Blue Cheese and Old Pickles

I fought the good fight, yet still I lost
and you stood in brackish silence
with bitter reward in briny eyes
proffering spiny frowns
shoulders crumbled with aging ache
and brow dimpled with sour failure
I staggered dragging the last crumbs
through the madness of a blue funk
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Kendrick Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 10:02 AM
Whoa!! I wonder who the old pickle is. I enjoyed this one. It reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. LOL..Sara K
Fowler Avatar
March 21, 2025 at 4:17 PM
Haha Sara. I've met a few old pickles in my life. Appreciate the visit - thanks! :)
Crandall Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 8:04 PM
Great job of writing to this challenging theme elle!
Fowler Avatar
March 20, 2025 at 11:51 AM
Hey Dave - many thanks for your continued support :)
Empress Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 9:55 AM
Awwn this is cute mixed with such truth that many can resonate with aging. And how one feels facing the world: if im correct. As thats what i felt as i read dear Linda! Its so good to read you today! Youve definitely given a very metaphorical take on the prompt and yours flow so well and i read it twice! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always
Fowler Avatar
March 20, 2025 at 11:50 AM
Ohh, thanks Inky. A "twice read" is awesome! Good to see you :)
Andresen Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 5:19 AM
- Love the humor, best wishes in the contest Linda :) - hugs
Fowler Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 7:36 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise. Not sure I meet Craig's requirements but it is all in good fun. hugs :)
Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2025 at 10:43 PM
Well I think you did much better than I did figuring out how to make this metaphorical. I just take things so literally. Hope this is a winner for you. It's pretty cool.
Fowler Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 7:36 AM
LOL Andrea. Maybe...but I am not so confident. I usually take things literally as well. I read the requirements several times before "getting" it. Thanks! :)
Hawley Avatar
March 18, 2025 at 6:07 PM
Your last two lines are funny. I think if this is a contest it is a fun one and good luck.
Fowler Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 7:33 AM
Many thanks Miranda. :)
Rodrigues Avatar
March 18, 2025 at 5:45 PM
Love the last line, Linda!
Fowler Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 7:33 AM
Thank you Kim. I like the last line, too. :)
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