Tim Smith Poet Free verse

Breaking Point

I can't take it no more

this is too much

Your words are just words

you use as a crutch

My mind is a mess

these pills just dont work

Why don't you care

I'm going beserk


One minute I'm up

the next one I'm down

This life is strangling me

I might as well drown

I sit in the dark

never seeing the light

You're all out to get me

I'm living in fright

I polish my guns

They are a true friend

Since you don't love me

Today will be our end


***based on a true story of a co-worker. Last weekend he attempted to shoot his wife over cold dinner****

Hope he can get the help he truely needs

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Richard Lamoureux December 11, 2014 at 8:03 AM This is scarey! At first I thought you were describing a bi-polar experience but this is much worse. I'm glad his wife is okay.

Maurice Yvonne November 30, 2014 at 3:57 PM I hope he is in lock up for his and everyone else's protection. Well written, excellent story telling. Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 4:00 PM Last I heard he was...too many tragedies...let's prevent one

Andrea Dietrich November 30, 2014 at 12:06 PM well glad to know it was merely an "attempt" and that he did not actually kill her. It is happening all over the world. People are just reaching their breaking points. good one about an example from today's world. Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 2:16 PM Thanks Andrea...The whole workplace was shaken up on Friday....hugs Tim

Thomas Carney November 30, 2014 at 8:28 AM Congrats on a real thing that happens. Am glad you told us. It's amazing how (I believe) we are all capable of being pushed to the limit. To shoot someone though? Wow. Good work. Thomas Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 2:09 PM Thank you Thomas...I would never have believed it if I hadn't read it in the news.

Nette Onclaud November 29, 2014 at 11:42 PM so many real stories of tragedy abound these days... this is a riveting piece, tim... fine writing as always.. huggs Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 2:08 PM Thanks nette..too much tragedy...hope it will end..but realistically I doubt it...huggs

Gary Bateman November 29, 2014 at 6:13 PM Tim, Your write here paints well a very tragic and very frightening event indeed!! I hope the person in question gets all the medical and psychiatric help he needs. (Be careful too my very good friend -- one does not know when someone like this could spin totally out of control!!) My thoughts and prayers are with this man and his wife. May the Lord help them!! Best, Gary Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 2:06 PM Thanks Gary....hopefully he will get the help he needs.

David Meade November 29, 2014 at 4:35 PM hopelessness and anger are a lethal combination. Be safe my dear friend. Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 5:16 PM Thank you David my friend..

Jan Allison November 29, 2014 at 3:46 PM such a tragic story tim i hope he gets the help he needs - Ive been close to breaking this week with stress caused by others am on the way up now:-( Hugs jan Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 4:14 PM Such a tragedy... He was talking retirement.... Glad he didn't take his aggression out at work...he got into a verbal shouting match with a supervisor a few weeks ago...hugs Tim

Anne-Lise Andresen November 29, 2014 at 3:07 PM - Woow, Tim ....... he really need help ...... NOW !!! - Well written ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 3:12 PM He was ordered held in a psychiatric ward for 72 hours but I haven't heard anything else...hugs Tim

Charmaine Chircop November 29, 2014 at 3:03 PM It is a tragic event indeed.Its scary when the mind snaps and lose its reason.Its scary for both victim and aggressor cause they will both suffer consequences. This is sad and he definitely needs help,as his wife needs refuge at such times.I dont support the idea of owing a gun so easy, to get a licence for guns should be in certain cases only .Guns are not toys. The family is in my prayers dear.. May God help them both. Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 3:11 PM Thanks Charma...I'm pretty sure he bought 4 guns legally in the past month...it should have raised red flags...I pray for them both as well....hugs Tim

Dorian Petersen Potter November 29, 2014 at 2:41 PM Eh Tim my dear friend this is a very scary story your sharing here with us all. Sadly it happens everywhere sometimes, all this violence is so horrible like a cancer eating many. Over a cold dinner you say? that's so incredible. Yes, I hope it gets the help he needs your friend is a very sick puppy for sure, some very wrong with him. He needs prayers too. A 7 from me! :) Love and hugs! xxx D. Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 2:45 PM Thanks Dorian...yes he needs prayers as well...hugs Tim

Brenda Meier-Hans November 29, 2014 at 2:25 PM Wow Tim, this is great. Horrible story but great write. Tim Smith November 29, 2014 at 2:29 PM Thanks Brenda...he worked right along side me last Friday... Such a sad incident... Hugs Tim