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I stab my heart with metaphorical daggers, wishing it was me in your place. I'm impatient waiting for you to say something. How ironic you always despised silence, now I wait for you to break yours because your motionless malady of muteness, torments the tenderness, of my apprehensive heart. How i miss your melodious voice, how you called my name. Reflections of our last words linger - increasing the anguish of  this unexpected reunion. I reflect back to our youthful days when you danced - as elegant as a swan, as delicate as a butterfly, always inspiring the ink. Until you danced away, because life was not what you wanted it to be - not even me but at least you were free. You forgot about the west, turned to the east, became an icon of compassion. I throw stones at the grim reaper - do not answer his call of death. I feel you are drowning, won't you swim back to reality? All I have is the power of prayer, believing God will show mercy. Hoping your flame flickers again, not blowing away with winter winds.

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Date: 3/2/2020 8:28:00 AM
Wow all I can express
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Date: 2/1/2020 8:21:00 AM
Wow!
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Date: 11/26/2019 9:46:00 AM
A broken heart dancing to the tune of prayers is sheer poetry and sincere musings of a loving heart. Beautiful, Silent One.
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Date: 11/25/2019 11:19:00 AM
There is power in prayer. Wonderful poem. love phyl
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Date: 11/19/2019 4:06:00 AM
Breaking the echoes of silence ...
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Date: 11/17/2019 10:09:00 PM
'Elegant as swan', 'apprehensive heart', 'icon of compassion' so many attractive words. Above all lies the 'power of prayer'. Heartiest blessing to Truly Talented Poet
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Date: 11/17/2019 7:21:00 AM
Very kind. Full of concern . Borrowing your words it's .. as elegant as a swan, as delicate as a butterfly Great flow ....kept sharing . Tks
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Date: 11/15/2019 4:03:00 AM
Hi Si: this is sadly beautiful. But, maybe that sums all of us up. The sad and beautiful nature of life. I pray your loved one awakens to you again. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 11/15/2019 3:01:00 AM
You broke the silence and a flow of generous sentiments reached the reader's heart.. We feel true compassion.. genuine concern.. and sincere prayers in so fine a poetry that meets the beauty of a poet's inner soul.. Always a great delight to read your wonderful work, Silent One.. My warmest wishes and regards. Blessings to you.
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Date: 11/14/2019 6:28:00 PM
I smiled at , " my apprehensive heart." and "Not even me" for the beauty of it all...Nice to read YOU
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Date: 11/14/2019 1:12:00 PM
How lovely when someone thinks of another in prayer..How wonderful when someone wishes for the flame to flicker again even if in rough winds..How sweet this poem is..Lovely and thoughtful.
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Date: 11/13/2019 2:11:00 PM
This is a poignant poem, Silent One, filled with feeling, and an undercurrent of helplessness for a dear friend slipping away...I lost a dear friend beginning of last year, who died of heart problems, but he had already given up on living. Didn't want to eat anymore. I found this poem deeply touching, reminds me of that loss of a friend. I do miss him. Warm regards, Aqua M.
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Date: 11/13/2019 5:26:00 AM
This is beautiful and so powerful :-) x
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Date: 11/12/2019 11:36:00 PM
Your thoughts always tug deeply at the heart, while circling the mind- as pain is felt. That sting seems to linger, never ceasing. How could it? Once again you touch all emotions within. ~ Brandy
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Date: 11/12/2019 4:47:00 PM
You make excellent use of free verse, S-1. The topic of the poem and music go hand in hand. When all is said and done, and solutions are not in sight, prayer could certainly be the answer. Regards // paul
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Date: 11/12/2019 3:32:00 PM
Love, loss, hope, faith and a silence that speaks volumes. A piece that is as poignant as it is brilliant.
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Date: 11/11/2019 11:57:00 AM
Power comes to those who pray. A riveting poem Silent one sad but sparkling in imagination and creativity! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 11/11/2019 10:20:00 AM
A sparkling gem of a poem, SO. The deep reflections ripple w/defiant hope. Such is the positive force of prayer. Frame this poetic baptismal. Magnifique poetry. Love and more love always.
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Date: 11/11/2019 8:31:00 AM
There is power in prayer.. A touching write Silent...
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Date: 11/10/2019 7:46:00 PM
Really enjoyed this and the way you flipped into some cute rhyme after the part :you danced away
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Date: 11/10/2019 3:36:00 PM
The power of prayer is the best we can own, anything else is water. A lovely sentimental write, full of strength, and courage. Thanks for sharing Silent One. ps. sometimes even Silence has its own verbatim
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Date: 11/10/2019 1:04:00 PM
- When reality becomes different than we think it should be ... a beautifully written poem in all its sadness, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/10/2019 1:29:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/10/2019 12:33:00 PM
This feels like someone waiting by the bedside of a loved one hoping against hope she will recover from some terrible injury. A fantastic write filled with emotion. Good job here. God Bless, JB
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Silent One
Date: 11/10/2019 1:29:00 PM
That is coerect a very dear friend of mine is sick...Thank you
Date: 11/10/2019 3:25:00 AM
"How i miss your melodious voice, how you called my name." - wonderfully done, there is such a pining for a reconciliation!
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Silent One
Date: 11/10/2019 6:45:00 AM
Yes... But sometimes we leave it too late...Thank you Caren .
Date: 11/9/2019 11:36:00 PM
This is such a wonderful poem, SO... It touches the heart and soul. I don't know how you always come up with such penetrating poetry. I love it. God bless you dear friend, Gina
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Silent One
Date: 11/10/2019 6:45:00 AM
Thank you for the great compliment...The last few proms I have done have been personal, so I guess it is easier to write ..
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