David Kavanagh Poet Monoku

:blinded as the chalk dust blew:

  oblivion is nothing new ~ i’ve been there once and will go back too

  i awoke crying as sensations grew ~ til death rubbed out all i knew

  god only knows who’s really who ~ i’m bamboozled a sign could do

  blackboard equations esoteric and true ~ chalk dust for us to chew

  can’t see past these monokus ~ that’s okay try this existential clue 

  life blindly flails on through ~ to bumble and fumble like mr magoo 


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David Kavanagh

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I Am Anaya July 21, 2024 at 12:29 PM I stumble through life overwhelmed by experiences & memories, disorientated will we know who’s who? I see the resemblance to Magoo— just luck or divine intervention that led his disastrous could’ve beens. I’m glad David, that you gave a clue anything helps. Nice to see you back! David Kavanagh July 21, 2024 at 1:08 PM Oh I really don’t know anything for sure Anaya, my line god only knows who’s really who, can be looked at in a few ways, perhaps a god really does know, the important thing is to get through life without thinking we have all the answers, and by keeping an open mind, thanks so much for the visit, cheers David

Jan Allison July 20, 2024 at 11:56 AM Excellent ink, You are a master of the rhyming monoku form David - I posted a few yesterday but its not my usual style of poetry but sometimes the words flow and you have to post! :-) hugs jan xx David Kavanagh July 20, 2024 at 2:11 PM They do take a bit of patience and practice Jan, but are very handy for delivering a concise message, in this case I was only trying to express my thoughts on oblivion and existentialism into a few lines, I mean what could go wrong lol! Cheers David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart July 20, 2024 at 8:09 AM Thoroughly. Enjoyed. Each. One. x David Kavanagh July 20, 2024 at 8:47 AM Thank you Super Mo, if you thoroughly enjoyed then I must be pretty near the mark, cheers David

Lin Lane July 20, 2024 at 5:29 AM Really? Six monorhyming Monoku sets the bar a titch high. I'm afraid I'll not measure up. I particularly like your blackboard line... sometimes everything seems to be a mystery of one sort or another. Worth trying to make the puzzle pieces fit? I'm still pondering the thought. David Kavanagh July 20, 2024 at 8:45 AM Wise words Lin, I tried out many different routes mostly when I was a kid, always liked the challenge and exploring different paths. Lin Lane July 20, 2024 at 8:16 AM The path back doesn't have to be the same path once taken. If you question your route, take a detour as long as you end up exactly where you want to be. David Kavanagh July 20, 2024 at 5:59 AM I started out with about 3 Lin, but didn’t feel my overall picture was quite there yet, so searched a little deeper and ultimately came to the conclusion of a Mr Magoo type of existential state at work, says a lot about me doesn’t it, :) I’m trying to find a way back into the soup after my few weeks absence, thanks so much, cheers David

Gary Radice July 20, 2024 at 5:04 AM I’ve often wondered whether me being dead will be me in that same state as before I was born. I don’t remember any of that. I’ll add that with life I often feel I’m playing a game I don’t really know the rules to. I’m blindly trying to keep score with the world and what goes on around me. Maybe I need new balls.Great work. “Love all”. :). Cheers - Gary David Kavanagh July 20, 2024 at 5:51 AM You totally get my Monokus Gary, I wasn’t sure if anyone might share a similar outlook on life as I do, living really is the only possible reality imaginable, because we have to be alive to imagine, and what an impossible reality it throws up at us, everyday rules are one thing, but the overwhelming ones governing existence seem haphazard and at the mercy of luck, good, bad, and indifferent, thanks so much for looking in, cheers David