Blast Off Exclamation Points

We were strapped in ready for take-off,
the engines churning around us.
We'd longed for this moment,
but when it came we were scared rigid,
wondering if we'd survive.

"Countdown to take-off!" the captain roared.
Gritting our teeth we made ready.
pushed hard into our seatbacks with stomachs
turning cartwheels we were off at last!
bright lights and bogus noises

surging from under the blankets.
There was a wobble and a whistle,
the signals to burst out at warp speed.
Our bodies felt the rush, the rumble 
and finally the jolt of the touch down.

"Look out the peephole!  We're on the moon!"
the captain cried. And sure enough, we weren't
in Kansas anymore.  The moonscape was
strangely full of familiar looking objects,
Grandma's afghan flowing like a river,

what looked like the pillows 
from Jimmy's bed, crumpled like space debris,
and my school project, a volcano
puffing out baking powder.
Yep, this was the moon alright.

"Imaginations still intact!" Jimmy yelled,
"but how are we gonna get home?"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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January 25, 2016 at 11:34 PM
such a fun read Keith, Enjoyed every line. LOVE LINDA
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January 25, 2016 at 11:43 PM
Bless you Linda! I am most grateful for your kind remarks. Best wishes, Keith
White Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 10:26 PM
I love this. What metaphors. Images and action the reader is there!!!!well done Keith
Bickerstaffe Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 10:59 PM
Thanks Kelli! I am most grateful for your delightful comments... Keith
A  Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 7:18 PM
Keith, Excellent poem, Awesome flow. Luv ** SKAT **
Bickerstaffe Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 7:23 PM
Thanks **SKAT** much appreciated!!! Best wishes, Keith
Bauer Avatar
January 25, 2016 at 6:45 PM
this is charming and delightful, keith!
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January 25, 2016 at 7:03 PM
Thanks Ilene! just a whimsical piece of fluff fueled by the imagination of two boys playin' with their dad! Best wishes, Keith
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