Box Car Blues

Just wanted to stop by and say hi. I must say Donna you have a wonderful way with words in your poetry. I always enjoy reading your work so much. Hope all is well and have a peaceful weekend!

I seem to keep being drawn back to this one. Good morning Donna.

I enjoyed reading this one again.

Good morning, I don't know enough to comment on the form but I do love the topic and image you created with this piece. Your grandpa would be honored.

Hi Donna; Your poem is good. I have to confess that I don't know much about all these types of poetry. This is why I only write free Verse, Acrostic, or Narrative. I got to know some people that worked for the rail road and also lived like that. Those must have been very hard times. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla

I have no idea about this form, but the poem is awesome. Loved much always, bl

Boxcar Blues sure your grandpa knew the blues

donna!... for a first try , this is awesome... what a soulful air you created here with glimpses of redolent memories... much enjoyed!..:) huggs .. soupmal!

Many kudos to you on this 1st attempt. It's not easy, but you did this form very well. This was a tremendous story about your grandfather.

A HEARTFELT BEAUTIFUL PIECE I REALLY ENJOYED

Thanks for the nice comment, Donna. I've been enjoying reading your poems! This is a nice tribute to your grandfather! Sounds like a nice song, too! Molly

A wonderful first try Donna, thanks for sharing the poem.. xox~ Linda

I think that you got it correct..I always have to look up a form and see how to do them before I write one..Thanks for stopping by my work Ballerina...Sara

ALWAYS...proud of you! :) A triolet...I've never tried one. You've inspired me. Lovely, piece, MD....so full of meaning...We need to be grateful for what we have....Also, the difficult times lend themselves to beauty! Love you!

Great piece Donna. My dad used to ride the rails when he was a kid..he kind of raised himself..couldn't imagine it these days. Great how you used the guitar throughout. BG

Incredible! This first attempt is better than my best attempt Donna! You have done very well with this form my friend, very well! This form can be a lot of fun to do, but can also be quite frustrating at times as well (you probably already noticed that)! I'd listen to what Andrea said, this looks GREAT, she is an expert at these Triolets, she's written a ton of them! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this afternoon! It's amazing that you grandfather lived in a boxcar! Great Work!!

- Agree with Jack .... whatever they call this form ... Why make it difficult when you do it so beautifully .... finally a new poem Donna!! - a little sad blues... - Love it ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

It can be sung with guitar, this poem

hey, this looks GREAT. Bravo on your first triolet attempt. And how unusual that your grandpa lived in a boxcar. Those were horrible days and I hope America never has to relive them.

No matter what they call it... you did good! A sweet remembrance of those difficult day! Love and sweet thoughts xoxoxox

great job !! less words written , amazing.