsh falcon its flightless young.”
-Dana Gioia’s Prayer

Captivated, cruelly scorned Innocence breached in the caress of sifting leaves I breathe… Shards of crimson ice splitting the skies, I breathe… Hung in the nest of my Guardian’s threshold I breathe… I receive the tantrums of travesty, Though I pause, the air suspended in my lungs Death, damasked and naked The hairs of his youth dancing in the breeze I breathe…I breathe… Words of ire, phantom echoes in my mind, I breathe…I breathe The pain of existing taught in those eyes I breathe…I breathe Until the fighting for control ceases Until the lungs are filled to the brim with torrential tears My eyes, open, lifeless I see you, gallant Guardian A silhouette sobbing, a heart pounding and throbbing You sing to me, lulling life wonder Spices surround me, for you are my Gatherer of needed scent Allowing your tears to fall, refusing to grieve Seeing in me budding revelation Your lips hot against mine Gently, gently you breathe And in Death’s astonished brow, I live

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 1/31/2015 9:07:00 AM
Laura, Outstanding!! This one's an instant 7 + FAV for me absolutely!! The scope of your write is quite enchanting and the cascading imagery rivets the reader's attention all the way to the end of the poem. Of course, I'm always fascinated by these types of themes when the "human element" blends into or touches the ethereal world. Love is very much integral to our soul being whether some people realize it or not. Very Well-Done indeed!! Best Always, Gary
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Gary Bateman
Date: 2/1/2015 8:21:00 AM
Hello Laura, I'm more of classical music person, but I will certainly check out "Prayer Morten Lauridson" on YouTube. Again, you crafted a most extraordinary and enthralling poem -- and I found it most enjoyable. Great Work!! Best Always, Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/31/2015 11:19:00 PM
Aw, thanks Gary, and I am so glad you enjoyed this one. I was inspired by an amazing piece composed by the brilliant Morten Lauridson entitled "Prayer" ...the poetry(Dana Gioia) plus the choral music brings tears to my eyes.....if you ever have some time and you enjoy choral music, look up "Prayer Morten Lauridson" on Youtube... Thanks again for your visits..you make me smile! ~Laura
Date: 1/31/2015 6:47:00 AM
very touching love lives on because even death cant take it away, forever love is imbedded into our souls beautiful hun dee bless it be a poet through and through 7 rating
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/31/2015 11:14:00 PM
Davina, your many words of encouragement have uplifted me greatly tonight... I can't wait to read your lovely poetry my friend... thank you dear... ~Laura
Date: 1/31/2015 3:25:00 AM
Continued...this poem just screams of a love that won't surrender to nightmares, pity, or death...yet there is a steady grace within as well. "Allowing your tears to fall, refusing to grieve..." for me and the woman I love this says, I will not deny the pain, for in the pain a rain brings life again! You rescue one another his kiss, your brave breath. "Seeing in me budding revelation..."ah...tthat's so hot, so true of love...a Masterpiece that I will tell God to FAV and save Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/1/2015 12:31:00 AM
There are many who see so much potential in us, even at our weakest points... and we are strengthened, enlightened, and empowered to live life to its fullest. It is a triumphant feeling, one that I love to share with you- the gift of life. You are one of those guardians in my life, Justin. You make me feel alive!(and your comment made me smile so big) ~Laura
Date: 1/31/2015 3:16:00 AM
I'm simply filled with admiration and joy with your love triumph Laura...wow! This composition may be the very best yet...with many to chose from! Its as though the culmination of your heart's patience, pain, and passion has discovered a new body of beauty, a new voice above the storm. United with your Gaurdian of Love fear and death are vanquished by passion's invicible youth...you live...you flourish...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/1/2015 12:30:00 AM
Justin...thank you love, we all have guardians that bring us back from the grave, even when that grave is a rather watery one, filled to the brim with those torrential tears.
Date: 1/30/2015 12:01:00 AM
Wow!!!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/30/2015 12:53:00 AM
Hey Dan... (: Thanks for visiting. I hope you enjoyed some of the hope at the end! <3 ~Laura
Date: 1/29/2015 7:47:00 PM
Very heartfelt Laura....You always write from the heart. This is a touching piece. I hope that you sad and dark thoughts are chased away for you. We all have days and times of depression. Take care....
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/29/2015 8:18:00 PM
Eileen, thanks for the soft breeze of your visit. I treasure a new day - the light uplifts; again, thanks for the sympathy and care. : ) Always, Laura
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