Brainstorm-Finding Abigail

Finding Abigail

“Abigail! ~Abigail!...where are you, my love?
I can’t see you, nor smell you, let alone touch you…”

A nebulous cloud encroaches the corridors of mind,
Where a fallacious hope seeks its refuge in silence.

“Abigail! Is that you? I thought I heard someone talking…”

Disembodied voices revel throughout the empty voids,
Existence in the grand abyss impenetrable from both sides.

“Abigail, I know you care about me…I can’t see you,
but I hear you…I remember the time we met my sweet,
the sky and air stood still until we embraced…
then came the fireworks…we must still be there, for all I see
is smoke my dearest…Abigail! come back my love,
 I’ve lost you in the smog!”

Illusions begging resolutions, the marginal mind wanders,
Taking with it memories of what used to be,
but now has been abandoned.

“Abigail my love…I’m afraid…can you hold my hand my sweet?
this is no good, I can’t reach you…where are you…Abigail!?”

The subject is going into Cardiac arrest… convulsions are increasing!...
We are losing him! Quickly flush with at least 20ml of 0.9% sodium chloride…

“Abigail my dearest…I can see you…so beautiful you are…come to me
My love…come closer...let us start anew.”

Nurse, prepare him for surgery…there is a good chance we may save him…”yes Doctor.”

“Abigail! Abigail! ...I’m losing you, my love…come back, come bac, com…”

He’ll be OK now…we saved him, but sadly he will still be enslaved by love…




Oct.04.2018
Brainstorm Poetry
Sponsored by: John Hamilton


Placed 2'nd [1'st of 8]
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Neumann Avatar
October 26, 2018 at 11:18 AM
Great stuff. Congratulations on your win. Am I missing something or is there a transgender element underlying the rescue? Kind wishes, Kai
Nicole Avatar
October 25, 2018 at 1:57 PM
Congratulations on this win. This beautiful and haunting, all at the same time. ~ Brandy
Andresen Avatar
October 25, 2018 at 1:51 PM
- A wonderful poem, W.W. ... in pain of body and mind - Congratulations :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Hamilton Avatar
October 25, 2018 at 12:43 PM
Great write WW, very compelling and realistic I felt for the poor guy...congrats on a great win!
Wolf Avatar
October 10, 2018 at 12:54 PM
Fascinating write! Best of luck in the contest! ~ gw
Raven Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 9:23 PM
Hi John, good luck in the contest, I hope this piece does well. Again your poetic excellence shines through in this wonderful free verse write. Free verse seems to have been made for your writing style. It is always a pleasure and an honour to visit your poetry. You know how to tell a story my friend. A wonderful read. Another fave my friend. Have a Wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
Roper Avatar
October 6, 2018 at 7:35 PM
What a great write , ^WW^, a perfect scene of near death experience. Good luck in the contest ...
Kiser Avatar
October 5, 2018 at 4:09 AM
I feel for him; his longing and pain. Beautiful poem.
Nicole Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 10:33 PM
An emotional journey you have taken me on, and I am still lost in these moments- the ones you so tenderly express. Deep sigh. Love & Heartbeats. ~ Brandy
One Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 4:37 PM
Great story telling WW.. So are you a right winged or left winged warrior? Lol
Onclaud Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 2:55 PM
beguiled by this remarkable piece; well i hope this is not co-dependency, but then again, the progression of suspense hit me, WW... huggs
Williams Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 7:37 AM
Wow!! two strong contenders I see, both on a somewhat similar trend. Dramatic and suspense rolled in. WW, I loved it from beginning to end, however good luck my dear friend....Maria hugs
Trifiatis Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 7:31 AM
Very beautifully done dear friend, WW! Wish you good luck!
Sands Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 6:53 AM
Great one WW! Each line a suspense to the next. Well done :)
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 2:10 AM
With entries like yours and Victors it will be a tough one to judge. Love the imagery. Tom
Bangalee Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 12:53 AM
wow excellent expression of devotion- He’ll be OK now…we saved him, but sadly he will still be enslaved by love…
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