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Brrrrr my alarm clock wakes me with a start. I open heavy eyelids to see sun streaming through a chink in the curtains. Bounding out of bed I hurriedly dress in my bikini and cover up with my shortest shorts and tightest tee-shirt. With my arthritic knees and varicose veins I am no Betty Grable, but I’m gonna prove once and for all that I can still cut it! Grabbing my surf board I head off to the local beach where my family are gathered for my 100th birthday celebrations. There is an air of anticipation as I strip down to my bikini and dip my toes into the freezing water. White spume crashes up the beach as I paddle out on my surfboard, everyone cheers as I stand and begin cresting huge waves eventually coming to rest on the damp sand. My son wraps me in a fluffy towel and hands me a steaming mug of hot chocolate. He presents me with a telegram from the Queen and a gold envelope containing a voucher for my next challenge of wing walking ...I just cannot stop smiling! centenarian surfs like flipper the dolphin palm trees blow in breeze Hey Write a Happy Haibun Contest Sponsored by Caren Krutsinger 2/7/19

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Ralph Sergi

Date: 8/16/2019 6:00:00 PM

Hi Jan: A fantasy come true! Great halibut, Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2019 6:25:00 PM

thanks Ralph I have discovered I have a vivid imagination lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 8/6/2019 2:26:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your well deserved win. Great Haibun indeed.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2019 6:25:00 PM

thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/2/2019 8:18:00 PM

It’s a joy to return and reread this exceptional haibun, Jan. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2019 6:25:00 PM

thanks Susan I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 8/2/2019 6:18:00 AM

Great write Jan. If I ever made it to one hundred the last thing I would do is try surfing (I can't swim good... Maybe a sky-dive though...(lol) Congratulations on your win. Hugs // Charlie xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2019 6:24:00 PM

thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/3/2019 7:16:00 PM

G'day Jan … there's hope for a few of us yet. Certainly a nice tale where the mind still rules the body - well done Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2019 4:54:00 PM

thanks Lindsay:-) hugs jan xx

Bette Bavington

Date: 7/3/2019 1:05:00 PM

Being from the east side of Florida and surfing was my thing when I was younger I applaud the idea. Good one. I think elderly people are as young as they feel. Go for it.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 2:03:00 PM

Thanks Bette, I have never ever surfed as I am not keen on deep water but I applaud those who do these things at any age:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/3/2019 12:34:00 PM

Lol, What a humorous take on the contest theme. If I made it to 100 I suppose I would live it up too! I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 2:03:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I hope to live to 100 as longevity is on mum's side of the family but I will be picking up my pen and never a surfboard lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 7/3/2019 5:14:00 AM

100 is only a number, Jan. Two things in life I have never done is Surf or wear a bikini. If I am fortunate enough to reach that number...I will buy a surf board and try to catch a wave in a bikini. (lol) Great entry...best wishes for a win in Caren's contest. Hugs // Charlie xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 7:36:00 AM

LOL Charlie I have a bikini top but never worn bikini bottoms and as for surfing - never as I am scared of deep water lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/3/2019 1:03:00 AM

You've got the right idea Jan, think young stay young. Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 7:35:00 AM

Definitely Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/2/2019 11:19:00 PM

I would say that your muse has returned better than ever, Jan. I was enchanted by the spunky spirit of this centenarian. Your haiku is a fantastic ending to an endearing piece. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 7:34:00 AM

Thanks Susan!:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/2/2019 9:04:00 PM

wonderful write, Jan, I see a lot of elderly ladies that are not embarrassed to show of what life has blessed them with age. Good for a win in Caren contest. Hugs dear friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2019 7:33:00 AM

Thanks Eve it was a last minute poem I hope Caren finds it dun:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/2/2019 6:34:00 PM

Wow! Great one Jan! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2019 6:39:00 PM

Thanks Heidi I got inspired at the last minute I am hoping my muse has finally returned!!!:-) hugs Jan xx