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:blinded as the chalk dust blew:

oblivion is nothing new ~ i’ve been there once and will go back too i awoke crying as sensations grew ~ til death rubbed out all i knew god only knows who’s really who ~ i’m bamboozled a sign could do blackboard equations esoteric and true ~ chalk dust for us to chew can’t see past these monokus ~ that’s okay try this existential clue life blindly flails on through ~ to bumble and fumble like mr magoo By David Kavanagh

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I Am Anaya

Date: 7/21/2024 12:29:00 PM

I stumble through life overwhelmed by experiences & memories, disorientated will we know who’s who? I see the resemblance to Magoo— just luck or divine intervention that led his disastrous could’ve beens. I’m glad David, that you gave a clue anything helps. Nice to see you back!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/21/2024 1:08:00 PM

Oh I really don’t know anything for sure Anaya, my line god only knows who’s really who, can be looked at in a few ways, perhaps a god really does know, the important thing is to get through life without thinking we have all the answers, and by keeping an open mind, thanks so much for the visit, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 7/20/2024 1:30:00 PM

Welcome back David and as always some powerful lines with which to re-enter the stage. The strength of the first monoku is really stunning - perpetual cycle - whether within this life or between them, is forever fascinating to ponder. There's people throwing themselves headlong into oblivion, whilst others climb out. Whatever it all means, so far it seems it's a temporary state. I'm also fascinated with chewing on chalk dust - so entrenched to learn that the lesson itself consumed - fascinating

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 3:53:00 PM

Yeah mine too I learned so much from him lol!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/20/2024 3:05:00 PM

I only didn't comment on the Mr Magoo line because I ran out of characters. Totally my era :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 2:20:00 PM

Heya Dilly, a tentative return for now, not quite from oblivion although it has been a few long weeks since I last posted, that chalk dust line was my favourite, and you totally get it the way I meant it to be interpreted, I do like the Mr Magoo one too, ironically it brings the whole sketchy picture into focus, cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 7/20/2024 11:56:00 AM

Excellent ink, You are a master of the rhyming monoku form David - I posted a few yesterday but its not my usual style of poetry but sometimes the words flow and you have to post! :-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 2:11:00 PM

They do take a bit of patience and practice Jan, but are very handy for delivering a concise message, in this case I was only trying to express my thoughts on oblivion and existentialism into a few lines, I mean what could go wrong lol! Cheers David

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 7/20/2024 8:09:00 AM

Thoroughly. Enjoyed. Each. One. x

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 8:47:00 AM

Thank you Super Mo, if you thoroughly enjoyed then I must be pretty near the mark, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 7/20/2024 5:29:00 AM

Really? Six monorhyming Monoku sets the bar a titch high. I'm afraid I'll not measure up. I particularly like your blackboard line... sometimes everything seems to be a mystery of one sort or another. Worth trying to make the puzzle pieces fit? I'm still pondering the thought.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 8:45:00 AM

Wise words Lin, I tried out many different routes mostly when I was a kid, always liked the challenge and exploring different paths.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/20/2024 8:16:00 AM

The path back doesn't have to be the same path once taken. If you question your route, take a detour as long as you end up exactly where you want to be.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 5:59:00 AM

I started out with about 3 Lin, but didn’t feel my overall picture was quite there yet, so searched a little deeper and ultimately came to the conclusion of a Mr Magoo type of existential state at work, says a lot about me doesn’t it, :) I’m trying to find a way back into the soup after my few weeks absence, thanks so much, cheers David

Gary Radice

Date: 7/20/2024 5:04:00 AM

I’ve often wondered whether me being dead will be me in that same state as before I was born. I don’t remember any of that. I’ll add that with life I often feel I’m playing a game I don’t really know the rules to. I’m blindly trying to keep score with the world and what goes on around me. Maybe I need new balls.Great work. “Love all”. :). Cheers - Gary

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/20/2024 5:51:00 AM

You totally get my Monokus Gary, I wasn’t sure if anyone might share a similar outlook on life as I do, living really is the only possible reality imaginable, because we have to be alive to imagine, and what an impossible reality it throws up at us, everyday rules are one thing, but the overwhelming ones governing existence seem haphazard and at the mercy of luck, good, bad, and indifferent, thanks so much for looking in, cheers David