Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Black and White 3- Emotive Write

First pub
Then club

Drinks wine
Feels fine

Cheap drinks
She thinks

Short skirts
She flirts

All night
Drinks spiked

Goes back
His flat

Her fate
Date rape

Off guard
Hit hard

Black eyes
Bruised thighs

Looks frail
Skin pale

White face
Sad case

She’s found
On ground

Night plight!

50 words 50 syllables checked with how many syllables
Contest United colours Black and White. Sponsor Silent one
Image 3 –wherever your muse takes you
03~06~16

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Poet Destroyer A March 15, 2016 at 11:18 AM Jan, so creative... Congratulations on your awesome Black and White united theme win. Love LINDA Jan Allison March 17, 2016 at 3:32 PM Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin March 11, 2016 at 9:47 AM I am so impressed that you pulled off 2 syllable lines and a complete telling, a thorough story with emotional impact. Now, that's a writer. So well done - congrats on your well-deserved placement ... CayCay Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:19 PM Thanks CayCay I was worried i had thought too out of the box for the theme so was delighted to place so well:-0 hugs Jan xx

Sathya Babu March 11, 2016 at 8:34 AM Loved reading this.......very nice write. Many congratulations on your WIN....... Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:19 PM Thanks so much Sathya:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel March 11, 2016 at 6:15 AM A great emotive write. Truly it's a sad case. But I congratulate you for your different idea:):) you deserve the win:) Joanna Daniel March 12, 2016 at 5:49 AM In art, nothing is too much out of the box:) hugs to you too. Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:20 PM Thanks Jo I wasn't sure if I had thought too much out of the box for the theme and was delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 11, 2016 at 2:33 AM Brilliant take Jan.. congrats on top podium with lovely rhyming words. Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:20 PM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks March 10, 2016 at 9:13 PM These were excellent, Jan! I never would have thought of using footles, but it worked to your advantage. You really pushed the boundaries of the picture ... and I think that's the goal when basing poems off of photos. Reaching out to something different. Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:18 PM Thanks Timothy - I love writing a string of footles to tell a story - so sad this is a reality for some victims of this terrible crime:-( hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser March 10, 2016 at 7:13 PM Congrats on your top win, Jan :) Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:16 PM Thanks so much Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France March 10, 2016 at 6:37 PM Jan, this is awesome and congratulations on your first place win, amazing ~ Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:16 PM Thanks so much Broken Wings I was delighted to place so highly:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper March 10, 2016 at 5:05 PM Back to congratulate you on your 1st place win way to go girl :) Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 5:16 PM Thanks Eve I'm absolutely delighted to place so well as I wasn't sure if my theme was too out of the box so I'm really pleased to get a top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven March 10, 2016 at 4:42 PM Hi Jan, Congratulations on your first place win in the contest, richly deserved for this right. The write makes me angry, very angry that anyone would treat a woman so. You have made the write real. A seven from me Jan. Hugs....MIKE. XX Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:47 PM Sadly it is all too real for some people Mike and the figures they quote in the press are probably a lot higher as many women never report these cases of abuse - I am delighted to place so well and hopefully get the message across to more people:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey March 10, 2016 at 3:37 PM Congratulations Jan, well deserved Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:58 PM Many thanks Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy March 10, 2016 at 1:35 PM Congratulations on your well-deserved win with this very relevant poem! Janice Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:58 PM Many thanks Janice it is an emotive write and I am dleighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong March 10, 2016 at 1:05 PM Wow Jan, this is awesome. I bet you are excellent at footles, though they are humorous and there is nothing humorous in the abuse in this excellent poem. Congratulations on your deserved first placement! #7 Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:00 PM Many thanks Connie - I have been called the Queen of Footles I do enjoy writing this form and the requirements of the contest with the rhyme and syllable count seemed very suitable I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Jameson March 10, 2016 at 12:56 PM Congratulations, Jan. The words and rhythm really deliver the message with some power..nicely done! Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:01 PM Many thanks Sam:-) hugs Jan xx

Anindya Mohan Tagore March 10, 2016 at 11:44 AM Night plight... very profound... Kudos. Very well deserved top spot. Hugs, Bobby Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:01 PM Many thanks Bobby:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane March 10, 2016 at 11:30 AM Well done, Jan, and congrats. Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:01 PM thanks so much Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Sarita Milliner March 10, 2016 at 10:45 AM Congratulations on a great win!!! Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:02 PM Many thanks Sarita:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta March 10, 2016 at 10:16 AM Congrats JAN to wn on top Love. Anusha D Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:03 PM Many thanks Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior March 10, 2016 at 9:52 AM Congrats Jan...well deserved...^WW^ Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 4:04 PM Many thanks ^WW^:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith March 10, 2016 at 9:18 AM Jan, well deserved, congratulations Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:57 PM thanks so much Charlie I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars March 10, 2016 at 9:15 AM Jan congrats on your top placement in the black and white contest. Very good poem with this awesome form -luloo*smiles* Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:57 PM thanks so much Lolooo I am delighted to have placed so well i thought my take on the theme may have been a little too much out of the box:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight March 10, 2016 at 8:49 AM Back to congratulate you on your First Place win, Jan! Well done. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:56 PM Aww thanks so much Sandra I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Carlene Simpson March 10, 2016 at 8:39 AM Love this one JAN, its going in my fav. poems. Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:56 PM Aww thanks so much Carlene I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus March 8, 2016 at 2:19 PM This is very good, Jan; where it not for the end line I would have thought it was made up of footles. I can't keep up with some contests...they get filled quick and get judged quick! Hugs // paul Jan Allison March 10, 2016 at 3:54 PM Thanks Paul - I love writing footles and thought the requirement of the contest of needing rhyming and 2 words per line suited the footle form . i am surprised and delighted to place so well i thought my interpretation of the theme may have been a little too 'out of the box' :-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus March 10, 2016 at 11:58 AM Congratulations on placing first, Jan!! Well done! hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2016 at 3:25 PM you did a really good job of thinking outside the box. She is the worst kind of black and white!! Jan Allison March 7, 2016 at 5:18 PM Thanks Andrea - i have to go where my muse takes me:-( hugs Jan xx

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