Bitterness

LJH - Sep 2013 Bitterness It grows arms and legs Like Frankenstein’s monster Rears its ugly head Festering your mind Weighs heavy on the soul A slave to it per se Such a grotesque taste Need to escape Before it eats you up! Rid yourself of monsters Feed your mind with light Purge hate from your soul Unlock your own shackle Letting go can taste so sweet A BITTER pill to swallow If you eat it up quickly You’ll soon forget the taste!

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Paul Callus

Date: 12/21/2015 4:55:00 PM

Hi Laura, I revisited this early poem of yours in the absence of newer ones. Taking this opportunity to wish you and your loved ones a joyous and blessed Christmas, and all the best for the new year! ~ Regards // paul

Laura Hay
Date: 1/12/2016 7:45:00 AM

Hi Paul, happy new year to you, hope you enjoyed the festivities. Sorry i did not respond earlier, i've not been on PS for ages as work and home life has been so hectic. Hoping to get back into it later this month - the fact i've logged on this lunch break is at least a start! Warm Regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

Date: 8/9/2015 2:31:00 PM

Very wise advice, Laura! Bitterness is a silent killer...of peace and happiness. Best to sever its limbs before it gets any bigger:) ~ warm regards ~ paul

Laura Hay
Date: 8/13/2015 4:52:00 AM

For sure Paul, easier to digest small piece of bitterness than a huge monster!, rgds, Laura ;)

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/4/2015 7:08:00 PM

Interesting and witty write! Love your take on the bitter pill. PS. Did you mean "day" on line 6?

Laura Hay
Date: 6/5/2015 1:32:00 AM

Thank you Kim, It should actually read 'per se' , but actually 'day' also fits, thanks for noticing that typo! Now i'm pondering what fits best, hmmm... Kind Rgds, Laura

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/4/2015 12:13:00 PM

The metaphors and imagery are perfect. Nice flow of words and a interesting sounding poem with all the right stuff. Emile.

Laura Hay
Date: 6/5/2015 1:33:00 AM

Many thanks for your encouraging comments Emile, Kind Rgds, Laura