Home » Poems » Arthur Vaso » Birthday Cake

Birthday Cake

The bakery was closed family only an echo of long ago no mementos of love loneliness built into my spinal chord musical notes exposing a weeping child within an old man a broken guitar sits on the floor The grave yard across the street beckons the next day a friend brings birthday candles it took only one match to burn down the rest of my life

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Eve Roper

Date: 9/30/2023 1:32:00 PM

Heartfelt poem, my friend. A birthday is to me a memorable time with joy. Not a time of sorrow and loneliness.

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/27/2023 11:11:00 AM

This is such a sad, sad poem Arthur but so beautifully written. You are such a talented, wonderful poet. Very touching, thought provoking with a very powerful end. I enjoyed reading your fine writing. Blessings to you.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/26/2023 4:16:00 PM

Hello arthur, this is so sad. Enjoy your eveb=ning my friend. /Darlene\

Arlo Parker

Date: 9/26/2023 10:58:00 AM

Too many end here… Seriously profound.

Bill Baker

Date: 9/26/2023 10:56:00 AM

WOW! Powerful poetry, Arthur. Your closing line was dynamic. Thanks for you visit to my poetry; I'm following your poetry now. Have a great week! Bill

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/26/2023 10:32:00 AM

Gorgeous writing brother.

Deb M

Date: 9/26/2023 8:07:00 AM

Oh Arthur….what an incredibly moving and beautifully sad poem! Loved it! Debx

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/26/2023 5:54:00 AM

Arthur, your words took me on a profound journey into the abyss of solitude and the inevitable passage of time. However, it is your final lines that truly encapsulate the essence of this experience.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 9/26/2023 3:40:00 AM

wow this is so so powerful to read. It really packs a punch. I want to join you for a piece of cake, no candles, lol

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/26/2023 3:10:00 AM

Your imagination excels despite the sadness of this poem. Truly you are a great poet.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/26/2023 2:56:00 AM

I have a huge lump in my throat my friend, that final line and stanza sure packs a punch. I no longer do birthdays - the fire risk insurance of the candles is too much:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 9/26/2023 2:27:00 AM

You dove into the depths of loneliness and aging in these lines, Art. But your last lines are the epitome of ‘show… don’t tell’ Excellent poetry

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/26/2023 1:41:00 AM

- What a heartbreaking poem, Arthur :( -

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/26/2023 12:11:00 AM

wow Arthur strong but very sad it reaches deep inside your soul and rips a bit a way hugs Shadow