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 Internal Rhyme Scheme

And so legend goes, of a daisy, not a rose of a love to behold that quickly grew cold Etched in regret, Daisy ponders in a fret should he return, for him would she yearn One eve a sweet miss was given her first kiss her heart took to flight on that moonlit night He lured her with smiles using wicked wiles Promised to be true in words he misconstrue In Spring's lush bowers he gave her flowers She was crazy about the ones called 'daisy' He gave her a bouquet each and every day With loving care he twined them in her hair Near Summer's end came signs of portend Her lover disappeared, so then she feared He played her false with each sensual waltz they had ever shared, pretending he cared Legend is hazy, but it's said that each daisy turned a shade of blue, of the deepest hue That Summer it snowed and her tears flowed salty crystals froze because of love's throes Rejection brought pangs so now there hangs a canvas of art, painted by her broken heart Blue daisies in a vase, hung above the fireplace where fire never burned, once love was spurned ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, June 17th, 2017 Blue Daisy Contest Sponsor: Mystic Rose

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Date: 6/24/2017 5:48:00 PM
A big round of applause for bringing the trophy home, Lin:) Truly deserved! Congratulations...I love the captivating sad content and your able use of internal rhyme. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 6/24/2017 6:49:00 PM
You make me happy in knowing you appreciate the internal rhyme. Thank you, Paul.
Date: 6/23/2017 6:19:00 PM
What a tale! What a write! Just great and congrats to you, Lin.
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Date: 6/23/2017 8:15:00 PM
Thanks a whole lot, Carole.
Date: 6/23/2017 12:41:00 PM
Wonderful write Lin, congrats on a great win, I'm a sucker for internal rhyme poems, and this is a beauty!!
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Date: 6/23/2017 8:14:00 PM
Thank you ever so much, John.
Date: 6/22/2017 3:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Lin, fascinating poem ~*
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Date: 6/22/2017 10:26:00 PM
and I thank you very much, Eve.
Date: 6/22/2017 8:28:00 AM
Wow. Congratulations on your win. An incredibly touching story. Plus I'm a sucker for internal rhymes. P.L.
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Date: 6/22/2017 10:25:00 PM
I'm honored and grateful that you appreciate the rhyme scheme as well as the poem. Thanks, P L.
Date: 6/21/2017 11:16:00 PM
I'm awed by this wonderful poem of yours. What a gripping legend told, filled with whirling emotions. Congrats on your trophy win, Lin.
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Date: 6/22/2017 10:24:00 PM
Thank you, Afzal.
Date: 6/21/2017 9:03:00 PM
Congrats!!! lady Lin...not surprised, none the least...your chariot awaits my lady...where do wish to celebrate your victory lol...^WW^
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Date: 6/21/2017 9:13:00 PM
Fly me to the dark side of the moon. We'll pick up a few stars on the way and waltz by starlight until dawn. Thanks, my warrior friend.
Date: 6/21/2017 7:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Well deserved for this beautiful write Lin :)
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Date: 6/21/2017 8:16:00 PM
Thanks ever so much, Lenna.
Date: 6/21/2017 7:23:00 PM
- Congratulations on your beautiful winning poems, Lin :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/21/2017 8:16:00 PM
Thank you for the complimentary thoughts, Anne-Lise.
Date: 6/21/2017 5:32:00 PM
Congratulations Peaches on your well deserved top spot.
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Date: 6/21/2017 5:36:00 PM
and I thank you very much for the comments, Danny.
Date: 6/21/2017 4:56:00 PM
Wohhooo a top spot for you with this wonderful poem Lin:-) many many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/21/2017 5:20:00 PM
Thanks so much, Jan, and congrats back to you. I see your name on the list as well.
Date: 6/19/2017 12:10:00 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
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Date: 6/20/2017 3:21:00 PM
I'll read this a third time... and thanks!! ;-)
Date: 6/19/2017 12:09:00 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
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Date: 6/20/2017 3:21:00 PM
;-)
Date: 6/19/2017 12:09:00 PM
Hi Lin: Such imagery and emotion! This definatelly a winner!
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Date: 6/19/2017 12:27:00 PM
Thanks very much, Ralph.
Date: 6/19/2017 1:36:00 AM
Very beautiful, Lin, I'm still wondering what to write on!! Your rhyming sad love story is exceptional:) and so is the painting:)
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Date: 6/19/2017 10:20:00 AM
Thanks, Jo. I'm sure you'll write something spectacular.
Date: 6/17/2017 10:45:00 PM
You have melted me me with this, such lovely poetry!
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Date: 6/19/2017 10:20:00 AM
Thanks, Arthur.
Date: 6/17/2017 3:54:00 PM
Your poem so wonderfully matches the melancholic look of the painting. You did a great job with this entry that is sure to do well in the contest Lin. Superb! : )
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Date: 6/19/2017 10:20:00 AM
I thank you so very much for the great comments and well wishes, Connie.
Date: 6/17/2017 12:40:00 PM
Wow Lin this is so good...a favorite for me
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Date: 6/19/2017 10:19:00 AM
Thank you most sincerely, Tim.
Date: 6/17/2017 10:33:00 AM
You wrote a good one Peaches. I have been holding my muse hostage, trying to come up with something Good luck:)
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Date: 6/17/2017 11:32:00 AM
What's the ransom price, Danny? I'll pay it because you need to turn her loose. Thanks for the kudos.
Date: 6/17/2017 9:59:00 AM
aww Lin such a touching poem and the internal rhyme is fabulous:-) the choice of painting is superb as it looks like the daisies are weeping:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/17/2017 11:31:00 AM
Thanks all around, Jan. I think I might paint this beauty myself, with a titch of a slant.
Date: 6/17/2017 8:47:00 AM
BEAUTIFUL!! Very nicely done.
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Date: 6/17/2017 11:30:00 AM
Thank you bunches, Dale.
Date: 6/17/2017 8:44:00 AM
A poetic waltz Lin...only so many few can do...best of luck and god bless...^WW^
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Date: 6/17/2017 11:30:00 AM
Hello, my winged one. Thanks ever so for your sweet comments.
Date: 6/17/2017 8:41:00 AM
- You woven a great story out of a beautiful flower bouquet, Lin - Beautiful and a touching story - Good luck in the contest ... a winning poem, I believe - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/17/2017 11:29:00 AM
Thank so very much, Anne-Lise, for your kind remarks.

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