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Bewildered

Thrown asunder in bewilderment I list like a ship in a catatonic sea inert in a perplexed state of confusion thoughts drift in and out, going nowhere unable to move forwards or backwards I flounder helplessly in uncharted waters. Written on 2/12/2019

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Date: 2/16/2019 9:49:00 AM
Laura, I like everything about this poem the words, the mood and the layout, excellent ~
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/16/2019 9:51:00 AM
Thank you, Constance! So glad you like this. :)
Date: 2/16/2019 12:43:00 AM
'I list like a ship in a catatonic sea/inert'... Fabulous! I love the ship metaphor. It reminds me of a scene in 'The Finest Hour', when a hulk of a damaged ship is seen just sitting there in the storm... (Won't spoil it for you) :-)
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Andrew Fairchild
Date: 2/18/2019 3:36:00 AM
It's Chris Pine's best film!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/16/2019 9:54:00 AM
Thanks, Andrew! I must watch that film! :)
Date: 2/14/2019 2:25:00 AM
Oh my goodness, this is every other day of my life right now! A wonderful little portrait of bewilderment Laura. Love it! Well deserved congratulations on your place in my contest!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/14/2019 10:16:00 AM
Thanks so much for my placement in your contest, Nina! I’m thrilled :)
Date: 2/13/2019 10:51:00 PM
You have captured the heart, soul and mind of bewilderment in this well-written missive, Laura. Nicely done. A well deserved win!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 11:31:00 PM
Thank you, Caren! :)
Date: 2/13/2019 10:09:00 PM
Laura, I have to say that for someone who 'lists like a ship in a catatonic sea'---you sure do write awesome poetry!! … Congrats on your placement in the contest! :) Gershon
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 10:12:00 PM
Thanks, Gershon! I was writing for the emotions contest, so hopefully I don’t always “list” in real life, lol! :)
Date: 2/13/2019 7:58:00 PM
this describes my own confusion with the side effects of Prolia. It actually makes me feel like a ship tossed on the sea (a wind blows through my body). Love this. I would hate to feel this way both emotionally and physically at the same time . Congrats.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 10:06:00 PM
Sorry to hear about the side effects of your medication, Andrea. Thanks for your congrats. :)
Date: 2/13/2019 5:29:00 PM
That feeling of being bewildered, of being at a loss, is well captured in your poem’s expressive beauty, Laura. I enjoyed your superb poetry. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always, my friend. ~Susan
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 5:40:00 PM
Thanks so much for commenting, Susan! I appreciate it. :)
Date: 2/13/2019 4:00:00 PM
powerfully penned Laura, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 4:43:00 PM
Thanks so much, Jan! :)
Date: 2/13/2019 3:52:00 PM
Powerful, Laura. Congrats on your win.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 4:43:00 PM
Thanks very much, Line! :)
Date: 2/13/2019 2:32:00 PM
All the waters of the ocean cannot sink a ship until they start getting inside; all the troubles in the world cannot sink a person until they start invading their inner life. Be well my dear friend.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/13/2019 2:57:00 PM
Thanks, Arbol...so true!
Date: 2/12/2019 8:24:00 PM
An Amazing free verse, Laura.. Very intriguing and suspenseful.. Have a blessed evening, my friend..
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/12/2019 10:56:00 PM
Thank you, Robertina! :)