Richard Lamoureux Poet Quintain (English)

Blade So Blue

Friend, you may view me as piteous
for my form is quite hideous
Bloodstained hands I cannot clean
even though I'm fastidious
I accidently killed the queen

This deed beyond my conception
I promised my queen protection
My sword I swung it in the dark
towards a ghostly reflection
It struck my Queen leaving its mark

There she lay upon the threshold
Although young I then felt so old
Dismal in spirit for I loved her true
I beg you to be swift and bold
Take my life with a blade of blue

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Vladislav Raven November 16, 2018 at 9:37 AM Hi Richard, this is a beautiful, classical write. I love the way your words so easily draw me into the piece. An amazing write Richard, deep and classical. A Fave. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.

Andrea Dietrich October 29, 2017 at 6:47 PM It's very nice seeing you work in a form like quintain, Richard. I enjoyed this very much. It seems Shakesperian to me. I am not too "into" his plays but I feel like this might be based on one of them!

Andrea Dietrich October 29, 2017 at 6:46 PM Yes, Richard, it is strange to come upon remarks of those who have passed on. That girl named Cheryl or Cheri who died a year or two ago, Linda Sweetheart, Daver. I have known others who passed on from other websites where I read their poems. It's surreal to see their old comments and realize they have gone on to the great beyond. Let me read your poem now.

Susan Ashley October 28, 2017 at 10:13 PM A great write Richard with a regretful end. I love you title and your reference to blade of blue.., your last line is awesome! Enjoyed!! Richard Lamoureux October 29, 2017 at 8:47 AM Thanks Susan.

Eileen Manassian October 23, 2017 at 4:18 PM Richard...please get your muse back! I've so busy this semester with 5 courses to teach. I've just gotten back from my trip to Dubai and I'm trying to catch up. I read this poem again and it is so good. Please, pinch your muse and get her going. Would working on a collab help? Richard Lamoureux October 24, 2017 at 5:58 PM Thanks Eileen, my last drought was 7 years but then I wrote the largest volume of work of my life.

Ralph Sergi October 23, 2017 at 3:09 PM Forgive me, Richard, I meant bold knight (lol) Richard Lamoureux October 24, 2017 at 5:57 PM Old Knight might be more accurate *lol*

Ralph Sergi October 23, 2017 at 3:06 PM A ribald and classic poem. told with the valor of a knight. My compliments, Richard.

Joanna Daniel October 23, 2017 at 6:51 AM Great deep poetry, Richard, I'm sure I would never have got the layered meaning if I had not read your explanation, awesome:)

Darlene De Beaulieu October 22, 2017 at 6:08 PM It is very gallant.I lkie this poem. Have a nice evening my friend. Darlene De Beaulieu October 26, 2017 at 1:21 PM I like this poem. Darlene De Beaulieu October 22, 2017 at 6:09 PM I lkie this poem.

Red Fiery October 22, 2017 at 1:42 PM You write so exceptionally well . Whether it's a free verse or just anything, you excel ! I will stop by again to read more from you . I have missed reading your poems ..hugs ~red~

James Inman October 21, 2017 at 10:04 AM I must admit your references alluded my simple mind until I read your comment. After, it became quite clear and I found your poem, though a bit sad, quite delightful.

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 12, 2017 at 9:23 PM Excellent rendering of a grisly event, Richard. Your poetic breadth is resplendently shown. Another mighty fine piece of prose. Heart glow poetry. Love and joy always.

Afolabi Muideen October 10, 2017 at 1:00 AM The poem is beautiful composed. The q words, the lines, the rhyme and it flow, are a true depiction of beauty. Brilliant! Richard Lamoureux October 12, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thanks Afolabi.

Eileen Manassian October 8, 2017 at 1:27 PM Enjoy the wedding! Make wonderful memories. I'm so happy for you. Congrats, dear. May it be a blessed union for your son. Hugs....PS, Love to your Mom!

Eileen Manassian October 8, 2017 at 2:41 AM Great write, Richard. I think with William and Kate set to take on the Monarchy next, the people will still be enthralled by royalty. However, this is a great piece to show others who are dissatisfied with royalty. What a splendid write. Richard Lamoureux October 8, 2017 at 8:33 AM I do think they will revitalize the Monachy. Those who are living in poverty probably are not huge fans of the Royals.

Becca Teagan October 6, 2017 at 10:56 PM wow this is deep, I like the metaphor of blue blood. amazing, Rick, hope you and your family are well Richard Lamoureux October 8, 2017 at 8:31 AM Hi Becca, my family is all here in Kelowna for our son's wedding. We are enjoying the time together and the wedding itself is happening today. Thanks for asking.;0)

Ralph Sergi October 5, 2017 at 5:40 PM A great metaphoric depiction on the so called blue bloods. As time goes on society dictates change A lot of my Canadian friends say they are British Subjects and (which they are) but too me most Canadians are live and let live. To me they are just Canadians. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 5:45 PM The monachy is weaved into our fabric and govt. I'm not so sure though if we are loyal subjects. For the most part we give it little thought.

Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 12:30 PM Silent One asked about my metaphor. Here is my explanation. His guilt overwhelmed him and he wished to join her in death. Blue blade referring to blue blood and the death of the monarchy. It symbolizes a way of life in Britain which is being slowly cut away. The Reflection is the dissatisfaction with self and self loathing which results in the attack.

Darren White October 5, 2017 at 10:16 AM Great quintain Richard. I fave this too. It's fantastic. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 12:28 PM Thanks Darren.

Tim Smith October 5, 2017 at 8:37 AM Once love is lost we feel we can't go on... terrific Richard Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 8:43 AM You got it!

Silent One October 5, 2017 at 6:59 AM Hmm.. I am trying to work out the metaphor.. I have an idea, but dont know whether to say it.. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 8:43 AM Do tell.

Anne-Lise Andresen October 5, 2017 at 3:36 AM - Really great written Richard ... impressive and proficient ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 8:45 AM Thanks Anne-Lise, hugs back.

Arthur Vaso October 4, 2017 at 7:16 PM What a take,loved this poem, and yes a Fav! Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2017 at 8:46 AM Thanks Arthur. ;0)