Anne-Lise Andresen Poet Narrative

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- Black Walls In the Tunnel -

                         Thoughts and words cannot be reconciled
                                       In the tunnel I'm locked
                                         Echo of mortal words
                                   and the footprints of the killer
                                     Spiders and hordes of bats
                           Although I am inviolable, death is stronger
                         I can not fight against the power of darkness
                                       in this criminal underworld
                                  Raw and intense - brutal realities

                                       Trapped in my own body
                   Closes my eyes and disappears into my own existence
                                        I realize the pitiful truth
                             The sledgehammer hits harder and harder
                                      An ice cold, psychopathic killer
                             The head and the heart will so gladly accept
                                      this indescribably ruthless pain
                                    The past and the future are killed
                                    I hope the shadows never find me 

                                        ____/____ let my soul rest
                                      until we meet again








                                                 28/01/2021
                                        Sun :) - A-L Andresen :)
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                                  Murder in the Tunnel Poetry Contest
                                  Sponsored by: Kai Michael Neumann 
                                           3rd place in the contest

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Mahtab Bangalee March 22, 2021 at 2:13 AM SUPERB AND SUPERB BEAUTIFUL LOVING POEM

Eve Roper February 13, 2021 at 6:12 PM Oh, a very deep and scary write, my friend. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Jo Chamberlain February 12, 2021 at 10:19 AM Congratulations on your winning placement. It had me on the edge of my seat, right up until the last line.

Mystic Rose Rose February 12, 2021 at 9:50 AM Your poem is intensely good Sunshine, who knew you had a dark side lol, congrats on your winning poem, xo

David Kavanagh February 12, 2021 at 8:29 AM Back with congratulations Anne Lise, I always felt this one would win the contest, and almost did, really is a great poem, stark and bleak pure poetry, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler February 12, 2021 at 7:02 AM My goodness Anne-Lise! Love how you closed it out. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Alexis Y. February 12, 2021 at 6:36 AM Hi Anne-Lise, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win. It was well deserved. Have a great day- Alexis

Rama Balasubramanian February 12, 2021 at 5:51 AM Wow, what a write on psychopathic killer and victim. Congratulations on your premier contest win. Take care Rama. The photo is scary

Unseeking Seeker February 12, 2021 at 4:23 AM Wow! That’s an amazing write! Congrats on your win!

Kai Michael Neumann February 12, 2021 at 3:37 AM Great poem. Congratulations. Kind wishes, Kai

Jennifer Proxenos February 2, 2021 at 11:57 AM Dark, scary and an excellent poem dear Anne-Lise - wow killing both past and future, what rife imagination, well done sis and good luck. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Angela Crabtree January 30, 2021 at 5:36 PM Great story and pic, Anne-Lise. Good luck in the contest! Anne-Lise Andresen January 31, 2021 at 9:58 AM - Many thanks Angela, for visiting and lovely comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Kim Rodrigues January 30, 2021 at 3:55 PM Interesting and great pic! Anne-Lise Andresen January 31, 2021 at 9:56 AM - Kim, many thanks for visiting and lovely comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

David Kavanagh January 30, 2021 at 3:28 PM The past and the future are both killed, genius analogy of looking towards the openings from within the tunnel, as you lay dying, great vision here Anne-Lise, your a dark horse at heart, brilliant, cheers David Anne-Lise Andresen January 31, 2021 at 9:52 AM - Many thanks David, for visiting and lovely comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anitha Jayasankar January 29, 2021 at 2:46 AM Oh so sad and deep, poignant in narrative. Nice take in the contest. Many times, the soul is not strong enough to fight alone the harsh realities of darkness that surround the world.. Best wishes Anne. Hugs ~ Ani Anne-Lise Andresen January 31, 2021 at 9:51 AM - Ani, many thanks for visiting and lovely comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Harry Horsman January 28, 2021 at 9:59 PM Macabre and gruel some, Yet makes for excellent poetry. Good luck in contest. Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:46 AM - Harry, thank you very much for your comments and wishes :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

JC Brul January 28, 2021 at 12:15 PM This is a superb composition Anne-Lise...I am inspired to do my version.. More power. Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:44 AM - Kai, always has challenging contests ... get started with your version, JCB :) - Many thanks for your comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Demetrios Trifiatis January 28, 2021 at 11:46 AM An astonishingly powerful and profound poem, my dearest, Anne-Lise! Captivating imagery! Good luck! A fave! Hugs xxx Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:40 AM - A fave ...it means a lot to me ... :) - Many thanks for your comments, Demetrios :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Phyllis Babcock January 28, 2021 at 11:32 AM A horror poem for sure Anne lise.Well written and good luck in the contest. love phyl Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:38 AM - Phyllis, thank you very much for your comments and wishes :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Beryl Edmonds January 28, 2021 at 8:31 AM A gripping free verse thriller Anne-Lise, it certainly made my heart beat fast as the poetic story unfolded. Best wishes ~ Belle:-) Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:37 AM - The dark parts of our world, Belle :) - Many thanks for your comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Victor Buhagiar January 28, 2021 at 7:46 AM Very original story, Anne Lise. I was help captive by the going-on. Quite a horror story. ~~ Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:35 AM - A lot of evil in the world, Victor :) - Many thanks for your comments - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham January 28, 2021 at 7:41 AM Very gruesome and Poe like Anne, well written verse. Best of luck in the contest. Tom Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:34 AM - Thank you very much for your comments, Tom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y. January 28, 2021 at 7:26 AM WoW! Anne-Lise, You've penned a good take on the contest theme. It was like reading a horror book or watching a horror movie. Was it a ghost trapped in the tunnel? Nevertheless, it was a good write that held my attention from start to finish. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful day- Alexis Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:33 AM - No, not a ghost Alexis ... an evil human ... a psychopathic killer :) - Thank you very much for your comments - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Akkina Downing January 28, 2021 at 7:14 AM WOW! Horror at its best. That picture is going to stick in my head at night for sure, lol! Scary but sad all the same. Great poem,Anne-Lise... best wishes in the contest :) Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:31 AM - When the fear can be read in the face ... :) - Many thanks for your comments, Akkina :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit January 28, 2021 at 7:08 AM Deep and intriguing write, Anne-Lise. Those trapped feelings resonate in darkness. I liked the ending as well. Anne-Lise Andresen January 29, 2021 at 2:29 AM - Many thanks for your valuable comments, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)