Breath

your hands clasped in mine as you whisper me goodbye teardrops I hold fast as you slowly become breath of a moribund ember 29 May 2021

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Frances Schiavina

Date: 6/21/2021 8:29:00 AM

Brilliantly said with color of ember and teardrops sadness.

Ann Foster

Date: 6/7/2021 9:01:00 AM

Grief, this side of the darkness... well written. Great images... Ann

Juliet Ligon

Date: 6/4/2021 10:01:00 PM

Touching. Such a difficult thing to let go.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/2/2021 11:18:00 PM

A sad picture of love lost. Short snd to the point.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/1/2021 6:15:00 PM

Wow! What a graphic image you've presented here, JCB. Bullseye. ~ Ashes

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/1/2021 1:36:00 PM

Your " Breath " took my breath away, dearest, JCB! Romantically tender and loving! Blessings.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/1/2021 5:52:00 AM

Good Morning JCB - Wonderful format and contest aside your entry is excellent poetry with a specialized moment in time and imagery of that very moment. Thank you for sharing with us. Enjoy poetry soup.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2021 1:56:00 PM

wow, I love how you did your tanka. I really need to get going on mine. Hope I can do as well.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/29/2021 9:06:00 PM

Awesome write with great imagery, JCB. <3

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 5/29/2021 8:56:00 PM

Oh so sad and deep, the emotions of parting well expressed dear JCB... Best wishes in the contest dear... Have a blessed lovely day... ~ Ani

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/29/2021 6:42:00 PM

Very sad, but a good write, :)