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Break Down the Wall To My Heart

Such bitterness, heartbreak and pain
Never ever want to get hurt again

Built a brick wall around my heart
Will I ever rebuild it now we are apart

Betrayed by one you once adored
Trust once gone can’t be restored

Maybe in time the pain I will reveal
And my inner hurt I won’t conceal

The wall will gradually start breaking down
Maybe smile again, no longer wear a frown

In time I will move on, my heart will be free
Re-discover the person I once used to be

Jan Allison
31st August 2014

~awarded 9th place~

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Kika Ayala Date: 9/3/2014 8:46:00 PM Congratulations on your win! Excellent piece! Kika Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/3/2014 10:38:00 PM thank you so much Kika and I love the avatar I am an orchidalic got over 20 now lol. Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/3/2014 1:58:00 PM Congratulations Jan. Great poem. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/3/2014 2:08:00 PM Ooh I didnt know it had been judged thanks for bringing me great news:-) ooh 9th place am made up. Hugs Jan xxx

Bronwyn Matthew Date: 9/2/2014 11:19:00 AM This is a beautiful poem. I wrote something similar many years ago so I understand those kind of feelings well. Thanks for your comment on mine. Hugs xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/2/2014 11:26:00 AM I think it is a poem many can relate to Brownyn:-) Thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Madaline Cannon Date: 9/2/2014 8:38:00 AM This is a wonderful poem. I'm going through a break up, and this is how I feel. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/2/2014 9:23:00 AM Oh Madaline I am so sorry - I am sure many people can relate to this write. i do hope things improve for you and you find happiness once more:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Arthur Vaso Date: 9/1/2014 11:28:00 PM Mine all comes from wine, usually a nice red Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 11:33:00 PM mine must come from tea then LOL:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 9/1/2014 10:34:00 PM I loved this one! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 10:52:00 PM Thanks Arthur - no idea where this stuff comes from but then again that is the same with most of my writes:-) hugs jan xxx

Casarah Nance Date: 9/1/2014 11:54:00 AM :) awesome couplets Jan, its cool you can go from silly to serious, ya never know what to expect from your pen. hugs :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 1:17:00 PM Thanks for the lovely comment as ever - it is great to have you back:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton Date: 9/1/2014 6:57:00 AM pain pours out of this lovely pen Jan be strong and all will pass hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 8:02:00 AM I'm fine Shadow its a fictional write but i am sure many can relate to it:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 9/1/2014 1:22:00 AM you scared me. i wasn't sure if it was a fictional write or real. beautifully written all the same. lots of love. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 1:24:00 AM Hi Maurice thanks for the lovely comment as ever:-) hugs Jan xx

Lucilla Carrillo Date: 9/1/2014 1:12:00 AM This is just beautiful. When someone breaks our heart - it takes a long time to heal, or someone very special to break the wall down. It can happen. Thanks for sharing.... Lucilla Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/1/2014 1:23:00 AM thanks for the lovely comment Lucilla:-) hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 8/31/2014 5:38:00 PM This time my mouth is open for another reason. This was brilliant. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/31/2014 5:39:00 PM Oh Brenda that is a lovely comment thank you:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 8/31/2014 3:31:00 PM Yes Jan....day by day...brick by brick...the smiling will come back....you'll be one again......hugs Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/31/2014 3:58:00 PM That's good to hear my friend:-) Hugs jan xxx

Frederic Parker Date: 8/31/2014 2:15:00 PM though you say it's fictional as writers we tend to leave a piece of ourselves in everything we write..the substance of this poem is wrapped in truth my poetic friend Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/31/2014 2:20:00 PM Thanks for the lovely comment Frederic - yes I guess I can relate to it in my youth. I don't think any of us don't get hurt in a relationship of some kind at some stage of our lives. Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian Date: 8/31/2014 1:37:00 PM Jan...this is a powerful write. I've often felt this way too. That wall....it can also serve as a prison...Make sure that you let in those who love you. Hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/31/2014 1:44:00 PM Purely a fictional write Eileen but I am sure people can relate to it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman Date: 8/31/2014 1:31:00 PM Hello Jan . . . Your use of the Couplet form is the perfect vehicle (my opinion) for capturing the intensity of the emotions and feelings revealed as the poem builds out. An extraordinary job with powerful succinct articulation. I find that sometimes the shorter poems when so crafted can make a bigger impact than some of the longer poems. One can sense and feel the emotion in this poem. Beautiful Work!! Cheers, Gary Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/31/2014 1:43:00 PM Many thanks Gary for the lovely comments.I originally formatted it with 4 lines then changed it to couplets so thanks to your comments I know I made the right decision. Hugs Jan xx