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Written for the Abracadabra Rhyme contest sponsored by Emile Pinet. I used 12 syllables per line , checked with rhymezone and howmanysyllables.com

written inspired by whats going on in the world today. Somedays i wonder, where is the peace and love? Still praying for a better world with no discrimination hate and greed. 

Peace seems like a once-written myth, now blurred from sight, like wrathful willows floating along sullen streams. There, stars linger to trace lost love in twilight’s grace, amidst the bitter cold wind roaring through the night. But is a black rose not a rose if kissed with warmth? When petals wilt, reignite kismet flames of light. We are the poets of a crisp dawn sketched in gold. Together, we erase veiled wrongs with ink so bright. For hope can weave fragments of faith from lunar dreams; love lost in twilight’s grace, there stars linger to trace~ verses to calm sinister skies of hate and plight.

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Date: 8/21/2024 4:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your winner. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 8/15/2024 1:52:00 PM
Congratulations, Ink Empress! Your heartfelt, compassionate poem earned you a distinguished place in my contest. You should be proud of your placement. Although many good poems were submitted, your poem rose to the top ten. Well done, my friend. Emile.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 12:23:00 AM
Dear emile, i am indeed very grateful, and did not expect to win at all. I love trying these forms and you always inspire me to do different forms, thank you for that talented poet. And thank you so much for including me in your top ten. Thats truly an honor!
Date: 8/9/2024 2:26:00 AM
Hope and faith is all we have. It feels like the world just grows more insane and worse. Humans have been infected so bad, it's like a virus. Hate, greed, bad intentions. People have become so wicked, they shouldn't be considered humans because how can one's heart be so dark? "But is a black rose not a rose if kissed with warmth? When petals wilt, reignite kismet flames of light." I just try to be happy, I hope for change but I don't wait for it because I might miss out on a lot. Great, dear ink
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Date: 8/7/2024 11:18:00 AM
Really true! Oh, dear you...lol <3
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Date: 8/6/2024 1:49:00 AM
This was an amazing read... :)
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Date: 8/6/2024 7:56:00 AM
Thank you for reading
Date: 8/5/2024 3:08:00 PM
a fierce reminder for man to.put his act together before judgment comes...I enjoyed your lyrical phrasing and powerful lines: they highlighted your meaningful theme, ink...you go girl!
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Date: 8/6/2024 7:52:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a thoughtful comment dear nette: grateful always for your support
Date: 8/5/2024 8:49:00 AM
Since Adam ate that darned apple, there has been no peace on earth. And things seem to be escalating. I always admire your wonderful alliterations and metaphors. A black rose is rare. Lost love? Beautiful poem.
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Date: 8/6/2024 7:49:00 AM
Ah thank you so much always for being so supportive dear victor. Grateful for your kindness truly
Date: 8/5/2024 6:40:00 AM
Dear Empress, I was very delighted to wake up and read your wonderful and insightful poem this morning. It gave me a great kick-off to the day. Here are several things I thought were just outstanding. Your artistic imagery and alliterations, such as "Wrathful Willows" and "Black Rose" create such a powerful atmosphere of despair and darkness. As I read through this several times I enjoyed your magical use of metaphors like comparing stars to tracers of lost love. It just adds so much depth and complexity and nuance to the overall message of your poem. But perhaps the message of hope shows that no matter what the evil is in the world hope is life giving in my book. I stand right beside you shoulder should for it is possible to overcome these challenges and create a brighter future. How could I not favor such a great message of hope. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 8/6/2024 7:49:00 AM
Thank you so much for your detailed comment as always dear daniel. So very kind of you to leave such a thoughtful response. I appreciated always your poetic support
Date: 8/5/2024 4:54:00 AM
Peace is fast becoming a myth. Man suffers from wars and rebellions. To top it, nature has declared war on man in the form of natural calamities. Recently, Kerala, the state where I live, witnessed a landslide of unprecedented proportions and hundreds of people died and nearly 400 houses were swept away in flood waters, even unable to trace where they were situated. We are still under its shock."like wrathful willows floating along sullen streams." This line brought memories of the people and the trees that floated in the torrent of violent currents. We can only pray for peace and safety. All the best in the contest dear sweet friend.
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Date: 8/6/2024 10:12:00 PM
Thanks a lot dear Empress and dear Tom for the empathy shown. It happened not in the past, but last week. The people forgetting all differences work together with concerted efforts to dig out dead bodies, rehabilitate people and set up homes. Crores of rupees are offered by individuals and organizations. Help is being offered by the US,
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:19:00 AM
