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Calm, cobalt seas beyond the waves beckon Baby Boomer surfer responds he stands upon his nicked, red board placing his precious cargo on its deck tired arms paddle to deep water where gulls circling the azure sky cry and so does he, this tired, old man he weeps as dolphins provide an escort sunlight ascends higher on the horizon salty spray stings his eyes and uncontrollable tears are released as he recalls his life with her this promise he made as she started to fade weighs heavily on his heart but he must fulfill this last act of love “We’re here, sweet one, beyond the breakers where you chose to rest eternally.” carefully he bends to retrieve the urn caressing it with his sun-aged arms shaking the urn, he lets ashes fall saying farewell one last time slowly he turns and paddles toward shore heartbroken and alone
*February 4, 2017

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Date: 10/3/2021 7:35:00 AM
Yes poignant and striking indeed Carolyn, Maybe you are named differently now? But you will know all the same' Those who leave comments All my best; Joe'
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Date: 8/6/2021 10:27:00 AM
Getting to know more about the beautiful soul that penned this amazing poem... my humble prayers to such a lovely soul... ~ Ani
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Date: 8/5/2021 7:05:00 AM
ashes in the sea I hope your wish is granted Dear Carolyn. My wish for me is that my ashes will be spread in soil and a yellow rose be planted..As so is my life as beautiful and as fun as a rose,and as painful as its thorns.Beautiful Petals.hide so well those.thorns ..but it doesnt ..mean they are not there.I miss you my friend.
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Date: 8/5/2021 5:03:00 AM
Reading Carolyn’s responses is very telling. So often we humans are oblivious to what’s going on with people.
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Date: 8/5/2021 4:59:00 AM
So enjoyed rereading this piece.
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Date: 1/21/2021 3:54:00 PM
Back with more congrats, so happy to find this marvelous poem among those published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:24:00 PM
Marvellous work of pen. You've, Carolyn painted such a good picture of what happened it shakes you up from deep within. And immersing the ashes in water (generally rivers at confluence, a Hindu tradition) took me back to some recent memories when my parents died. A lovey piece to read
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Date: 2/11/2019 5:42:00 AM
Thank you, Aniruddha. Death of loved ones affects us profoundlly, and I'm sorry to hear of your loss. The scattering of ashes on the wind or in the sea is becoming a more commonplace occurrence today and that is how I would like to leave this world.
Date: 1/1/2019 1:45:00 PM
Wow - an awesome poem, Carolyn. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 12/28/2018 8:53:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this great poem, Carolyn , very well written with great imagery. Congratulations on your win! Happy New Year. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 12/28/2018 9:25:00 AM
This is so heartbreakingly beautiful, Carolyn! CONGRATS on your win. Janice
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Date: 12/27/2018 1:44:00 PM
Carolyn, congrats on your win on mile 4 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. A beautiful write. This one tugged at my heartstrings! ~Mark
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Date: 12/27/2018 1:40:00 PM
Carolyn, I remember this touching poem from the "Beyond the Breakers" contest last year - a winner then and now. Congratulations on your strong finish with this moving piece! Hugs to you, my friend. :) Bartholomew
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Date: 5/1/2018 6:23:00 PM
I recall this beauty, Carolyn. And I see you got a trophy win on it. BIG congrats for that worthy win. Can you think of a personal favorite of yours I never saw?
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Date: 4/17/2018 6:15:00 PM
Hi Carolyn , so vivid so sad :) poor old man broken heart :)) well deserved trophy ( congratulations ) :::))))Hugs ~~~Niall
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Date: 8/15/2017 10:31:00 AM
Poignant story beautifully told. Not surprised at all by the in.
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Date: 4/5/2017 10:04:00 AM
Carolyn, a big congratulations on your trophy win with this outstanding and beautifully penned poem.
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Date: 3/14/2017 6:07:00 PM
Poignant... well done!! Terry
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Date: 3/7/2017 9:00:00 AM
A worthy winner! I enjoyed this piece.
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Date: 3/1/2017 5:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place trophy Carolyn with this very moving and sensitive piece. Beautiful! : ) 7
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Date: 2/22/2017 11:11:00 AM
Such true love in this one Carolyn, congrats on your trophy win; a sad song here yet one that touches the heart. I have to favorite this masterpiece. God bless;-)
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Date: 2/16/2017 12:22:00 AM
This poetic story is a real masterpiece! Amazing, 7++
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Date: 2/15/2017 12:39:00 AM
Deep feelings captured beautifully in this one, Carolyn :) congratulations on your trophy win:)
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Date: 2/13/2017 10:41:00 AM
When I saw the trophy next to your poem I had to come back to congratulate you on placing first, Carolyn! Well done!! Hugs // paul
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Date: 2/13/2017 10:19:00 AM
Congrats on your trophy win. Enjoyed the write esp the fabulous imagery! :))
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Date: 2/13/2017 3:22:00 AM
Carolyn, this is wonderful, congratulations! Your last two stanzas, so emotional...
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