Blackbird

My father was a musician, with a beautiful tenor voice. As we seven siblings witnessed his coffin being lowered into that cold earth, a blackbird sang his heart out on the church steeple.

his pure spirit rose
    on the softest summer breeze
          blackbird into thee
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Rodrigues Avatar
August 14, 2020 at 1:16 PM
Congratulations, Jean!
Murray Avatar
August 14, 2020 at 2:17 PM
Thank you Kim.
Mishra Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 6:02 PM
This is so tender, deeply moving and beautiful at the same time Jean. The blackbird reference is such a subtle portrayal of the gloom and emotions. Congratulations on your win! :)
Murray Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 11:50 PM
Thank you Aditi. We seven siblings started competing with the blackbird by singing one of his favourites as his coffin was lowered into the earth....When The Saints Go Marching In.
Allison Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 10:26 AM
dropping back with my congrats Jean:-) hugs Jan xx
Murray Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 10:27 AM
Hi Jan. Thank you. Always so nice to see you.
Callus Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 9:22 AM
Such a beautiful 'blackbird' rendition, Jean! I'm touched...Congratulations on your podium finish! Regards // paul
Murray Avatar
August 13, 2020 at 10:14 AM
Thank you so much Paul. I have lost all self confidance in my muse this past while. This placement is a real boost.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
August 19, 2019 at 2:39 AM
That is so lovingly beautiful, wished I saw that too, very touching indeed and a wonderful tribute ~ Aloha William
Murray Avatar
August 19, 2019 at 3:23 AM
Aloha William. He is dead 23 years now and I still sometimes cry when I remember him. We shared a wicked wit.
Ashley Avatar
August 2, 2019 at 2:24 PM
Jean, I am in awe of the reverent love and beauty of your tender haibun. Each haiku is filled with emotional grace. Exquisite and moving poetry and a fav! Congratulations on your excellent win.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Ashley Avatar
August 2, 2019 at 3:31 PM
Indeed, you should write more often, your poetry is inspiring and you are a gifted poetess, my friend :)
Murray Avatar
August 2, 2019 at 2:45 PM
Such praise makes me feel guilty I do not write more often Susan. It's a shame not to use the gifts we have been given. As always, you spurn me on to greater things. Thank you.
Messina Avatar
August 2, 2019 at 6:08 AM
Beautiful Jean. I am also one of seven siblings. Nice tribute to your dad. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Hugs Charlie
Murray Avatar
August 2, 2019 at 11:47 AM
Thank you Charlie. I hug you back!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 1, 2019 at 3:39 PM
A beauty, Jean! God is good like that in such a poignant moment. Congratulations! Hugs :)
Murray Avatar
August 1, 2019 at 4:48 PM
Wow Kim, so rare for me to get such a high placement. Thank you for your comment. I would not know otherwise.
Gentry Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 10:01 AM
Congratulations on your win. Such s beautifully written, even though sad, story. Well done!
Murray Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 10:12 AM
I miss him still Susan, and his knowing me like no one else ever will.
Talbot Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 10:36 AM
Dear Jean, If this is true then please do accept my belated condolences. Either way, a sad haibun, beautifully written. Had it not been for no kigo in the haiku, and it not being able to stand alone, you would have been joining the top winners, as is my congratulations Jean, for your 2nd place, plus my thanks for participating, MicK
Murray Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 11:59 AM
My Daddy died when my baby was six weeks old Mick. She is twenty two now. Thank you for your kind words and placement.
Talbot Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 10:24 AM
Truth, then please accept my condolences, either way, a haibun recording a sad event beautifully. Unfortunately, no kigo in the haiku, and the fact it could not stand alone lost it a few points. However, Jean a podium finish, for which I offer you my sincere congratulations. Mick
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October 23, 2017 at 1:09 PM
This is a great poem for Halloween. I enjoyed your poem. Jean have a nice day m friend.
Murray Avatar
October 23, 2017 at 2:04 PM
Thank you Darlene.
Inman Avatar
October 21, 2017 at 10:22 AM
Sad but beautifully written Jean. A very touching poem.
Murray Avatar
October 22, 2017 at 2:41 AM
Thank you James.
Adams Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 7:20 AM
Beautiful, Jean. Loved this.
Murray Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 8:38 AM
Thank you again for taking the time to comment Cona.
White Avatar
September 27, 2017 at 5:17 AM
Oh Jean, this tug at my heart strings. It's simply beautiful.
Murray Avatar
September 27, 2017 at 2:49 PM
Hi Darren. I'm really proud of this one thanks to the help and encouragement I received. I'm glad you like it. Thank you for your visit. Hugs.
Flats Avatar
September 25, 2017 at 8:43 AM
Oh my... three WOWSAS! (Me being speechless and stumbling for expressions of high praise). As a closet haibun fan, I rate this VERY high. Please... sing on! hugtweeties ~ j
Murray Avatar
September 25, 2017 at 12:43 PM
John, your wonderful praise reassures me that I am on the right track. Thank you.
Dietrich Avatar
September 24, 2017 at 8:22 PM
Jean, I am glad I saw this one today. I had a similar experience at my brother's grave site , but it was a small family of deer there. The way you expressed your feelings through the song of the blackbird is amazing.
Murray Avatar
September 25, 2017 at 1:55 AM
Morning Andrea. That's a lovely story. Intuition is amazing.
Roper Avatar
September 23, 2017 at 11:33 PM
A great tribute to your dad it is so nicely done, Jean. I see you took Jack Webster's advice and wrote a poem of your dad's funeral.. perfect for your bio... Hugs Eve
Murray Avatar
September 24, 2017 at 1:23 AM
So nice of him to make the suggestion. And so nice to have your support of my efforts Eve.
Webster Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 2:35 PM
So lovely, Jean! Thank you so much for sharing this touching memory.
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 2:51 PM
The pleasure was all mine Jack.
Andresen Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 1:00 PM
- A beautiful poem ... lovely memories of your life, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 2:04 PM
You Are My Sunshine was another favourite of his Anna-Lise. I think that is one of the reasons I always smile when I see your lovely visits to me. Thank you as always.
Gupta Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 12:36 PM
Touching and beautiful ...
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 2:02 PM
Thank you Probir. I still miss laughing at life with him.
Pandit Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 11:57 AM
A lovely tribute to Dad!
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 2:02 PM
Thank you Vijay. We had a special bond as we were each equally weird.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 11:20 AM
Wonderful :) xomo
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 11:30 AM
Thank you Maureen.
Allison Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 9:44 AM
aww jean now need to thank me!! it is absolutely beautiful and so touching and I am adding it to my faves:-) hugs jan xx
Allison Avatar
September 27, 2017 at 2:52 PM
Jean we now both have poetic wings and will always fly high together - I will always try and support and help but I'm not one to critique as it can knock your confidence and the critiques aren't always right as its just one person's opinion:-( hugs jan xx
Murray Avatar
September 21, 2017 at 10:18 AM
It is a pleasure to repeat again how grateful I am for your support of my poetry right from day one Jan. I'm still a little chick in the nest, so don't make me fly alone just yet.
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