Hello There Poet Pantoum

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Birds and Bees, and Butterflies

Birds and bees, and butterflies…
warm embraces, endless sighs,
hearts aflutter, loving eyes -
communing under dreary skies.

Warm embraces, endless sighs,
enchantment in sublime retreat;
communing under dreary skies -
October doldrums turning sweet.

Enchantment in sublime retreat,
hearts aflutter, loving eyes;
October doldrums turning sweet -
birds and bees, and butterflies.

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10/11/19
Poet's October Pantoum Poetry Contest
Sponsored by William Kekaula




*this pantoum has gone through a bit of a transformation, like the butterfly, to become something a little more pleasing to my own eyes and ears ~ So, if it looks a little different from first reading, you are not imagining things ;)

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Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2019 at 3:28 PM I can't recall how you had it before. But it's still beautiful to me!! Hello There October 15, 2019 at 4:05 PM Lol. The changes are subtle, but thank you, again <3

Chris Green October 14, 2019 at 8:19 AM I love the revised version and the picture is perfect for the poem. The Monarchs have started to arrive where I live on their trek to Mexico for the winter. I saw quite a few this weekend. Hello There October 14, 2019 at 10:20 AM Thank you so much, Chris, for coming back to view the changes and offer your kind words ~ I really appreciate it and you, my friend :)

Silent One October 13, 2019 at 3:43 PM You did very well.. it is not an easy form.. Hello There October 13, 2019 at 9:44 PM Thank you, Silent One ~ much appreciated :)

Joseph May October 13, 2019 at 7:36 AM Beautiful Pantoum HT, very nice flow..GL in the contest.. Hello There October 13, 2019 at 10:07 AM Thank you very much, Joseph :)

Smita Kulkarni October 12, 2019 at 2:14 PM A very sweet poem of those sweet creatures!! Hello There October 12, 2019 at 4:31 PM Thank you, Smita :)

Line Gauthier October 12, 2019 at 6:40 AM Hello There, this pantoum is charming. Hello There October 12, 2019 at 1:09 PM Thank you, Line ~ It's been slightly modified. I hope you enjoy it even more, if you should happen to wander this way again :)

Vijay Pandit October 12, 2019 at 6:38 AM Really beautiful like the butterflies it describes..you aced it, HT..I liked the tone and flow. Hello There October 12, 2019 at 1:08 PM I'm really happy you feel that way, Vijay ~ thank you so much for stopping in and leaving your kind thoughts always :)

Quoth Theraven October 12, 2019 at 1:00 AM Hello There, I hope the doldrums carry away on the wings of the birds, bees, and butterflies. But I would hope that anyway. -Richard Hello There October 12, 2019 at 1:06 PM Lol. Not really experiencing the doldrums myself (funny word ;), but it sure has been gloomy. Mixed with the combination of cooler days and dying leaves, I thought I'd throw something different out there ~ Thank you, Richard :)

Harry Horsman October 12, 2019 at 12:37 AM Beautiful poetry, to inspire the reader, on the gloomiest of days. Hello There October 12, 2019 at 1:03 PM Thank you very much, harry! That is exactly why it was written <3

Andrea Dietrich October 12, 2019 at 12:27 AM this is a really cool one, Hello There!!! I found it very sweet. Hello There October 12, 2019 at 1:02 PM Thank you very much, Andrea ~ it has been modified slightly, but the flavor hasn't changed much ;)

Regina Mcintosh October 11, 2019 at 9:32 PM I simply love this one. It's so sweet. Love it... Much love and blessings, Gina Hello There October 11, 2019 at 11:31 PM Oh my gosh, thank you so very much, Gina :) Stop by and check out the new image I'm using if you get a chance :) xo

Heidi Sands October 11, 2019 at 4:34 PM This is so beautiful! Very nice :) Hello There October 11, 2019 at 4:41 PM Thank you, Heidi. I am thrilled you enjoyed this : )

Sandra Adams October 11, 2019 at 4:32 PM first attempt was a huge success, this is beautiful my friend, certainly a warm, uplifting poem on a chilly autumn day... love this...i think the title goes well with it :) hugs Hello There October 11, 2019 at 4:39 PM Oh my goodness :) I'm so glad you feel this way <3 This is so very simple, I just don't understand, my friend... But I feel very grateful it was well-received by a few. Hugs ~

Wendy Watson October 11, 2019 at 4:26 PM What an original take on the theme. I really enjoyed the rhythmic flow and sentiments expressed here. Hello There October 11, 2019 at 4:35 PM Thank you so much, Wendy ~ I really appreciate it! :)

Chris Green October 11, 2019 at 4:18 PM I think the title is perfect and the poem is perfect and you did accomplish your goal of adding a little warmth to the day. Your poem though autumn themed feels like a slice of springtime which is just what is needed on a dreary day like this. You could have stopped with the first verse and this would have been perfect. Definitely made me sigh. Hello There October 11, 2019 at 11:29 PM Well, I changed the picture and a few words, my friend and entered the contest for fun! I think it's a perfect match and speaks more to the autumn season ;) Hello There October 11, 2019 at 4:32 PM I know, even the image is warm like spring or summer, but I thought it might be a nice change for this day. I really appreciate your comments, Chris... This was meant to take a different shape, but in the back of my mind that pantoum contest popped up. Lol. I would have preferred ending after that first verse, too; just didn't think it would be enough. Thank you, my friend :)

Hello There October 11, 2019 at 3:50 PM Thought my title was clever enough and original, but it is nearly impossible to accomplish this, I guess. I'll leave it as is this time, because it is too much a part of this simple little piece...my first attempt at a pantoum while trying to add a little warmth to this day. Hello There October 11, 2019 at 4:42 PM <3 Chris Green October 11, 2019 at 4:19 PM Nothing is impossible when it comes to poetry. You are a poet and the title comes from what you feel. Seems possible to me. : )