Jan Allison Poet Haibun

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Birthday Dip

Brrrrr my alarm clock wakes me with a start. I open heavy eyelids to see sun streaming through a chink in the curtains. Bounding out of bed I hurriedly dress in my bikini and cover up with my shortest shorts and tightest tee-shirt. With my arthritic knees and varicose veins I am no Betty Grable, but I’m gonna prove once and for all that I can still cut it! Grabbing my surf board I head off to the local beach where my family are gathered for my 100th birthday celebrations. There is an air of anticipation as I strip down to my bikini and dip my toes into the freezing water. White spume crashes up the beach as I paddle out on my surfboard, everyone cheers as I stand and begin cresting huge waves eventually coming to rest on the damp sand. My son wraps me in a fluffy towel and hands me a steaming mug of hot chocolate.  He presents me with a telegram from the Queen and a gold envelope containing a voucher for my next challenge of wing walking ...I just cannot stop smiling!

centenarian
surfs like flipper the dolphin
palm trees blow in breeze

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2/7/19

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Ralph Sergi August 16, 2019 at 6:00 PM Hi Jan: A fantasy come true! Great halibut, Congratulations! Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 6:25 PM thanks Ralph I have discovered I have a vivid imagination lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy August 6, 2019 at 2:26 AM Congratulations, Jan on your well deserved win. Great Haibun indeed. Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 6:25 PM thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley August 2, 2019 at 8:18 PM It’s a joy to return and reread this exceptional haibun, Jan. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 6:25 PM thanks Susan I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina August 2, 2019 at 6:18 AM Great write Jan. If I ever made it to one hundred the last thing I would do is try surfing (I can't swim good... Maybe a sky-dive though...(lol) Congratulations on your win. Hugs // Charlie xx Jan Allison August 16, 2019 at 6:24 PM thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie July 3, 2019 at 7:16 PM G'day Jan … there's hope for a few of us yet. Certainly a nice tale where the mind still rules the body - well done Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison August 1, 2019 at 4:54 PM thanks Lindsay:-) hugs jan xx

Bette Bavington July 3, 2019 at 1:05 PM Being from the east side of Florida and surfing was my thing when I was younger I applaud the idea. Good one. I think elderly people are as young as they feel. Go for it. Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 2:03 PM Thanks Bette, I have never ever surfed as I am not keen on deep water but I applaud those who do these things at any age:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. July 3, 2019 at 12:34 PM Lol, What a humorous take on the contest theme. If I made it to 100 I suppose I would live it up too! I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 2:03 PM Thanks Alexis I hope to live to 100 as longevity is on mum's side of the family but I will be picking up my pen and never a surfboard lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina July 3, 2019 at 5:14 AM 100 is only a number, Jan. Two things in life I have never done is Surf or wear a bikini. If I am fortunate enough to reach that number...I will buy a surf board and try to catch a wave in a bikini. (lol) Great entry...best wishes for a win in Caren's contest. Hugs // Charlie xx Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 7:36 AM LOL Charlie I have a bikini top but never worn bikini bottoms and as for surfing - never as I am scared of deep water lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham July 3, 2019 at 1:03 AM You've got the right idea Jan, think young stay young. Good luck. Tom. Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 7:35 AM Definitely Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley July 2, 2019 at 11:19 PM I would say that your muse has returned better than ever, Jan. I was enchanted by the spunky spirit of this centenarian. Your haiku is a fantastic ending to an endearing piece. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 7:34 AM Thanks Susan!:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper July 2, 2019 at 9:04 PM wonderful write, Jan, I see a lot of elderly ladies that are not embarrassed to show of what life has blessed them with age. Good for a win in Caren contest. Hugs dear friend. Jan Allison July 3, 2019 at 7:33 AM Thanks Eve it was a last minute poem I hope Caren finds it dun:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands July 2, 2019 at 6:34 PM Wow! Great one Jan! :) Jan Allison July 2, 2019 at 6:39 PM Thanks Heidi I got inspired at the last minute I am hoping my muse has finally returned!!!:-) hugs Jan xx