Birds

Birds flocking bathing clouds scurry quickly along stark trees reach for light

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Charles Messina

Date: 1/5/2024 8:24:00 PM

Beautiful haiku, Shadow. Love the imagery. Best wishes for the New Year and I hope all goes well with your leg. Fingers crossed, my friend. Charlie

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 1/5/2024 9:21:00 PM

hi Charles ty for your visit nice of you I am in good hands regrading leg hugs Shadow

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/5/2024 3:01:00 PM

an outstanding and beautifully constructed Haiku, Shadow. I loved it..and could clearly picture and sense the scene you described. I especially liked 'stark trees reach for the light.' That's exactly what they do this time of year. Have to fave this one. Wishing you a splendid and creative weekend, hugs, Sara

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 1/5/2024 9:12:00 PM

so kind Sara I always enjoy your visits take care my friend hugs Shadow

Silent One

Date: 1/5/2024 11:16:00 AM

Vivid imagery my friend.. I hope the water is not too cold in which they bathe.. nice selection of words to capture that photo show of a haiku..

Silent One
Date: 1/5/2024 12:00:00 PM

Oh no, so sorry to hear that... I hope its goes well.. Keep us updated..

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 1/5/2024 11:56:00 AM

ty SO I may not be around for a week or two having problems with blocked veins in my leg the pain is awful my consultant wants me to see him next week. fingers crossed. you always are a great supporter and encourage me to try to harder hugs Shadow

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 1/5/2024 9:35:00 AM

A good poem. Well done.

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 1/5/2024 10:05:00 AM

ty Jean for your comment hugs Shadow

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/5/2024 9:26:00 AM

Shadow, your eloquent description of birds flocking, bathing, and clouds scurrying swiftly amidst stark trees that strive to reach the light, in your haiku composition, is truly remarkable and evocative.

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 1/5/2024 10:03:00 AM

ty Sotto I nearly did not publish it. so am glad you like it hugs Shadow