Brain Storm

A sudden frightening change swept through
my mind the moment I saw you
sunny mood turned overcast
unpleasant, foul gust from the past
surge of heat in atmosphere
squall of shame, confusion, fear
disturbing equilibrium
wishing I had never come

Dark clouds building in my brain
bursting, blowing heavy rain
of thoughts, emotion, memory
flooding, flowing out to sea
then violent waves come rushing back
as all inside my mind goes black
tossed within this tempest swell
I've lost all time and cannot tell
a moment from an hour- or day
insanity on full display

As hurricane roars through my head
with terrifying endless dread
I clench the driftwood of my faith
and pray that I will come out safe
eventually, the storm dies out
and I am able to look about
and see the world unscathed by storm
that wrecked my brain, twisted, transformed
and left me shaken, scarred and scared
to know you never even cared

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 10/6/2018 10:21:00 PM
Impacting ink! Woah. A helluva write Rhona! I love it and everything written below. A winner of a poem on its own. xomo
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/6/2018 11:05:00 PM
Thank you so very much- your comment made my day! ;)
Date: 10/5/2018 4:03:00 AM
This poem reminds me of a hypervigilent child, who has survived. The children I see the most often can understand this pain, and some day they will be able to read this poem and think "I am not alone" so please keep writing, my friend. Your emotions are begging to be let out.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/5/2018 1:01:00 PM
Thank you for the encouragement! ;) It sometimes startles me how easily pieces like this are to write... as if I have a reserve of pain somewhere that just floods out on the right prompt! What you said about others connecting with this type of writing (& feeling comforted) is the main reason I keep on writing.
Date: 10/4/2018 10:15:00 PM
I started to write something for the "Brainstorm" contest, but the rules said 'free form only' and this begged to be rhymed! ;P (Oh well, I like it anyway...)
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 10/5/2018 4:01:00 AM
I have done this so many times, I cannot count them.
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