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Blackbirds and Bluebirds

Inconsiderate Hearts will lack in elation Throwing the first stone Pain revisited The quiet desperation Soothes my aching bones

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Date: 2/24/2009 8:14:00 PM

Interesting use of this concise form for a creative view. Much to think about here. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

Brian Strand

Date: 2/17/2009 11:52:00 PM

Like the sequence presentation Yoni.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments on my blog

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/13/2009 7:56:00 PM

I agree that "inconsiderate hearts lack in elation." Tormented souls do not know how to be happy. Great Haiku! Carolyn

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 2/12/2009 8:46:00 AM

Brilliant my friend! Excellent long 'a' assonance, marvelous rhyming and stunning imagery... perfect HAIKUS in form and expression. Best wishes, Keith

Sara Lokken

Date: 2/11/2009 5:19:00 PM

I agree with all the lower comments. Simply pure, raw emotion and lovely images you have weaved here....Sara:)

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/11/2009 6:13:00 AM

Each verse is in perfect 5,7,5 form while offering a smooth flow and great clarity through your good use of imagery. Very well written. Michael