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[A double Acrostic Poetry Contest sponsored by Joseph May] Placed 1st.

Bitter Memory


Blinded by the first morning beam
Intense infatuation of adolescent love
Triggered emotions. His beguiling charm
Tightened its hold. But a flaw in the scenario
Entangled the script, and the seducer, less his veneer
Retreated into oblivion, leaving a broken heart in disarray.


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Agustin Avatar
November 5, 2024 at 7:04 PM
Thanks for sharing your talent while exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
Callus Avatar
November 9, 2024 at 5:49 AM
Thank you for the lovely and encouraging comments, Beata. Your bible quote is also appreciated. Have a lovely & blessed weekend // paul
Ashley Avatar
August 26, 2024 at 12:28 PM
Dear Paul, your double acrostic is a showcase for your poetic dexterity. It's not easy to do this with flawless flow, emotion and imagery, but you create poetry with finesse, my talented friend. You've captured adolescent love with all the angst in your brilliant verse. Amazing! Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Callus Avatar
September 5, 2024 at 12:44 PM
Thank you for your generous complimentary feedback, dear Susan....and pls forgive the late reply; these past months have been testing, to say the least. I am pleased to see that you are still writing beautiful poetry! Warm regards and hugs my dear friend. // paul
Radice Avatar
July 9, 2024 at 11:31 PM
It takes the skill of a great poet to put together a double acrostic, have it flow and tell a story too. Well done. Cheers - Gary
Callus Avatar
July 10, 2024 at 2:17 PM
Thank you for the encouraging complimentary feedback, Gary. Always pleased to hear from you. ~ Regards // paul
Manassian Avatar
July 7, 2024 at 12:22 PM
Not easy to write using this form, but you've find well. Good job. Good luck in the contest
Callus Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 2:27 AM
Thank you for stopping by dear Eileen. I've just been reading and enjoying your latest offerings! Keep that ink flowing, my friend! Hugs // paul
Nicholsen Avatar
July 7, 2024 at 10:05 AM
Lovely work enjoyed reading your work many blessings
Callus Avatar
July 8, 2024 at 1:07 AM
Thank you Yolanda. Regards and blessings to you, too. // paul
Goldsmith Avatar
July 6, 2024 at 12:47 PM
Congratulations on you win. I enjoyed reading your Double Acrostic write. Have a great day/weekend..............
Callus Avatar
July 7, 2024 at 8:59 AM
Thank you, Paula. I hope you have been having an enjoyable weekend :) Regards // paul
May Avatar
July 6, 2024 at 7:32 AM
Very nicely penned Paul, Congrats on your win
Callus Avatar
July 6, 2024 at 1:05 PM
Thank you for the high placement, Joseph. It was challenging and fun this contest of yours. ~ Regards // paul
Empress Avatar
July 4, 2024 at 12:05 PM
Brilliant double acrostic dear Paul, i love how your words flow so seamlessly and how youv written also about adolescent love and how one is left heartbroken and those memories can definitely bitter to look back at: very well delivered: best wishes for the contest, pleasure reading your work always. A fave it is
Callus Avatar
July 6, 2024 at 1:02 PM
Thank you dear Empress, for this delightful feedback which adds a bright sheen to my poem. Thank you also for the wishes and the fav. ~ Have a lovely weekend // paul
Riabi Dziri Avatar
June 29, 2024 at 2:18 AM
A double Beauty! You write and you illuminate! You always add to your avid reader from your dexterity and richness! A sage mind and artistic soul and the quill follows! You amazingly captured the state when a young soul is going through teen sentiment issues.. A tremendous pleasure to read you once again, Paul! Have great times.. Best regards.
Callus Avatar
July 7, 2024 at 8:37 AM
Your feedback is always a pleasure to read dear Besma. Thank you for your sincere interest in reading and commenting. It is good to see you posting again :) Warm regards // paul
Onclaud Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 3:34 PM
Paul my friend, I missed you terribly... this acrostic is brilliantly designed...much enjoyed! see you more often on the hallways of soup!
Callus Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 12:43 PM
Thank you, my friend! Glad you enjoyed my latest Soup offering, but even more pleased to have you back in the fold. ~ Warm regards // paul
One Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 12:57 PM
Nicely done.. I think this is not an easy thing to do... Great choice for an acrostic.. I hope you are well..
Callus Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 4:01 PM
Definitely not easy....but it did not stop you from writing a longer and more difficult one, S1 :) Regards // paul
Vaso Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 12:15 AM
Very sad, but wonderful poetry.
Vaso Avatar
July 11, 2024 at 11:59 PM
Then I wish you more happiness, I have had enough of this sadness :)
Callus Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 12:55 PM
Thank you, Arthur; luckily, from time to time sadness comes to my rescue. Regards // paul
Roper Avatar
June 26, 2024 at 11:29 PM
A broken heart, triggered emotions ... adolescent love for sure. Great Acrostic
Callus Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 3:51 PM
Thank you for reading and liking, Eve. Hope you are keeping well. Warm regards // paul
Ray Choudhury Avatar
June 26, 2024 at 6:45 PM
Dear Paul, what a brilliant magician you are - playing with words! Double Acrostic is not easy, you have created such an excellent piece! Best wishes ~ Mala
Callus Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 3:18 PM
Thank you for the complimentary comments dear Mala! Double Acrostic can be time consuming, but it's fun. ~ Best regards // paul
Tripp Avatar
June 26, 2024 at 3:56 PM
This form looks really difficult to perfect, but you’ve surpassed excellence! Great write!
Callus Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 3:21 AM
Thank you, Rhoda. I agree that it's not so easy to write a double acrostic, but knowing you, I can already imagine your pen busy having a go at writing one :) ~ Regards // paul
De Beaulieu Avatar
June 26, 2024 at 3:15 PM
Hello Paul Callus, a one sided love is not good. No wonder the person was heart broken. Regards,/ Darlene/
De Beaulieu Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 9:59 AM
hello Paul, Yes Paul I am enjoying the summer. I hope you are to. I met my nephew's girlfriend she is from England. She is here for 6 weeks. It s almost time for her to return to England. Regards /Darlene/
Callus Avatar
June 27, 2024 at 3:15 AM
Thank you for the pleasure of your visit, Darlene, and for the feedback. Hope you are enjoying summer :) Regards // paul
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