Bland

invisible bars
around your lacklustre heart
the colour of you

© Harry J Horsman  2018

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Gail Debole

Date: 1/16/2019 4:14:00 PM

You are definitely a skilled wordsmith when you convey so much with the use of a few words.

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 1/1/2019 10:06:00 PM

be in self, open the heart bar on humane behavior../// excellent senryu

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/27/2018 5:10:00 AM

Sad state of this person's emotions is penned in this one. Thanks for dropping by. Sara

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/9/2018 7:37:00 PM

Oh, a lacklustre heart behind invisible bars is so sad, Harry. A poignant senryu of an uninspired heart beyond emotional reach. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 12/9/2018 5:58:00 AM

deep, i can read much into this harry xx

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 12/9/2018 1:08:00 AM

Excellent description. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/7/2018 5:49:00 PM

Great description in so few lines, Harry, about this sad person! Thanks for your kind words on my latest poem.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/7/2018 5:28:00 PM

Some guard their heart so fearfully they will never know true happiness. Excellent senryu Harry!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 12/7/2018 5:32:00 AM

How sad is the individual that never learns...well penned.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/7/2018 1:00:00 AM

Wow, not only did I love this, one could read this a few different ways!

Constance La France

Date: 12/6/2018 7:15:00 PM

harry, you have penned a wonderful senryu, yes some people do show their colors ~

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/6/2018 3:52:00 PM

ohh, powerful and sad, harry... greeat work!..huggs

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/6/2018 1:54:00 PM

People who put bars around their hearts will never know know the warm colors of love, Harry. You have described this so poignantly in just three lines. A lovely haiku, my friend. Hugs, Carolyn