Bewitching

A magic forest
   Where chipmunks slide down moon beams
       And squeal with delight

Oh listen! You'll hear
    robins splash their tiny feet
        in pools of dewdrops

Like laughing children
    Crickets are playing their harps
        And dancing with joy

 Sweet songs at bedtime
   Moss covered carpets, soften
       the music for sleep

Hushed now, cadence of
   summer evening melody
      bewitching the dark
   



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For Tirzah's "Fantasy" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Smith-Johnsen Avatar
January 16, 2010 at 9:11 AM
Carrie, Today I am taking the time to enjoy myself reading some of my favorite poems. Your poem, "Bewitching Evening" is one of my favorite poems. I wanted to let you know that I enjoyed reading it, again. Thank you for sharing. Lovingly, Dane Ann
Jordan Avatar
May 20, 2009 at 12:56 PM
Carrie - Congratulations on placing in Raul’s, “The Sounds of Nature Contest” God Bless, MJ
Lopez Avatar
May 17, 2009 at 2:56 PM
Carrie, need to get the fire extinguisher, you are on fire! concrats on your placement in Raul's contest.
Hudson Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 2:57 PM
Very captivating Carrie, congratulations on your win!-AA
Curcio Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 10:04 AM
A lovely poem that captures evening song! Wonderfully done. Congrats Carrie!
Townsend Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 9:04 AM
Mystical and enchanting, a bewitching write! Congratulations on the Honorable Mention. Thank you for your many warm and wonderful comments on my writings. Your kindness means so much to me, especially today! Smiles from Lolita
Strand Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 8:30 AM
Congrats on your success in Raul's contest Carrie Rgds Brian
Winter Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 5:44 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Raul's contest! Such an awesome write! Way to go!!! Love, Shar
Moreno Avatar
May 15, 2009 at 2:17 AM
Carrie, congrats for placing in my contest...Raul
Wordslinger Avatar
May 9, 2009 at 11:05 AM
I like the second stanza or verse, :)
Devonshire Avatar
April 30, 2009 at 1:25 PM
This poem has a magical feel to it, Carrie. Your talent for captivating the reader with vivid images shines. We can hear the sounds and see the forces of nature at work. Good luck in the contest! Love, Carolyn
Pate Avatar
April 28, 2009 at 8:41 PM
Bewitching! I really enjoyed the playful words and imagery. Excellent.
Rider Avatar
April 26, 2009 at 9:23 AM
beautiful and dreamy. Good luck in the contest! Thank you for your comments also. ~Trudy~
Shahwan Avatar
April 23, 2009 at 12:35 PM
This is a beautiful poem indeed. Both choka and haiku are alike somehow..I have no offences about it at all. Senryu lays among. Beautiful poetic system and fun to follow. I wish you all the best.
Shahwan Avatar
April 23, 2009 at 7:16 AM
Beautiful haiku...it's 5,7,5 cylab. pls re-enty your poem as haiku; I appreciate your understanding. All the best. Thank you for commenting my poem CoffeeCup.
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
April 22, 2009 at 7:07 AM
You did it again!!! Wonderful. I live in the woods. You have made them so fanciful. I can't pick just one line. I love them all. Thanks for your comments...my snack rhymed. LOL
Williams Avatar
April 18, 2009 at 11:16 AM
Truly enchanting.... good luck in the competition Carrie
Stella Avatar
April 18, 2009 at 7:14 AM
oh wow carrie this was stunning you got my act beat by a long shot with this one just stunning visuals here too thanks for sharing and for all your kind comments to my works too I am so behind in return comments its not funny due to me being on several sites I will be returning more as time goes by but glad I caught this one thanks again great write and read keep up the great work
Winter Avatar
April 17, 2009 at 12:50 PM
Carrie, I feel like I jumped into the pages of a child's fairy tale book. Did you ever see the movie Enchanted? (feel like I even asked you this before) You remind me of the main character who makes the real world so delightful and enchanting by her beautiful outlook on life. Of course she is cartoon character turned real, but enough of that! Each verse a mesmerizing sound of nature during a summer's eve so magically expressed. Good luck! Love, Shar (going to send you soup mail).
Rhinem Avatar
April 17, 2009 at 12:16 PM
Smile~"Hello Precious, Priceless & Gifted Carrie Richards & All Your Loves!!!":):)~It is hard for myself to take anything else from this wonderful write of "Yours"~Except, that it is pretty creation, from a "A Very Beautiful Lady & Mind!!!":):)~Lets go view another...."My Love To 'You All,' John!!!:):) ~
Shango Avatar
April 17, 2009 at 6:29 AM
Carrie, best of luck in the contest, all the esentials are here to win. It would be deserving for all your skill and power to weave the word from imagination or fantasy that we cannot tell where lies the border between the real and the virtual. This is a sweet, musical write and a fun accomplishment to read.
P. Avatar
April 17, 2009 at 3:12 AM
brilliant choka, Carrie! the words are so beautiful ... a truly wonderful piece! best wishes ~ Arany
Moreno Avatar
April 16, 2009 at 8:53 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest Carrie...Raul
Shahwan Avatar
April 16, 2009 at 7:27 PM
Beautiful indeed. Should...crickets are dancing softly (7cylb). I'm looking forward for more choka. Thank you for commenting my poem.
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