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 Internal Rhyme Scheme

Premiere Contest WinnerBlue Daisy

And so legend goes, of a daisy, not a rose
of a love to behold that quickly grew cold
Etched in regret, Daisy ponders in a fret
should he return, for him would she yearn

One eve a sweet miss was given her first kiss
her heart took to flight on that moonlit night
He lured her with smiles using wicked wiles
Promised to be true in words he misconstrue

In Spring's lush bowers he gave her flowers
She was crazy about the ones called  'daisy'
He gave her a bouquet each and every day
With loving care he twined them in her hair

Near Summer's end came signs of portend
Her lover disappeared, so then she feared
He played her false with each sensual waltz
they had ever shared, pretending he cared

Legend is hazy, but it's said that each daisy
turned a shade of blue, of the deepest hue
That Summer it snowed and her tears flowed
salty crystals froze because of love's throes

Rejection brought pangs so now there hangs
a canvas of art, painted by her broken heart
Blue daisies in a vase, hung above the fireplace
where fire never burned, once love was spurned

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June 17th, 2017
Blue Daisy Contest
Sponsor: Mystic Rose
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Callus Avatar
June 24, 2017 at 5:48 PM
A big round of applause for bringing the trophy home, Lin:) Truly deserved! Congratulations...I love the captivating sad content and your able use of internal rhyme. ~ Regards // paul
Lane Avatar
June 24, 2017 at 6:49 PM
You make me happy in knowing you appreciate the internal rhyme. Thank you, Paul.
Duet Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 6:19 PM
What a tale! What a write! Just great and congrats to you, Lin.
Lane Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 8:15 PM
Thanks a whole lot, Carole.
Hamilton Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:41 PM
Wonderful write Lin, congrats on a great win, I'm a sucker for internal rhyme poems, and this is a beauty!!
Lane Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 8:14 PM
Thank you ever so much, John.
Roper Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 3:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Lin, fascinating poem ~*
Lane Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 10:26 PM
and I thank you very much, Eve.
Ritz Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 8:28 AM
Wow. Congratulations on your win. An incredibly touching story. Plus I'm a sucker for internal rhymes. P.L.
Lane Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 10:25 PM
I'm honored and grateful that you appreciate the rhyme scheme as well as the poem. Thanks, P L.
Nusker Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 11:16 PM
I'm awed by this wonderful poem of yours. What a gripping legend told, filled with whirling emotions. Congrats on your trophy win, Lin.
Lane Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 10:24 PM
Thank you, Afzal.
Warrior Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 9:03 PM
Congrats!!! lady Lin...not surprised, none the least...your chariot awaits my lady...where do wish to celebrate your victory lol...^WW^
Lane Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 9:13 PM
Fly me to the dark side of the moon. We'll pick up a few stars on the way and waltz by starlight until dawn. Thanks, my warrior friend.
Walker Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 7:44 PM
Congratulations on your win, Well deserved for this beautiful write Lin :)
Lane Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 8:16 PM
Thanks ever so much, Lenna.
Andresen Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 7:23 PM
- Congratulations on your beautiful winning poems, Lin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Lane Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 8:16 PM
Thank you for the complimentary thoughts, Anne-Lise.
Turner Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 5:32 PM
Congratulations Peaches on your well deserved top spot.
Lane Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 5:36 PM
and I thank you very much for the comments, Danny.
Allison Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 4:56 PM
Wohhooo a top spot for you with this wonderful poem Lin:-) many many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
June 21, 2017 at 5:20 PM
Thanks so much, Jan, and congrats back to you. I see your name on the list as well.
Sergi Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 12:10 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
Lane Avatar
June 20, 2017 at 3:21 PM
I'll read this a third time... and thanks!! ;-)
Sergi Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 12:09 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
Lane Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 12:27 PM
Thanks very much, Ralph.
Sergi Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 12:09 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
Lane Avatar
June 20, 2017 at 3:21 PM
;-)
Daniel Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 1:36 AM
Very beautiful, Lin, I'm still wondering what to write on!! Your rhyming sad love story is exceptional:) and so is the painting:)
Lane Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 10:20 AM
Thanks, Jo. I'm sure you'll write something spectacular.
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 3:54 PM
Your poem so wonderfully matches the melancholic look of the painting. You did a great job with this entry that is sure to do well in the contest Lin. Superb! : )
Lane Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 10:20 AM
I thank you so very much for the great comments and well wishes, Connie.
Smith Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 12:40 PM
Wow Lin this is so good...a favorite for me
Lane Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 10:19 AM
Thank you most sincerely, Tim.
Turner Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 10:33 AM
You wrote a good one Peaches. I have been holding my muse hostage, trying to come up with something Good luck:)
Lane Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 11:32 AM
What's the ransom price, Danny? I'll pay it because you need to turn her loose. Thanks for the kudos.
Allison Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 9:59 AM
aww Lin such a touching poem and the internal rhyme is fabulous:-) the choice of painting is superb as it looks like the daisies are weeping:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 11:31 AM
Thanks all around, Jan. I think I might paint this beauty myself, with a titch of a slant.
Cozart Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 8:47 AM
BEAUTIFUL!! Very nicely done.
Lane Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 11:30 AM
Thank you bunches, Dale.
Warrior Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 8:44 AM
A poetic waltz Lin...only so many few can do...best of luck and god bless...^WW^
Lane Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 11:30 AM
Hello, my winged one. Thanks ever so for your sweet comments.
Andresen Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 8:41 AM
- You woven a great story out of a beautiful flower bouquet, Lin - Beautiful and a touching story - Good luck in the contest ... a winning poem, I believe - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Lane Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 11:29 AM
Thank so very much, Anne-Lise, for your kind remarks.
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