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Birds and bees, and butterflies… warm embraces, endless sighs, hearts aflutter, loving eyes - communing under dreary skies. Warm embraces, endless sighs, enchantment in sublime retreat; communing under dreary skies - October doldrums turning sweet. Enchantment in sublime retreat, hearts aflutter, loving eyes; October doldrums turning sweet - birds and bees, and butterflies. ~~~~~~~~ 10/11/19 Poet's October Pantoum Poetry Contest Sponsored by William Kekaula *this pantoum has gone through a bit of a transformation, like the butterfly, to become something a little more pleasing to my own eyes and ears ~ So, if it looks a little different from first reading, you are not imagining things ;)

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2019 3:28:00 PM

I can't recall how you had it before. But it's still beautiful to me!!

Hello There
Date: 10/15/2019 4:05:00 PM

Lol. The changes are subtle, but thank you, again <3

Chris Green

Date: 10/14/2019 8:19:00 AM

I love the revised version and the picture is perfect for the poem. The Monarchs have started to arrive where I live on their trek to Mexico for the winter. I saw quite a few this weekend.

Hello There
Date: 10/14/2019 10:20:00 AM

Thank you so much, Chris, for coming back to view the changes and offer your kind words ~ I really appreciate it and you, my friend :)

Silent One

Date: 10/13/2019 3:43:00 PM

You did very well.. it is not an easy form..

Hello There
Date: 10/13/2019 9:44:00 PM

Thank you, Silent One ~ much appreciated :)

Joseph May

Date: 10/13/2019 7:36:00 AM

Beautiful Pantoum HT, very nice flow..GL in the contest..

Hello There
Date: 10/13/2019 10:07:00 AM

Thank you very much, Joseph :)

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 10/12/2019 2:14:00 PM

A very sweet poem of those sweet creatures!!

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 4:31:00 PM

Thank you, Smita :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 10/12/2019 6:40:00 AM

Hello There, this pantoum is charming.

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 1:09:00 PM

Thank you, Line ~ It's been slightly modified. I hope you enjoy it even more, if you should happen to wander this way again :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/12/2019 6:38:00 AM

Really beautiful like the butterflies it describes..you aced it, HT..I liked the tone and flow.

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 1:08:00 PM

I'm really happy you feel that way, Vijay ~ thank you so much for stopping in and leaving your kind thoughts always :)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 10/12/2019 1:00:00 AM

Hello There, I hope the doldrums carry away on the wings of the birds, bees, and butterflies. But I would hope that anyway. -Richard

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 1:06:00 PM

Lol. Not really experiencing the doldrums myself (funny word ;), but it sure has been gloomy. Mixed with the combination of cooler days and dying leaves, I thought I'd throw something different out there ~ Thank you, Richard :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/12/2019 12:37:00 AM

Beautiful poetry, to inspire the reader, on the gloomiest of days.

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 1:03:00 PM

Thank you very much, harry! That is exactly why it was written <3

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2019 12:27:00 AM

this is a really cool one, Hello There!!! I found it very sweet.

Hello There
Date: 10/12/2019 1:02:00 PM

Thank you very much, Andrea ~ it has been modified slightly, but the flavor hasn't changed much ;)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/11/2019 9:32:00 PM

I simply love this one. It's so sweet. Love it... Much love and blessings, Gina

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 11:31:00 PM

Oh my gosh, thank you so very much, Gina :) Stop by and check out the new image I'm using if you get a chance :) xo

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/11/2019 4:34:00 PM

This is so beautiful! Very nice :)

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 4:41:00 PM

Thank you, Heidi. I am thrilled you enjoyed this : )

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/11/2019 4:32:00 PM

first attempt was a huge success, this is beautiful my friend, certainly a warm, uplifting poem on a chilly autumn day... love this...i think the title goes well with it :) hugs

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 4:39:00 PM

Oh my goodness :) I'm so glad you feel this way <3 This is so very simple, I just don't understand, my friend... But I feel very grateful it was well-received by a few. Hugs ~

Wendy Watson

Date: 10/11/2019 4:26:00 PM

What an original take on the theme. I really enjoyed the rhythmic flow and sentiments expressed here.

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 4:35:00 PM

Thank you so much, Wendy ~ I really appreciate it! :)

Chris Green

Date: 10/11/2019 4:18:00 PM

I think the title is perfect and the poem is perfect and you did accomplish your goal of adding a little warmth to the day. Your poem though autumn themed feels like a slice of springtime which is just what is needed on a dreary day like this. You could have stopped with the first verse and this would have been perfect. Definitely made me sigh.

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 11:29:00 PM

Well, I changed the picture and a few words, my friend and entered the contest for fun! I think it's a perfect match and speaks more to the autumn season ;)

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 4:32:00 PM

I know, even the image is warm like spring or summer, but I thought it might be a nice change for this day. I really appreciate your comments, Chris... This was meant to take a different shape, but in the back of my mind that pantoum contest popped up. Lol. I would have preferred ending after that first verse, too; just didn't think it would be enough. Thank you, my friend :)

Hello There

Date: 10/11/2019 3:50:00 PM

Thought my title was clever enough and original, but it is nearly impossible to accomplish this, I guess. I'll leave it as is this time, because it is too much a part of this simple little piece...my first attempt at a pantoum while trying to add a little warmth to this day.

Hello There
Date: 10/11/2019 4:42:00 PM

Chris Green
Date: 10/11/2019 4:19:00 PM

Nothing is impossible when it comes to poetry. You are a poet and the title comes from what you feel. Seems possible to me. : )