Blind Love

BLIND LOVE

“Six to ten inches”
That’s what the weatherman says
Snow-blower is broke
I with a very bad back
And my kid will have a fit

Asking him to work
Do his share around the house
Seems too much for him
Here he comes with a buddy
Says they’re going out of town

Just for the weekend
I say  “Like hell you’re leaving!
Get out the shovel!”
He says  “Oh, dad    my shoulder
I think it it’s a rotor cuff

Hurt it playing ball
Look!    It’s late    we have to go.”
“To play ball?” I ask
“Yes.    I dribble left handed”
“Do you want mom to shovel?”

Then he sighs    “Well    no”
“Well then    get out the shovel!”
You’d think I shot him
He makes this terrible face
Grabs his shoulder    what a fake

But then     this sick smile
He’s looking out the window
Watching the snow fly
It’s poor old mom    bless her
Shoveling    heart full of love

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Not much of a poem - apologies.
It's kind of a Tanka form I guess
I couldn't resist. The situation will fit so many, many households.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 2:52 PM
take that ice cube test, Daver and inspire yourself to do an ice king poem!!
Dietrich Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 2:51 PM
loving this blind love poem again. You are one of the few whose every poem I believe I have seen on soup!!!
Dietrich Avatar
December 18, 2010 at 3:26 PM
Daver I do really like this one. WAs it all true? I can just see an older kid being this way. I am like that kid. I will do anything to get out of hard work! Sorry I'm posting silly poems lately like the one about the doll. Wait till you see what I am posting next. It's not good, but it was for a contest I could not relate to. LUv, Andrea
Johnson Avatar
December 18, 2010 at 1:00 PM
Merry Christmas to all and especially to good ole Mom. Love, joyce
Haick Avatar
December 15, 2010 at 12:24 PM
I'm not surprised, Dave. Mothers are so special..if only kids realized the gem in their lives, Mothers wouldn't have to do much. Anyway, his time will come when he can see the whole picture!! Sending blessings, peace and joy to you and your family for Christmas and always! I enjoyed this. Love, Audrey
Peranteau Avatar
December 14, 2010 at 4:47 PM
Mr. Dave, if you have ever read Edgar then you would know that there is no need for an apology when writing a 'Narrative' as this, and with such visual ! Your Free verse is excelent dear poet ! And; is a treasure ! And regarding my write, "Exciting my heart",the Nuance would be destroyed if I devulged mine equivocal; cunning dear Sir ! *smiles* Your wish is what is in this write, (so says I) and I impart to you ! Have a fantastic day ! I'm enjoying your past writes as well ! Much love, james
Kendrick Avatar
December 14, 2010 at 10:10 AM
Daver, I am glad that I don't live where it snows like that...Of course, my husband would have an electric, gas, or diesel powered whatever he would have to have so he could do that sitting down..I feel for all who have to deal with snow, sleet, and ice all winter..That God that it is rare here...The heat is bad and the humidity miserable but that cold, cold winter would be ruff...Sara
Culverhouse Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 5:58 PM
enjoyed reading your work....too true these days. spoiled rotten kids.
Sweetheart Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 4:37 PM
A familiar refrain and pattern these days Daver... enjoyed your expressive lines so aptly penned my friend... great visual insight ... enjoyed with luv..
Mehta Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 1:58 PM
Many many people can definiately relate to this, daver
Devonshire Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 9:25 AM
This *@!? son needs to get his priorities straight, Daver. Still your poem made my laugh because this is the way things are today. All my parents had to do was mention, "We could have a heart attack," and we kids were out there shoveling! Times have changed, eh? Love and peace, Carolyn
Richards Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 8:25 AM
Oh do I love this!!! Yep...this situation is all too familiar ..so humorous those wimpy, excuse making guys....but that last stanza heartwarming and tender......you write poems that relate to me...very enjoyable, Daver! Happy Holidays! :)
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