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Premiere Contest WinnerBeyond the Breakers

Calm, cobalt seas beyond the waves beckon Baby Boomer surfer responds he stands upon his nicked, red board placing his precious cargo on its deck tired arms paddle to deep water where gulls circling the azure sky cry and so does he, this tired, old man he weeps as dolphins provide an escort sunlight ascends higher on the horizon salty spray stings his eyes and uncontrollable tears are released as he recalls his life with her this promise he made as she started to fade weighs heavily on his heart but he must fulfill this last act of love “We’re here, sweet one, beyond the breakers where you chose to rest eternally.” carefully he bends to retrieve the urn caressing it with his sun-aged arms shaking the urn, he lets ashes fall saying farewell one last time slowly he turns and paddles toward shore heartbroken and alone
*February 4, 2017
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Maverick Avatar
October 3, 2021 at 7:35 AM
Yes poignant and striking indeed Carolyn, Maybe you are named differently now? But you will know all the same' Those who leave comments All my best; Joe'
Jayasankar Avatar
August 6, 2021 at 10:27 AM
Getting to know more about the beautiful soul that penned this amazing poem... my humble prayers to such a lovely soul... ~ Ani
Chircop Avatar
August 5, 2021 at 7:05 AM
ashes in the sea I hope your wish is granted Dear Carolyn. My wish for me is that my ashes will be spread in soil and a yellow rose be planted..As so is my life as beautiful and as fun as a rose,and as painful as its thorns.Beautiful Petals.hide so well those.thorns ..but it doesnt ..mean they are not there.I miss you my friend.
Lamoureux Avatar
August 5, 2021 at 5:03 AM
Reading Carolyn’s responses is very telling. So often we humans are oblivious to what’s going on with people.
Lamoureux Avatar
August 5, 2021 at 4:59 AM
So enjoyed rereading this piece.
Gauthier Avatar
January 21, 2021 at 3:54 PM
Back with more congrats, so happy to find this marvelous poem among those published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~
Pathak Avatar
February 10, 2019 at 11:24 PM
Marvellous work of pen. You've, Carolyn painted such a good picture of what happened it shakes you up from deep within. And immersing the ashes in water (generally rivers at confluence, a Hindu tradition) took me back to some recent memories when my parents died. A lovey piece to read
Devonshire Avatar
February 11, 2019 at 5:42 AM
Thank you, Aniruddha. Death of loved ones affects us profoundlly, and I'm sorry to hear of your loss. The scattering of ashes on the wind or in the sea is becoming a more commonplace occurrence today and that is how I would like to leave this world.
Gauthier Avatar
January 1, 2019 at 1:45 PM
Wow - an awesome poem, Carolyn. Congrats on your win.
Roper Avatar
December 28, 2018 at 8:53 PM
I enjoyed reading this great poem, Carolyn , very well written with great imagery. Congratulations on your win! Happy New Year. Hugs Eve ~`*
Canerdy Avatar
December 28, 2018 at 9:25 AM
This is so heartbreakingly beautiful, Carolyn! CONGRATS on your win. Janice
Toney Avatar
December 27, 2018 at 1:44 PM
Carolyn, congrats on your win on mile 4 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. A beautiful write. This one tugged at my heartstrings! ~Mark
Williams Avatar
December 27, 2018 at 1:40 PM
Carolyn, I remember this touching poem from the "Beyond the Breakers" contest last year - a winner then and now. Congratulations on your strong finish with this moving piece! Hugs to you, my friend. :) Bartholomew
Dietrich Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 6:23 PM
I recall this beauty, Carolyn. And I see you got a trophy win on it. BIG congrats for that worthy win. Can you think of a personal favorite of yours I never saw?
Cozart Avatar
August 15, 2017 at 10:31 AM
Poignant story beautifully told. Not surprised at all by the in.
La France Avatar
April 5, 2017 at 10:04 AM
Carolyn, a big congratulations on your trophy win with this outstanding and beautifully penned poem.
O'Leary Avatar
March 14, 2017 at 6:07 PM
Poignant... well done!! Terry
Lamoureux Avatar
March 7, 2017 at 9:00 AM
A worthy winner! I enjoyed this piece.
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 1, 2017 at 5:49 AM
Congratulations on your first place trophy Carolyn with this very moving and sensitive piece. Beautiful! : ) 7
O.J. Hunt Avatar
February 22, 2017 at 11:11 AM
Such true love in this one Carolyn, congrats on your trophy win; a sad song here yet one that touches the heart. I have to favorite this masterpiece. God bless;-)
Leiser Avatar
February 16, 2017 at 12:22 AM
This poetic story is a real masterpiece! Amazing, 7++
Daniel Avatar
February 15, 2017 at 12:39 AM
Deep feelings captured beautifully in this one, Carolyn :) congratulations on your trophy win:)
Callus Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 10:41 AM
When I saw the trophy next to your poem I had to come back to congratulate you on placing first, Carolyn! Well done!! Hugs // paul
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February 13, 2017 at 10:19 AM
Congrats on your trophy win. Enjoyed the write esp the fabulous imagery! :))
White Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 3:22 AM
Carolyn, this is wonderful, congratulations! Your last two stanzas, so emotional...
Neumann Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 1:58 AM
Wow. Congratulations. No more words necessary. Many wishes, Kai
Devonshire Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 2:07 AM
Just want to thank everyone for taking the time to read this poem and offering supportive feedback. Poetry Soup members rock!
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