Blue

BLUE dances in sultry, slow motion wooing her lover with piercing, azure eyes draped in sparkling sapphires that hang loosely around her blue blood neck. She sways like a lusty sea breeze wafting over a crystalline sky with a cool demeanor that belies her waves of passion and intensity. Now, BLUE lifts her serene head aloof, like an elegant blue heron stunning in her brilliant, cobalt dress luxurious long hair flowing behind her. BLUE urges her lover to come fly away mesmerizing him with whispering words wrapping him in cerulean silken ribbons seamlessly sealing him forever in her debt. Written on 1/4/2019

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Johny Roberts

Date: 5/22/2019 4:40:00 PM

beautiful!

Juliet Ligon

Date: 3/18/2019 4:56:00 PM

Beautiful expression of the color blue!

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/18/2019 6:50:00 PM

Thank you, Juliet! :)

Beata Agustin

Date: 2/13/2019 8:45:00 PM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 10:00:00 PM

Thanks so much, Beata! I appreciate your kind comments! :)

Craig Cornish

Date: 1/12/2019 1:47:00 PM

Laura, your poems have usually done very well in my contests and this moved into the second round along with 17 others because of your originality of theme and flow but didn't move to winners because you slipped back to inside the box with originality with my feel of how you dealt with other versions of blue especially which put it back in the box you had almost escaped -azure/sapphires/blue blood/sea/blue heron/cobalt/cerulean. If you had found a way to dodge those more creatively, you'd do it.

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/12/2019 2:00:00 PM

Thanks for the explanation, Craig..thanks. I appreciate you taking the time to explain. :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/7/2019 6:18:00 PM

If this isn't a winner, I don't know what is. What a sensually enticing 'woo in blue' you've penned, Laura. Blue-ti-ful! Best wishes, Gershon

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/11/2019 4:04:00 PM

Well, Gershon, I guess this poem was not the sponsor’s “cup of tea”...glad you thought it was good, anyway..

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/7/2019 7:09:00 PM

Thanks, Gershon! I tried to think outside the box...hope Craig likes it! :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/6/2019 11:29:00 AM

how you sway with this fantastic work with touches of personification, a wind perhaps , laura... graciously done!,,huggs

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/6/2019 9:28:00 PM

Thank you, Nette! I really wanted to approach the topic in a whole new way...glad you like it! :)

Silent One

Date: 1/5/2019 5:45:00 AM

Nice hues of blue throughout this poem.. Love how you thought out of the box... From first line to the last the poem reads so well... Nice to see you posting..

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/5/2019 9:20:00 AM

Thank you, Silent! So happy you liked this. I was extremely busy in December...now it is quiet again and I can focus on writing. :)

James Inman

Date: 1/4/2019 11:44:00 PM

A lovely write Laura.

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/5/2019 9:20:00 AM

Thank you, James. So glad you liked my poem! :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/4/2019 9:09:00 PM

The unexpected imagery gorgeous : Now, BLUE lifts up her serene head aloof, like an elegant blue heron

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/4/2019 10:13:00 PM

So glad you like this one, Kim! Happy New Year to you! :)