Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Betrayal of Our Love

When we married in church
            you swore a solemn vow,
now you’ve left me in the lurch
shacking up with that vile cow.
                        In front of the lawyer you just lied
crocodile tears shed, how you cried
your betrayal of us can’t be denied
      You launched a vitriolic attack
            stabbing me cruelly in the back
                        scruples are the one thing you lack
It’s for honesty I now search -
            I find trust so difficult now  
      Family life you cast aside
            abandoning me and our son Jack



FICTION POEM – I started another poem but found it too emotional to write about the real betrayal in my life by my sister

Fragmented Rhyme contest
Sponsored by Dear Hear a k a Broken Wings

11/3/18

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Sandra Haight December 4, 2018 at 8:14 PM So glad your poem is fictional, Jan, but the imagery and emotion you stir are so powerful. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Eve Roper December 4, 2018 at 5:42 PM I enjoyed reading this great poem, Jan, very well written. It stirs a reader's imagination and the very sad emotions . Congratulations on your win! Jan Allison December 4, 2018 at 5:49 PM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France December 3, 2018 at 4:37 PM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this exceptional write, although fiction you make it seem true ~ Jan Allison December 3, 2018 at 4:54 PM Thanks so much Constance you really make me go out of my comfort zone and write dark and sad:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong November 10, 2018 at 12:45 AM Disloyality stings to the core Jan. You capture that well in this fictional piece! : ) Jan Allison November 10, 2018 at 2:30 PM Sadly there are those that can relate to this deception:-( Hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen November 4, 2018 at 11:26 AM - No matter how much real betrayal we have experienced, Jan ... words can not tell ... the painful feelings, disappointments and thoughts ... day and night - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison November 4, 2018 at 3:08 PM Thanks Anne lise:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Marshall Goff November 3, 2018 at 10:23 PM Vivid, revealing, poignant...jimbo Jan Allison November 4, 2018 at 2:50 AM Thanks Jim:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf November 3, 2018 at 9:50 PM Ooooh. Betrayal of trust is the absolute worst. Cracks the most solid of foundations. We can all relate, Jan. Best wishes, Gershon Jan Allison November 4, 2018 at 2:47 AM Sadly this happens all too often Gershon:-( hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta November 3, 2018 at 5:00 PM Aye, Hell hath no fury like an human scorned! People are well shed of anyone who disparages them, and family and friends tend to twist the blade. The search for someone you can trust is a lifelong quest, but good luck - (as well as in the contest)! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison November 3, 2018 at 5:03 PM I've been with my hubby for nearly 30 years and we have both had betrayal from our families but the main thing is we have eachother and our wonderful son and i still have my amazing mum - as for my sister all I feel for her is pity:-( hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham November 3, 2018 at 5:00 PM Well written verse on betrayal Jan, RE the other ,isn't it a shame we can't choose our family like we can our friends. Good luck. Tom. Jan Allison November 3, 2018 at 5:05 PM You are so right Tom, and despite the fact she has everything materially my life is far richer than hers in so so many ways. I started the poem about her and abandoned it but the 2nd and 3rd stanzas are part of what I wrote lol:-) hugs jan xx