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Bittersweet Nineseventeen Pm

I was in the hospital delivery suite On November 20th 1993 A day I’ll never forget At nine seventeen PM You took your first breath As I pushed you into the world My son, my precious son I cried tears of joy You were in a room at Hospice November 20th 1993 A day I’ll never forget At nine seventeen PM You took your final breath And departed this world Sadly you never got to meet your only grandson I cried tears of sadness Fictional poem, but sadly my father in law died before my son was born ... his first and only grandchild nineseventeenPM Contest Sponsored by John Lawless 6/20/18

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Paris-Maree Boreham

Date: 7/13/2018 11:49:00 AM

Emotions shine through these words and touched me, Thank you for sharing

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2018 12:28:00 PM

Thanks Paris-Maree:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/20/2018 6:52:00 PM

Heartbreaking and well done poem Jan.. luck in the contest..Hugs Eve ~ ‘ *

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 7:09:00 PM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2018 6:21:00 PM

You really came up with a very creative take on this contest theme, Jan. I sure hope I can do the same. A very sad one!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 7:08:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/20/2018 4:12:00 PM

Very touching Jan, like this, as you say, would have happened.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:38:00 PM

I wish my father in law had lived to meet my son, he would have been their one and only grandchild:-( hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/20/2018 3:49:00 PM

Your poem gave me tears too, Jan. Timing can be so off sometimes. A powerful, emotion write, dear. Hugs, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Carolyn:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/20/2018 3:02:00 PM

well done, jan! my dad died in my 3rd month of pregnancy - my son is named after him...

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:37:00 PM

aww Ilene that must have been very difficult for you:-( hugs jan xx

Anna Hopper

Date: 6/20/2018 2:49:00 PM

Beautiful write. I must admit, I am relieved to find it was fiction. Sort of, anyway.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:36:00 PM

Thanks Anna:-) hugs jan xx

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 6/20/2018 12:48:00 PM

Heartbreaking write. Some never get to meet a parent or a grand parent and that is so sad. Have a nice week. love phyl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:36:00 PM

I never met my father's parents or my maternal grandmother as she died when mum was about 8, he married again and when she died he married again so i had a step step grandma, I was always so envious of my friends who had grandparents:-( hugs jan xx

Lyric Man

Date: 6/20/2018 12:31:00 PM

Jan, I posted our collaboration! My soup mail isn't working for some reason so let me know any final edits you want to make. It's called, "My Island Girl"

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:34:00 PM

I've mailed you my friend, so glad to see LYRIC MAN is back and this time for good!:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/20/2018 11:55:00 AM

I know the feeling well, Jan. my children did not get to know my dad. They would have dearly loved that chance, I'm sure. Good luck:)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:33:00 PM

I never had grandparents just a step step grandma, at least my son had my parents and my hubbies mum (not that we saw her that often) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/20/2018 10:55:00 AM

Hi Jan, What a sad and emotive piece. It was so "bittersweet ". This happens often, as one enters the world another is leaving the world. I wish you the best of luck in the contest - Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:32:00 PM

Exactly Alexis, you have interpreted it so beautifully:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/20/2018 10:17:00 AM

Lovely verse Jan but with sadness too. A happy memory and a painful one. Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:31:00 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 6/20/2018 8:33:00 AM

Nicely written contrast in emotions, Jan. It's a goosebumps kind of story.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 4:31:00 PM

I'm not sure if it's what John is after but i had to go with my muse:-) My father in law was a lovely gentle man it is such a shame he never met my son who would have been his one and only grandchild:-( hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/20/2018 8:07:00 AM

A heartbreaking write, Jan Glad to see it was fictional but saddened to read of your father in law. A terrific entry for the contest. Well Done xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2018 8:23:00 AM

It was terribly sad mike in fact on reflection he never knew that he was to be a grandfather as I didn't find out I was expecting until the month after he died. Hugs Jan xx