Richard Lamoureux Poet Verse

Beneath the Shattered

Test me
I am willing
To fail

Failure
Is not fatal
At all

All things
Are born to be
Broken

Break free
From the outer
Hard shell

Shells can
Hide the beauty
Within

With love
Flowing freely
We glow

Glowing
For all the world
To see

Seeing
All the beauty
They smile

Smiling
Brings them pleasure
As well

Welling
Up from their soul
A gift

Gifted
To all who are
Shattered


I decided to call this a  "Mussetle Train" try one out it is fun.
2 4 2 non rhyming take a word from the end of each stanza(car)
and use a derivative of it to form the premise of the next car in the train.


I am playing with a non rhyming vesion of the Musette form.
The last word of each stanza forms the premise of the next.

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Edmund Strempfl July 31, 2019 at 10:41 PM Enjoy the style and subject Richard Lamoureux August 1, 2019 at 9:30 AM Thanks Edmund.

Muhammad Imtiaz March 6, 2018 at 4:32 AM Nice and beautiful invention Mussetle Train Richard Lamoureux March 6, 2018 at 7:15 AM Hi Muhammad, thanks for reading my older pieces.

Anisha Dutta October 21, 2015 at 9:36 AM Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta Richard Lamoureux October 21, 2015 at 10:11 AM Thanks Anisha.

Anisha Dutta October 21, 2015 at 9:02 AM Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta

Brittany Larson January 8, 2015 at 10:44 AM This is absolutely beautiful. Very lovely form as well!

Scott Thirtyseven December 23, 2014 at 6:30 PM It does look as though you have been having a bit of fun with this. Love the look of this form. Best of luck with the comp.

Constance La France December 20, 2014 at 9:01 AM Richard, I love your train of poetry, and think this is a wonderful concept for a contest, I am so happy I came to poetry soup today and found this, I am going to start working on it today and thank you so much for all your support and comments on my poetry, I so appreciate it ~~ Richard Lamoureux December 20, 2014 at 9:39 AM So great to have you visit. I look forward to reading your entry.

Connie Marcum Wong December 13, 2014 at 3:10 PM This is wonderful and a fun challenge. I hope I can find the time to write one for your contest Richard. Yours is great! Richard Lamoureux December 14, 2014 at 7:20 PM I hope you give it a try, I think you would do great.

Ovidiu Bocsa December 10, 2014 at 9:56 AM You caught the train,many poets run after...

Paul Callus December 4, 2014 at 4:17 PM This Mussetle Train is a clever variation of the Musette form; to have it rhyming would be very hard! I have been wrestling with it for over an hour! But I think I have come up with something! // paul

Casarah Nance December 2, 2014 at 7:13 PM ahh and now I have found the directions, you know i sure do love trying something new. :) :) Richard Lamoureux December 3, 2014 at 6:08 PM Excellent Casarah, I am sure you will be a natural.

Donna Jones December 2, 2014 at 8:00 AM This was a wonderful way to start my day Richard....really enjoyed it....and may have to try this form....looks so fun..and yes had a great holiday ..hope you did....:-) Richard Lamoureux December 3, 2014 at 6:09 PM I hope you do Donna. Thanks for the visit.

Monterey Sirak December 2, 2014 at 6:40 AM This is a form I may have to try. (not too many rules). This is a fav! The entire poem is amazing but I especially like the third and last stanzas. Belated congrats on being chosen poem of the day. Richard Lamoureux December 3, 2014 at 6:09 PM Thanks Monterey. ;0)

Timothy Hicks December 1, 2014 at 9:24 PM When inspiration strikes me I'll be sure to give it a go! Richard Lamoureux December 3, 2014 at 6:10 PM I hope it strikes in time for you to enter the contest. Toot! Toot!

Brenda Meier-Hans December 1, 2014 at 5:22 PM Congratulations on poem of the day. Sorry I 'm late. Richard Lamoureux December 1, 2014 at 5:58 PM No worries Brenda, apology not required.

Timothy Hicks December 1, 2014 at 2:30 AM Wait a sec, you made this up? How cool! Most creative of you, Rick. And you've created a most lovely poem as well - you should look up Kintsugi: the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with melted gold. It's to signify that things are more beautiful - when they are broken. Richard Lamoureux December 1, 2014 at 8:56 AM Hi Tim, yes I hope it catches on. I would be honored if you give it a go. I wrote a poem about kintsugi, I like the metophor it offers for our redemption.

Sandra Haight November 30, 2014 at 10:30 PM Hi Richard, just saw your poem was selected for POTD! Congratulations! Very intriguing form...I saw your contest and am looking forward to trying this! I enjoyed your poem very much - it does not look easy! Sandra Richard Lamoureux December 1, 2014 at 8:58 AM I am pleased you are going to give it a try. Thanks for your visit.

Eileen Manassian November 30, 2014 at 10:24 PM Well, lookie who's here? My Guardian Poet. :) I'm always proud of you, Richard. Love your work and the way your mind works. You're so creative. This being a case in point. I will join the train...after my classes are over for the way. Back to congratulate you on being POTD. :) Richard Lamoureux December 1, 2014 at 9:01 AM I am so glad you are going to join the train. I am off to see what new gems you have come up with today.

Leon Enriquez November 30, 2014 at 8:58 PM Dear Richard: Well done. Congratulations for the POTD. And this style is not easy. All the best then, Leon. Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 10:00 PM Thanks Leon.

Lauren Smith November 30, 2014 at 6:59 PM fantastic job love it Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 7:04 PM Thanks Lauren.

Maurice Yvonne November 30, 2014 at 3:00 PM This is brilliant Richard I hope it gets accepted as a new form. A Fav for me. Congratulation on your Mussetle Form being chosen a poem of the day. Love you Richard Congratulations. Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 4:43 PM That would be great, get on the Train Maurice! I can use your help getting it out of the station.

Brenda Meier-Hans November 30, 2014 at 2:40 PM Looks like fun Richard. Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 4:44 PM Thanks Brenda, check out my contest, you would be a natural.

Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 2:03 PM am posting one now Richard - you inspired me thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 4:46 PM On my way to check it out.

David Meade November 30, 2014 at 9:55 AM The train has left the station and what an awesome train -- well done good friend! Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 4:39 PM Thanks David, you are kind.

Carol Eastman November 30, 2014 at 8:56 AM Congratulations on poem of the day. Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 9:11 AM Thanks for taking a ride on the train.

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