Wow dear valsa, im so sorry to hear about this. Iv been to kerala and its a beautiful place, and i know its a big place. I miss kerala food. And im so sorry to hear about this disaster. Soul wrenching to know so many families were affected and i cant even imagine what they must have gone through. I did not know about this. Was it this year? Im sending you light today and always. Im so sorry to hear about this. We can only pray for safety and peace and i wish humanbeings would also be kind. As life is precious sigh thank you for leaving your comment i always appreciate your sincere presence
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Date: 8/5/2024 5:58:00 AM
So sorry to hear it Valsa
Date: 8/4/2024 11:28:00 PM
impressive poem, full of sensitivity, enjoyed the new style yann
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:14:00 AM
Thank you so much dear yann always grateful for your support
Date: 8/4/2024 10:47:00 PM
I'm impressed in a few ways, the theme that peace is now more of a myth touched me deeply, as did love, hope, faith used to pull it all together. The reverse line flows either way. Elegant and cleverly done! Love the message xo
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:13:00 AM
Awwn thank you sweet anaya always an honour to hear from you .. appreciate your sincere comments always
Date: 8/4/2024 8:33:00 PM
I pray the world will give peace a chance. 'But is a black rose not a rose if kissed with warmth? When petals wilt, reignite kismet flames of light.' This is lovely poetry, Ink. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:12:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear evelyn appreciate your kindness always
Date: 8/4/2024 8:09:00 PM
Nicely written. Wish peace we could find. Now it's worse.
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:12:00 AM
Wish too dear eve, so true. Thank you for dropping by. Always happy to see you
Date: 8/4/2024 4:59:00 PM
Words that truthfully describe what is going on today. Every day seems worse than the day before. I like how your poem encompasses so much disturbance. Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:07:00 AM
I agree dear hilda its so heart wrenching and disheartening to read the news too and to hear whats going on. Thank you so much for your well wishes always gratefuln
Date: 8/4/2024 2:15:00 PM
Very nice as often!
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Date: 8/5/2024 7:05:00 AM
Thank you AA appreciate always your visits
Date: 8/4/2024 1:21:00 PM
I don't know about the whole as a whole but you do calm my fears with your write Ink, if only everyone wrote with their hearts like this, the world might melt into a puddle, and cease all hate and crime, thank you for your gentle touch. Black Rose Red Rose, a rose is a rose no matter what shade it comes in, :)
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Date: 8/5/2024 2:04:00 AM
Awwn divine rose! Thank you for this beautiful response: a rose is a rose still fragrant despite the color yes: im so grateful for your poetic presence
Date: 8/4/2024 1:00:00 PM
Forget what I said about roaring. I miscounted and you do have all your syllables the correct number.
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Date: 8/4/2024 12:52:00 PM
I think you conquered this form while putting into it your own spin of uniqueness and color. Not having the rhyme scheme in front of me, I can't tell you for sure it's right, but it really seems like you got it, Ink. I was thinking roar was a one syllable word, but if it's two and roaring makes 3, you have got the syllables down pat too. Awesome work, my friend.
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Date: 8/5/2024 2:03:00 AM
Thank you soul aunt its not as good as yours i still think yours is the best! Appreciate your honest feedback . Helps me improve always
Date: 8/4/2024 12:44:00 PM
You did this form really well and you packed a lot of imagery and metaphors in it.. IT flows nicely and the rhymes, including the refrain are spot on.. I have a feeling that Emile will really like this one... I really liked the imagery in these two lines 'There, stars linger to trace lost love in twilight’s grace, amidst the bitter cold wind roaring through the night. ' Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/5/2024 2:02:00 AM
Getting this feedback from you truly is an honor! Thank you silent one. I try these forms to learn as i enjoy trying new forms: not sure if it is good enough for the contest im sure there are much better takes: appreciate you always
Date: 8/4/2024 12:13:00 PM
Ooh I love the message here, esp lines 7 thru the end. "We are poets of a crisp dawn sketched in gold." Let's herald the message far and wide. Let haters be put on notice, a new day is dawning
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Date: 8/5/2024 1:49:00 AM
Thank you tomsz, i see people of minorities, still getting targeted and attacked: so much hate in this world, its just sad. Sigh! Always happy to hear from you
Date: 8/4/2024 7:05:00 AM
Wow that opening line!!! Peace seems like a once-written myth, mmmm soo true!! now blurred from sight, oooo .. stars linger to trace lost love in twilight’s grace, amen!!! My lost love is lost lost aee cannot trace no more … XD.. black rose not a rose if kissed with warmth? oooo this one provoking the thought… is it a rose??? Hmmmmmmmm love lost in twilight’s grace, there stars linger to trace.. verses to calm sinister skies of hate that fight. This piece is stunning aeee the way this flows..
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Date: 8/4/2024 7:50:00 AM
Thank you papi. Not sure but it took me two hours to write this haha
Date: 8/4/2024 6:47:00 AM
Wow. Just wow … I wish I could write like you.
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Date: 8/4/2024 12:14:00 PM
Me too
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/4/2024 7:49:00 AM
You can and you have and thank you so much dahlin

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