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There across the movie screen, treats were dancing and telling us to find them at the concession stand. Yes, I knew I should not go. I‘d just eaten lunch. At the snack bar, they beguiled, “Have a little munch!” M & M’s and Hershey bars - chocolaty delight - with such smooth deep voices asked me to take a bite! Hot dogs nearly barked out, “Don’t let us go to waste!” Meanwhile candies sweetly sang, “Have a little taste.” Then an Ice cream bar chimed in, “Take a bite of me! I can take a licking too and most happily.” Pepperoni pizza was sure a little tease. calling out with Nachos, “Hey, We’ve got lots of cheese!” At that dine-in theater clamored other food. Subway, Arby’s, many more sounding rather rude. They were all competing , but Popcorn filled the air with its heady butter scent. What a circus there! All were screaming out to me (though I don’t know why), “Bite me! Bite me!” Don’t foods know bitten, they will die? Well, I bought the popcorn as my dear hubbie sighed, “We already had our lunch.” “Bite me,” I replied. In 7/5 Trochee Form for the Bite Me Contest of John Lawless

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Date: 6/11/2015 12:32:00 PM
This is so creative and funny! I was giggling a few lines in and laughing out loud at the end. Thank goodness I wasn't eating when I read the last line or I would have choked!
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Date: 6/9/2015 7:16:00 PM
LOL....this is freaking awesome! Entertaining, hilarious and delicious! Fave! Hugs
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Date: 6/9/2015 11:15:00 AM
Andrea..You tickled my sweet tooth and my spicy one too..I can bite all hersheys,hotdogs and m&ms ,and take your popcorn too.Yummy poem gal.
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Date: 6/9/2015 12:48:00 AM
Oh my goodness, this is what one would call having fun while reading :-) Thank you for this early morning chuckle Andrea, super awesome poem :-)
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Date: 6/8/2015 1:50:00 AM
Andie! :D hahahah i love your version of Bite me!! sooooooooo funny!!! i'll fave it! weeeeeee! ~olive eloisa!
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Date: 6/7/2015 2:12:00 PM
Excellent work. So amused by so many of your lines. Best of luck in the comp.
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Date: 6/7/2015 10:41:00 AM
Beautiful write broken wings so cute and funny, good luck in the contest ......A.M
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Date: 6/7/2015 8:54:00 AM
The story was realistically portrayed within a flowing snappy beat and your words flowed effortlessly as the imagery created an atmosphere of "been there, done that" with a snappy ending that brought the whole scene to life in my mind. Emile. #7
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Date: 6/7/2015 8:45:00 AM
Hubbie should have bought you one of everything. I hope the popcorn was a jumbo with extra butter. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Rob.
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Date: 6/7/2015 10:40:00 PM
/rob, I hope ya know that was all made up. Joe does not even accompany me to movies. Haha. But one thing is true, when i actually buy food at the theater and don't sneak it in (inside my purse) I DO go for the big tub of BUTTERED corn.
Date: 6/7/2015 12:42:00 AM
if you were not married I just might! Uplifting poem, loved this!
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Date: 6/6/2015 8:08:00 AM
Sweet seductions hard to resist, love the last stanza...hugs
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Date: 6/6/2015 7:31:00 AM
Love your yummy take on the theme...with biting last words! You're right though, for movies, popcorn beats 'em all!
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Date: 6/6/2015 1:30:00 AM
so wonderful how you have given them all a voice Andrea and I love your last line hugs 7 and fav
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Date: 6/5/2015 10:39:00 PM
ROFL, Andrea! Wow! this was just too funny!!! Great write and goodluck!
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Date: 6/5/2015 8:22:00 PM
Great ending Andie!! Light & Love Debbie
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Date: 6/5/2015 3:41:00 PM
Too good, very cleverly written. Love the last line.
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Date: 6/5/2015 2:45:00 PM
This one is a howl. Love it. In my high school days - talking 1945 to 1947 - If you didn't like what someone said to you, you said, "Bite me!" Oh the nostalgia you have given me with your rather crude remark. And I a very sophisticated dude. Hardy, harr, harr. Love, daver
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Date: 6/5/2015 1:35:00 PM
Oh so fun! Nicely done! My sweet tooth is screaming, time to get me some yum yum.
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Date: 6/5/2015 1:04:00 PM
Witty work and cleverly written..I enjoyed reading your contest entry..Thanks for dropping by my blog..Sara
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Date: 6/5/2015 12:44:00 PM
ha ha ha love the humourous take for the contest and NOW i feel hungry - cheers Andrea:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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Date: 6/5/2015 10:17:00 AM
Lol...whether hungry or not I always go for the movie popcorn... Add an iced and I'm in heaven.
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