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Beneath the Shattered

Test me I am willing To fail Failure Is not fatal At all All things Are born to be Broken Break free From the outer Hard shell Shells can Hide the beauty Within With love Flowing freely We glow Glowing For all the world To see Seeing All the beauty They smile Smiling Brings them pleasure As well Welling Up from their soul A gift Gifted To all who are Shattered I decided to call this a "Mussetle Train" try one out it is fun. 2 4 2 non rhyming take a word from the end of each stanza(car) and use a derivative of it to form the premise of the next car in the train. I am playing with a non rhyming vesion of the Musette form. The last word of each stanza forms the premise of the next.

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Edmund Strempfl

Date: 7/31/2019 10:41:00 PM

Enjoy the style and subject

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/1/2019 9:30:00 AM

Thanks Edmund.

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 3/6/2018 4:32:00 AM

Nice and beautiful invention Mussetle Train

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/6/2018 7:15:00 AM

Hi Muhammad, thanks for reading my older pieces.

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/21/2015 9:36:00 AM

Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2015 10:11:00 AM

Thanks Anisha.

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/21/2015 9:02:00 AM

Very Nice Piece. I love it Anisha Dutta

Brittany Larson

Date: 1/8/2015 10:44:00 AM

This is absolutely beautiful. Very lovely form as well!

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 12/23/2014 6:30:00 PM

It does look as though you have been having a bit of fun with this. Love the look of this form. Best of luck with the comp.

Constance La France

Date: 12/20/2014 9:01:00 AM

Richard, I love your train of poetry, and think this is a wonderful concept for a contest, I am so happy I came to poetry soup today and found this, I am going to start working on it today and thank you so much for all your support and comments on my poetry, I so appreciate it ~~

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/20/2014 9:39:00 AM

So great to have you visit. I look forward to reading your entry.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/13/2014 3:10:00 PM

This is wonderful and a fun challenge. I hope I can find the time to write one for your contest Richard. Yours is great!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/14/2014 7:20:00 PM

I hope you give it a try, I think you would do great.

Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 12/10/2014 9:56:00 AM

You caught the train,many poets run after...

Paul Callus

Date: 12/4/2014 4:17:00 PM

This Mussetle Train is a clever variation of the Musette form; to have it rhyming would be very hard! I have been wrestling with it for over an hour! But I think I have come up with something! // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 12/2/2014 7:13:00 PM

ahh and now I have found the directions, you know i sure do love trying something new. :) :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:08:00 PM

Excellent Casarah, I am sure you will be a natural.

Donna Jones

Date: 12/2/2014 8:00:00 AM

This was a wonderful way to start my day Richard....really enjoyed it....and may have to try this form....looks so fun..and yes had a great holiday ..hope you did....:-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM

I hope you do Donna. Thanks for the visit.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 12/2/2014 6:40:00 AM

This is a form I may have to try. (not too many rules). This is a fav! The entire poem is amazing but I especially like the third and last stanzas. Belated congrats on being chosen poem of the day.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:09:00 PM

Thanks Monterey. ;0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 9:24:00 PM

When inspiration strikes me I'll be sure to give it a go!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2014 6:10:00 PM

I hope it strikes in time for you to enter the contest. Toot! Toot!

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/1/2014 5:22:00 PM

Congratulations on poem of the day. Sorry I 'm late.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 5:58:00 PM

No worries Brenda, apology not required.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 2:30:00 AM

Wait a sec, you made this up? How cool! Most creative of you, Rick. And you've created a most lovely poem as well - you should look up Kintsugi: the Japanese art of repairing broken pottery with melted gold. It's to signify that things are more beautiful - when they are broken.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 8:56:00 AM

Hi Tim, yes I hope it catches on. I would be honored if you give it a go. I wrote a poem about kintsugi, I like the metophor it offers for our redemption.

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/30/2014 10:30:00 PM

Hi Richard, just saw your poem was selected for POTD! Congratulations! Very intriguing form...I saw your contest and am looking forward to trying this! I enjoyed your poem very much - it does not look easy! Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 8:58:00 AM

I am pleased you are going to give it a try. Thanks for your visit.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/30/2014 10:24:00 PM

Well, lookie who's here? My Guardian Poet. :) I'm always proud of you, Richard. Love your work and the way your mind works. You're so creative. This being a case in point. I will join the train...after my classes are over for the way. Back to congratulate you on being POTD. :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 9:01:00 AM

I am so glad you are going to join the train. I am off to see what new gems you have come up with today.

Leon Enriquez

Date: 11/30/2014 8:58:00 PM

Dear Richard: Well done. Congratulations for the POTD. And this style is not easy. All the best then, Leon.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 10:00:00 PM

Thanks Leon.

Lauren Smith

Date: 11/30/2014 6:59:00 PM

fantastic job love it

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 7:04:00 PM

Thanks Lauren.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/30/2014 3:00:00 PM

This is brilliant Richard I hope it gets accepted as a new form. A Fav for me. Congratulation on your Mussetle Form being chosen a poem of the day. Love you Richard Congratulations.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:43:00 PM

That would be great, get on the Train Maurice! I can use your help getting it out of the station.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/30/2014 2:40:00 PM

Looks like fun Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:44:00 PM

Thanks Brenda, check out my contest, you would be a natural.