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Beneath the Shattered

Test me
I am willing
To fail

Failure
Is not fatal
At all

All things
Are born to be
Broken

Break free
From the outer
Hard shell

Shells can
Hide the beauty
Within

With love
Flowing freely
We glow

Glowing
For all the world
To see

Seeing
All the beauty
They smile

Smiling
Brings them pleasure
As well

Welling
Up from their soul
A gift

Gifted
To all who are
Shattered


I decided to call this a  "Mussetle Train" try one out it is fun.
2 4 2 non rhyming take a word from the end of each stanza(car)
and use a derivative of it to form the premise of the next car in the train.


I am playing with a non rhyming vesion of the Musette form.
The last word of each stanza forms the premise of the next.

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Edmund Strempfl Date: 7/31/2019 10:41:00 PM Enjoy the style and subject Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2019 9:30:00 AM Thanks Edmund.

Muhammad Imtiaz Date: 3/6/2018 4:32:00 AM Nice and beautiful invention Mussetle Train Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/6/2018 7:15:00 AM Hi Muhammad, thanks for reading my older pieces.

Anisha Dutta Date: 10/21/2015 9:36:00 AM Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/21/2015 10:11:00 AM Thanks Anisha.

Anisha Dutta Date: 10/21/2015 9:02:00 AM Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta Login to Reply

Brittany Larson Date: 1/8/2015 10:44:00 AM This is absolutely beautiful. Very lovely form as well! Login to Reply

Scott Thirtyseven Date: 12/23/2014 6:30:00 PM It does look as though you have been having a bit of fun with this. Love the look of this form. Best of luck with the comp. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 12/20/2014 9:01:00 AM Richard, I love your train of poetry, and think this is a wonderful concept for a contest, I am so happy I came to poetry soup today and found this, I am going to start working on it today and thank you so much for all your support and comments on my poetry, I so appreciate it ~~ Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/20/2014 9:39:00 AM So great to have you visit. I look forward to reading your entry.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 12/13/2014 3:10:00 PM This is wonderful and a fun challenge. I hope I can find the time to write one for your contest Richard. Yours is great! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/14/2014 7:20:00 PM I hope you give it a try, I think you would do great.

Ovidiu Bocsa Date: 12/10/2014 9:56:00 AM You caught the train,many poets run after... Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 12/4/2014 4:17:00 PM This Mussetle Train is a clever variation of the Musette form; to have it rhyming would be very hard! I have been wrestling with it for over an hour! But I think I have come up with something! // paul Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 12/2/2014 7:13:00 PM ahh and now I have found the directions, you know i sure do love trying something new. :) :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2014 6:08:00 PM Excellent Casarah, I am sure you will be a natural.

Donna Jones Date: 12/2/2014 8:00:00 AM This was a wonderful way to start my day Richard....really enjoyed it....and may have to try this form....looks so fun..and yes had a great holiday ..hope you did....:-) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM I hope you do Donna. Thanks for the visit.

Monterey Sirak Date: 12/2/2014 6:40:00 AM This is a form I may have to try. (not too many rules). This is a fav! The entire poem is amazing but I especially like the third and last stanzas. Belated congrats on being chosen poem of the day. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM Thanks Monterey. ;0)

Timothy Hicks Date: 12/1/2014 9:24:00 PM When inspiration strikes me I'll be sure to give it a go! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2014 6:10:00 PM I hope it strikes in time for you to enter the contest. Toot! Toot!

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 12/1/2014 5:22:00 PM Congratulations on poem of the day. Sorry I 'm late. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 5:58:00 PM No worries Brenda, apology not required.

Timothy Hicks Date: 12/1/2014 2:30:00 AM Wait a sec, you made this up? How cool! Most creative of you, Rick. And you've created a most lovely poem as well - you should look up Kintsugi: the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with melted gold. It's to signify that things are more beautiful - when they are broken. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 8:56:00 AM Hi Tim, yes I hope it catches on. I would be honored if you give it a go. I wrote a poem about kintsugi, I like the metophor it offers for our redemption.

Sandra Haight Date: 11/30/2014 10:30:00 PM Hi Richard, just saw your poem was selected for POTD! Congratulations! Very intriguing form...I saw your contest and am looking forward to trying this! I enjoyed your poem very much - it does not look easy! Sandra Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 8:58:00 AM I am pleased you are going to give it a try. Thanks for your visit.

Eileen Manassian Date: 11/30/2014 10:24:00 PM Well, lookie who's here? My Guardian Poet. :) I'm always proud of you, Richard. Love your work and the way your mind works. You're so creative. This being a case in point. I will join the train...after my classes are over for the way. Back to congratulate you on being POTD. :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2014 9:01:00 AM I am so glad you are going to join the train. I am off to see what new gems you have come up with today.

Leon Enriquez Date: 11/30/2014 8:58:00 PM Dear Richard: Well done. Congratulations for the POTD. And this style is not easy. All the best then, Leon. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 10:00:00 PM Thanks Leon.

Lauren Smith Date: 11/30/2014 6:59:00 PM fantastic job love it Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 7:04:00 PM Thanks Lauren.

Maurice Yvonne Date: 11/30/2014 3:00:00 PM This is brilliant Richard I hope it gets accepted as a new form. A Fav for me. Congratulation on your Mussetle Form being chosen a poem of the day. Love you Richard Congratulations. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 4:43:00 PM That would be great, get on the Train Maurice! I can use your help getting it out of the station.

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 11/30/2014 2:40:00 PM Looks like fun Richard. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 4:44:00 PM Thanks Brenda, check out my contest, you would be a natural.

Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 2:03:00 PM am posting one now Richard - you inspired me thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xxx Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 4:46:00 PM On my way to check it out.

David Meade Date: 11/30/2014 9:55:00 AM The train has left the station and what an awesome train -- well done good friend! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 4:39:00 PM Thanks David, you are kind.

Carol Eastman Date: 11/30/2014 8:56:00 AM Congratulations on poem of the day. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 9:11:00 AM Thanks for taking a ride on the train.

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