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Boatman

There is a misty hanging over the lake A line of pollen colorless in the smoke lapping the bank With things those outlined unreachable against the far far shore Needle outlines pines roof of an old tool shed ghostly wondering within Eyes imagined yellow peering red wet tongues hanging This the very sort of day to set one odd-dreaming There is a quiet distant music sounding then A faint ripple distant plash awakens vision I cannot see but hear the musical dipping of oars "Hey! Boatman!" I yell into the gloom "Hey! Boatman! How deep?" no reply "Would I wade out? Is there an undertow? Would I sink only make a pin-point entry be lost eternally?" I laugh No reply Still the steady dipping now growing near now far the steady dipping to a heartbeat maddening! to think he might appear at any moment dreaming to the quiet eerie music and on and on "Apparition! Won't you speak? I've watched listened for hours it seems then A breeze at last cuts the gloom My vision starts! There is no one out there "Hey! Boatman! Where?"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 5/20/2011 5:37:00 PM
Ohhhh...I think this mysterious boatman must have sailed off with Mary Jane.:( I'll search again tomorrow..sighhh Nothing nebulous about this write, aside from that boatman. Truly enjoying this write...a keeper for me, Daver! Bon soir, Love, Mikki
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Date: 5/8/2010 7:38:00 AM
Very interesting atmosphere this one. I am imagining the mythical boatman who takes us to our death. Daver, why do you say you are an amatuer? you put most of the writers here to shame! LUv, andrea
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Date: 11/17/2008 12:20:00 PM
Nice use of imagery and conversation. I like the eerie feel of this one. Thank you for sharing your creativity with us and for your kind words regarding my haiku. Have a nice day! Karen
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Date: 7/22/2008 11:15:00 AM
Creepy good. Loved the gloomy, foggy imagery. Makes me want to go finish reading my new Stephen King Book. : ) Daver, please do not feel you need to go back to my old poems! Not necessary! Keep writing, enjoy your poetry very much. Love, Shar
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Date: 7/22/2008 10:13:00 AM
I think it is a shape poem. You were going for the shape of a boat, right? That's what I saw. Also, I loved the poem. It speaks to something within everyone I think.
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