Nette Onclaud Poet Light Verse

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Bond of Brothers

Look at you , my young brother so alive
like a sea-god with feet curling on waves,
the reef drenching our  boxers of summer
with impish eyes grinning till noon cracks.
I have a best buddy gentle as crests’ ebb;
he’ll be a rocker  like me when we grow up,
chart- topper of  wind-songs blowing the tides
drooling cool rhythm ; fine lyrics I will supply.


Trust me, your superman vows on bond’s warmth
under lit stars, guitars and bonfire shall flame…
now, if our folks can add a sister into this knit
five of us beachcombers, can conquer the seas!


Oil Paintings 1-2-3 any Poem form
For Eve Roper’s Contest
Visual #1
11/14/2015

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Kp Nunez November 19, 2015 at 12:04 PM Once again, a great write Nette. Love shines out through all the lines. Congrats on your win! hugs!

Anindya Mohan Tagore November 18, 2015 at 9:43 PM Wonderful composition. Regards, Bobby

Jill Spagnola November 18, 2015 at 3:40 PM Congratulations Nette, i really enjoyed this well deserved win...:), jill

Paul Callus November 18, 2015 at 12:38 PM So impressed by your unique take on this picture, Nette! It is so lovely when brothers can be buddies ... and wishing for a sister adds warmth to this inspired poem! ~ Congratulations on placing first! Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2015 at 7:39 AM This is terrific story telling Nette. I enjoyed this very much.

Kayod5 Kayode November 18, 2015 at 3:19 AM Every line is a pointer to your God given talent,the more I read your work the better I appreciate you. "I have a best buddy gentle as crests’ ebb; he’ll be a rocker like me when we grow up,";"and if a bully dares you , ill whack his neck..." ; these can not be said to be ordinary . The way you technically omitted " will" in:ill(will) whack his neck is so beautiful, I just love your style nette;...congrats on this wonderful work and win...hugs.

Skat A November 17, 2015 at 9:49 PM Nette, Congratulations, Have a nice day. SKAT

Eve Roper November 17, 2015 at 9:36 PM Thank you so very much for composing and submitting a poem in my contest, Nette, congratulations on your win!!! My husband and I truly enjoyed the poem. Hugs dear friend Eve

Michael Tor November 17, 2015 at 9:32 PM Congratulations nette on your win.Very well written.

Elis Artis November 17, 2015 at 7:53 PM Outstanding write:) Congratulations on the well-deserve spot!

Lin Lane November 17, 2015 at 6:48 PM well done, nette

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores November 17, 2015 at 6:44 PM Congratulations Nette

Jan Allison November 17, 2015 at 5:55 PM Such a delightful interpretation of the image many congrats on your win Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Len Gasun November 15, 2015 at 12:32 AM This is really a very striking piece my very dear friend, Nette. A brilliant write indeed. A while ago, this beautiful painting caught my attention when I visited the contest nook but nothing conceived in my thought. But you did really great! Loving this so much my dear friend. So glad I came back here to read. All the best in the contest. Many hugs! Btw, sorry I wasn't able to go home last undas 'coz of sched at school. Hope next time dearest one. Miss you, love lots Leonora

Emile Pinet November 14, 2015 at 10:09 AM This poem is a mixture of fantasy, adventure and brotherly love, that flows off the tongue like syrup while leaving a sweet after taste....delicious!

CayCay Godwin November 14, 2015 at 8:37 AM You portrayed the big brother as a truly loving and caring sibling. I love his innocent passion for life and family. I enjoyed the direction you took this - it is uplifting ... CayCay

Anne-Lise Andresen November 14, 2015 at 6:30 AM - Not written in ink ...... but, with love :) - A wonderful poem - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Norma Arana November 14, 2015 at 5:35 AM Intimate poem and a very insightful images on the topic, strong feelings and message penned just resonates in greatness! I'm impressed poetess as I miss my sibling!

Noel Onat November 14, 2015 at 5:23 AM This spoke to me. I only have one brother and we are very close till now. Your hearty, eloquent poem is outstanding!