Beneath the Shattered

Test me
I am willing
To fail

Failure
Is not fatal
At all

All things
Are born to be
Broken

Break free
From the outer
Hard shell

Shells can
Hide the beauty
Within

With love
Flowing freely
We glow

Glowing
For all the world
To see

Seeing
All the beauty
They smile

Smiling
Brings them pleasure
As well

Welling
Up from their soul
A gift

Gifted
To all who are
Shattered


I decided to call this a  "Mussetle Train" try one out it is fun.
2 4 2 non rhyming take a word from the end of each stanza(car)
and use a derivative of it to form the premise of the next car in the train.


I am playing with a non rhyming vesion of the Musette form.
The last word of each stanza forms the premise of the next.

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Date: 7/31/2019 10:41:00 PM
Enjoy the style and subject
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/1/2019 9:30:00 AM
Thanks Edmund.
Date: 3/6/2018 4:32:00 AM
Nice and beautiful invention Mussetle Train
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/6/2018 7:15:00 AM
Hi Muhammad, thanks for reading my older pieces.
Date: 10/21/2015 9:36:00 AM
Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2015 10:11:00 AM
Thanks Anisha.
Date: 10/21/2015 9:02:00 AM
Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta
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Date: 1/8/2015 10:44:00 AM
This is absolutely beautiful. Very lovely form as well!
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Date: 12/23/2014 6:30:00 PM
It does look as though you have been having a bit of fun with this. Love the look of this form. Best of luck with the comp.
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Date: 12/20/2014 9:01:00 AM
Richard, I love your train of poetry, and think this is a wonderful concept for a contest, I am so happy I came to poetry soup today and found this, I am going to start working on it today and thank you so much for all your support and comments on my poetry, I so appreciate it ~~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/20/2014 9:39:00 AM
So great to have you visit. I look forward to reading your entry.
Date: 12/13/2014 3:10:00 PM
This is wonderful and a fun challenge. I hope I can find the time to write one for your contest Richard. Yours is great!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/14/2014 7:20:00 PM
I hope you give it a try, I think you would do great.
Date: 12/10/2014 9:56:00 AM
You caught the train,many poets run after...
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Date: 12/4/2014 4:17:00 PM
This Mussetle Train is a clever variation of the Musette form; to have it rhyming would be very hard! I have been wrestling with it for over an hour! But I think I have come up with something! // paul
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Date: 12/2/2014 7:13:00 PM
ahh and now I have found the directions, you know i sure do love trying something new. :) :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:08:00 PM
Excellent Casarah, I am sure you will be a natural.
Date: 12/2/2014 8:00:00 AM
This was a wonderful way to start my day Richard....really enjoyed it....and may have to try this form....looks so fun..and yes had a great holiday ..hope you did....:-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM
I hope you do Donna. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 12/2/2014 6:40:00 AM
This is a form I may have to try. (not too many rules). This is a fav! The entire poem is amazing but I especially like the third and last stanzas. Belated congrats on being chosen poem of the day.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM
Thanks Monterey. ;0)
Date: 12/1/2014 9:24:00 PM
When inspiration strikes me I'll be sure to give it a go!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:10:00 PM
I hope it strikes in time for you to enter the contest. Toot! Toot!
Date: 12/1/2014 5:22:00 PM
Congratulations on poem of the day. Sorry I 'm late.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 5:58:00 PM
No worries Brenda, apology not required.
Date: 12/1/2014 2:30:00 AM
Wait a sec, you made this up? How cool! Most creative of you, Rick. And you've created a most lovely poem as well - you should look up Kintsugi: the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with melted gold. It's to signify that things are more beautiful - when they are broken.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 8:56:00 AM
Hi Tim, yes I hope it catches on. I would be honored if you give it a go. I wrote a poem about kintsugi, I like the metophor it offers for our redemption.
Date: 11/30/2014 10:30:00 PM
Hi Richard, just saw your poem was selected for POTD! Congratulations! Very intriguing form...I saw your contest and am looking forward to trying this! I enjoyed your poem very much - it does not look easy! Sandra
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 8:58:00 AM
I am pleased you are going to give it a try. Thanks for your visit.
Date: 11/30/2014 10:24:00 PM
Well, lookie who's here? My Guardian Poet. :) I'm always proud of you, Richard. Love your work and the way your mind works. You're so creative. This being a case in point. I will join the train...after my classes are over for the way. Back to congratulate you on being POTD. :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 9:01:00 AM
I am so glad you are going to join the train. I am off to see what new gems you have come up with today.
Date: 11/30/2014 8:58:00 PM
Dear Richard: Well done. Congratulations for the POTD. And this style is not easy. All the best then, Leon.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 10:00:00 PM
Thanks Leon.
Date: 11/30/2014 6:59:00 PM
fantastic job love it
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 7:04:00 PM
Thanks Lauren.
Date: 11/30/2014 3:00:00 PM
This is brilliant Richard I hope it gets accepted as a new form. A Fav for me. Congratulation on your Mussetle Form being chosen a poem of the day. Love you Richard Congratulations.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:43:00 PM
That would be great, get on the Train Maurice! I can use your help getting it out of the station.
Date: 11/30/2014 2:40:00 PM
Looks like fun Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:44:00 PM
Thanks Brenda, check out my contest, you would be a natural.
Date: 11/30/2014 2:03:00 PM
am posting one now Richard - you inspired me thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:46:00 PM
On my way to check it out.
Date: 11/30/2014 9:55:00 AM
The train has left the station and what an awesome train -- well done good friend!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:39:00 PM
Thanks David, you are kind.
Date: 11/30/2014 8:56:00 AM
Congratulations on poem of the day.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 9:11:00 AM
Thanks for taking a ride on the train.
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