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Blood Stains

Copper-like
Blood stains stain my small notebook
Flippin’ sick!
 
Blood stains
Drain on my piece of paper
Disturbing…
 
Dried-up blood
Spew out from my open wounds
Bloody mess!

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Karen Anglesey

May 2, 2013 at 7:33 PM

For me, This is excellent metaphor for how one writes from the such depth. I can almost see the blood of the writer in the ink. Great creativity

Jeremy Martin

May 2, 2013 at 9:55 AM

Hey, David. I like how you refer to blood as copper-like, I see it both for the reddish quality that copper and rust have, and also the metallic taste of blood.

David William Breidenthal

May 2, 2013 at 7:01 PM

Oh really, Jeremy? Awesome. Thanks a ton! :) haha wow! You're the first to appreciate the fact that I described blood as "copper-like". Have a good week and ta-ta! -DWB