Breath

your hands clasped in mine
as you whisper me goodbye 
teardrops I hold fast
as you slowly become breath 
of a moribund ember



29 May 2021

darkdeathlovetanka

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Frances Schiavina

June 21, 2021 at 8:29 AM

Brilliantly said with color of ember and teardrops sadness.

Ann Foster

June 7, 2021 at 9:01 AM

Grief, this side of the darkness... well written. Great images... Ann

Juliet Ligon

June 4, 2021 at 10:01 PM

Touching. Such a difficult thing to let go.

Victor Buhagiar

June 2, 2021 at 11:18 PM

A sad picture of love lost. Short snd to the point.

Gershon Wolf

June 1, 2021 at 6:15 PM

Wow! What a graphic image you've presented here, JCB. Bullseye. ~ Ashes

Demetrios Trifiatis

June 1, 2021 at 1:36 PM

Your " Breath " took my breath away, dearest, JCB! Romantically tender and loving! Blessings.

Lisa Ricci

June 1, 2021 at 5:52 AM

Good Morning JCB - Wonderful format and contest aside your entry is excellent poetry with a specialized moment in time and imagery of that very moment. Thank you for sharing with us. Enjoy poetry soup.